Talk:Pearle Bengali/@comment-27743663-20170804010528

CNR, not going to accept Hue as a color, since it's not a color. As you say, it's a way to describe the shade of a color, which is too overarching and doesn't settle on one color, because it can mean any color. You were fine with Pearle, you just needed to say it was based off actual white pearls. I would recommend doing that, since you left the name Pearle literred around the page anyway.

Though, this one is my fault for not catching it earlier, are his claws a faunus feature as well? I'd have to assume so being razor sharp, and normal human ones not being so. OC's can only have one faunus trait per character, so, pick between the ears or the claws.

Once again, the backstory still has issues. Even ignoring everything else, I doubt an 8 year old can successfully combat against trained combatants such as White Fang members, especially with a newly awakened Semblance. And, as you say, leave a trail of shredded bodies. I just don't see it as feasibly possible, given he's not even had any training in combat himself beforehand, and if his experimentation somehow gave him the power to casaully do that, that's not okay either.

I'd ask why the Hunter suddenly took him in and decided to train in, but that kind of detail isn't really so much as the basic summary, so it's fine.

Semblance clarifications have been noted tas well. I'd really just ask how it looks and attacks now, but that's moreso to make RP-ing easier. I can only assuming it'd be through normal close quarters, given it can't seem to create anything else. I'd also question why he's afraid to use it, given you state it's a defensive thing, though I guess something like a trauma of using the semblance reminding him of the experimentation works.

Anyway, tl;dr

Rejected on

- CNR doesn't work

- Two faunus traits

- Background hard to believe, killing trained White Fang combatants at 8 despite not having the combat training to do so.

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