Talk:Atticus Cardinal/@comment-67.164.5.226-20130909061702

I'm sorry but this character is really off putting to me.

Let me start with his backstory. First of all, if he was beaten by police officers multiple times, he would end up with a few broken bones and if they are left untreated he would get severe joint pain which means he wouldn't really be in good condition to fight anything.

On to my next topic, how did he make it into Signal? He lived on the streets his whole life so how did he apply to Signal and how would he get accepted? Did he teach himself how to write and how to read? There's no explanation as to why and how he got into the academy.

His muscular build is impossible if he lived in the streets and only got food from the garbage. He would have been malnourished as a kid and unable to get the proper nutrients to get a body like he has right now. So technically he IS weaker than the others from the severe joint pain he would get from the untreated broken bones and the malnourishment from the spoiled foods in the trash. He should be at least a little bit skinnier than he is right now.

His weapon is also in bad shape. The trigger is placed as it would be in a pistol. The long part of the tonfa should be next to your forearm but the placement of the trigger makes it look like he's holding two pistols, which looks silly if you were to actually use regular tonfas. Also, they look like regular tonfas. That's not necessarily a good thing since the weapon is also a gun. All it has is a barrel which means that Atticus built it incomplete. And the hidden blades: where are they? How do they come out and how do they retract? I'm not sure since you left that detail out.

One more note: Vytal is actually the name of the world in RWBY. Not a country.

I'm sorry if these pieces of criticism offends you in anyway.