Talk:Professor Alexander Scarlet/@comment-25924729-20190609150612

Ooh, a criminology teacher. Interesting idea for an OC, could be interesting!

Appearance and personality, hmm... they should be seperated into their own sections to make it easier to read. The appearance part seems good, but the personaliy section could use a lot more details and explanation too.

HIs fighting style seems alright, however you must also list down his semblance, as well as more details about his weapon. Add sections for each one, give brief details about how they work, what they can do, limitations, strengths and weaknesses. You should also descibe how his weapon looks, and if it transforms how each form looks or how it transforms. Even if he does not have a weapon or semblance, you must say so on the page.

Moving to his backstory section, there are a few problems here. Firstly is about the part where he forms a 2 man team with Blackwood. While it is plausible that 2 man teams are allowed, having his be the very first case of this ever and having the special permission of Beacon's headmaster potentially affects canon lore and makes assumptions about the lore a bit too much. He can be part of a 2 man team, but just not the first, or under special treatment by the headmaster.

The same issue also affects the assassination attempt on Beacon's headmaster. A character's backstory being involved with a prominent figure for RWBY's world like he Headmaster of Beacon definitely breaks our rule on not interacting with canon characters, and potentially interferes with canon events. I cannot allow this. At the very most, he could save a teacher or important Beacon staff member, or an important politician or government minister. Just not anyone on the level of importance as a Headmaster of one of the world's most famous schools.

Last issue in the backstory is him being promoted by the Vale Council. This is... kinda hard to decide on. Theres no evidence that a Vale Council even exists, and if you want to make one you cant, since that would also break canon. Yet there is an Atlas Council, so a Vale counterpart is every likely to exist despite a lack of evidence... i would personally put this under Awaiting Canon Information. While not strictly rejectable, its best to avoid this issue. You can have him knighted by the government in general, or not at all, just avoid mentioning the Vale Council.

The last issue on this page is in the Trivia section. All RWBY characters' first names must reference a colour, weither by meaning a colour, sounding like a colour, or making you think of a colour. This Colour Name Reference must be explained in the Trivia section. So you will have to find a colour related theme for the name Alexander and add it to the page, or change the name if you cant.

Overall a very interesting character. Some problems, but this is fixable and normal. You should hop by the Discord chat sometime. People there can help a lot in making characters.

Rejected.

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