Talk:Clay "Razor" Weston/@comment-933831-20131023001413

Okay.... Most parts of the character's weapons and backstory have some sort of issues.

Weapons:

Not really worth rejecting over, but: "His sword/gun is named the Crimson Death." Gah.... Why? I mean... there are so many better names you could have used... The weapon is a Rifle Shotgun... How exactly does that work? A rifle is a very different kind of gun. In addition, Semi Auto would make Lever action completely pointless. It does everything Lever does, much better and faster.

Now for the shotgun part. Is it a second weapon? It seems to be, though you don't really say. And... The hook thing is firstly, pretty much ripped from Blake, and a FAR more overpowered version. Like... Are you even aware of how far a mile and a half is?

You also mention his "Unique ability" to make Glyphs. And then say other people who can do that. I'm starting to see what happened here. We said a character has to fit in with RWBY, so you decided to mash several RWBY characters together. It... doesn't really work that way.

Backstory:

As short as it is, the backstory is chronologically screwy. Razor was never mentioned in Black's profile, and if Black went to school and a few years later, Razor did, he'd be going to Beacon at least 2 years AFTER the current roleplays are taking place. That just doesn't make any sense. For these many reasons, rejected.

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