Talk:Desmond Cirith/@comment-25924729-20191124060015

Oh cool! A non huntsman OC is always a refreshing one to read.

Appearance and Personality are alright. Pretty good.

Backstory is alright, I really like the world building of his nomadic tribe. It can be seen a lot of thought went into that, I can appreciate it.

His weapon is very cool, if a bit overkill for an artist imo. Nothing wrong with that, just... jeezus that's a big gun o.o.

Semblance was alright up until the part about masking his presence? It's a little confusing, I don't see how spreading aura over a wide area makes him harder to detect. Maybe it works if another person is using their own aura to track his, but as far as we know aura doesn't do anything to affect sight, smell, sound based tracking. Grimm and humans not relying on aura should still be able to find him.

While I'm personally fine with this, other reviewers also argue aura is part of one's soul, and should not be able to be spread out away from ones body like that.

His other abilities seem fine. CNR works, no other issues found.

Just the semblance needs to be better explained, or parts of it revised.

Rejected.

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