Thread:DustpeltX/@comment-35675122-20180617121247

I understand where you're coming from with the broken capabilities of the Semblance. That was a complete oversight on my part. I merely wished to compensate his physical weakness with something like technomancy. Apparently, I overcompensated. So I ask this; would ommiting the manipulation of broadcasting devices balance out the Semblance adequately?

Concerning the primary weapon, I also understand why that's rejected. That was more of an attempt to test the waters considering current knowledge of technology. I would try to debate, but I doubt using Penny as evidence would pose a convincing argument. Nonetheless, I will have to change a few mechanics to the character as only getting rid of it makes him broken yet again since his Semblance pre-alteration allowed him to control robots he touched from as far away as he wanted while having access to as many robots as he wanted.

As for my style of writing, I can understand the monotony of it can be rather unappealing. I tried to make it organized, but became too specific with the organization. I will try to adopt a different writing style, but I'm not too sure that I will be adequate with it. Along with that, I may have to rework the page of a previous work of mine based upon that judgement. Which portion would you advise I cut down on? What bits of information would be deemed excessive?

Thank you for reviewing my character. I apologize for making such mistakes. I plan on making adequate changes as soon as I get your response. 