Talk:Eridius 'Umbrella' Craine/@comment-24678303-20160502163400

Ehh? Why was Jord's review only tha...Okay, yeahnope. Just, everything here. Guess this is gonna be quite a long one, because bleh.

That ENTIRE suit is just a big fat nope. Like, as a whole, it appears to be ripped from a game. On top of that, literally everything there is just so lore-breaking and cringeworthy, there is no place to start, as it is all bad.

The personality is a lackthereof. He's literally just an obedient zombie from the looks of things, there's not really that much character even there.

Resistance to Gamma Rays? Uranium??? Okay, i'm not even going to go further into the backstory. I'll stop you right there. Firstly, why??? Secondly, this REALLY seems ripped straight out of a game. Thirdly, all of the above-mentioned is so lore-breaking, it's not even funny. I'm just at a loss for words glancing through the backstory, i can see why Jord didn't want to deal with this, and i do not blame him.

Weapon! So, Diamonds are the hardest substance that we know. That is 58% harder than that, making it some sort of Unobtanium. Plus, as a whole, the weapon looks to be very unsuited to this character. Like, just slapped on without so much as a thought put into if it fits him or not. Let's see, beyond that it is an energy weapon...That's radioactve???? No, no, no, and lastly, NO.

A Semblance that allows him to project 'Gamma Radiation from his hands?!?! 'NO.

Okay, look, this character, as it is now, has no chance of being Accepted. At all. Period. End of story. Go through, thouroughly familiarize yourself with the rules, then make a new thing. It doesn't matter if this is an Antagonist or not, there is no reason for this to be so far out of the RWBY Canon.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~