Talk:Kandice Whittle/@comment-25924729-20200211134000

Very interesting ideas all around, Moby Dick was a fun book to read, and it's nice to see the references.

Appearance is alright, but for a very long time I thought I was gonna have to reject cause you didn't mention any faunus traits. I only found it much later down the page. The trait as echolocation itself is alright (though whales use their foreheads instead of ears to do it, RWBY has ignored realistic animal anatomy before so this is fine), but to avoid confusion maybe you should mention she does have a faunus trait even if its not obvious in the appearance section.

Personality section is good.

Backstory was a very fun read, had a nice gritty feel to it. There is one problem though, we haven't seen anything in the show suggesting aura can be unlocked from a distance by someone else like in her backstory. To be fair we don't understand how aura works overall due to limited information, but what we do know suggests aura being unlocked by someone else is done through touching at close range, not long range. That's an issue that needs to be fixed. Maybe have her aura already unlocked by the father before falling in the water and only locking her semblance in there, or unlocking both aura and semblance herself in the water without outside help. Other parts of the backstory are fine.

Weapon and semblance are fine. I like the limits and restrictions to its use, very unique. Fighting style is good. Echolocation via faunus trait is also a cool ability to have.

No issues in Relationships and Trivia  section, CNR works.

Very good character overall, nice work. The only real issue is the aura unlocking, but maybe also mention her faunus trait under Appearance.

Rejected.

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