Thread:Taki-Tan/@comment-30202748-20170416202632/@comment-29264888-20170417223613

(Rambling my thoughts onto the keyboard. If it doesn't make sense, tell me.)

While I was reading through the appearance, I suddenly thought of a skinnier and/or younger version Wolverine or Sabretooth from the X-men.

If you also add in the retractable claws that is.

Aside from that, here's what I think:

Appearance: Whatever clothing you choose is up to you. Since you're happy with it, I don't need to question anything.

Personality: You already have a general idea of who you're character is going to be. Doesn't seem like i need to help too much. Maybe you just need to touch up a little on the wording?

We'll give it some thought.

Reiterating a description of your personality, you're trying to make a witty freelance mercenary who is selfishly guided by his own desires. Though it is true to an extent, he does in fact have a genuine side that isn't as apparent.

Wrong or right?

As for the business, pretty sure you can make one. I think that's just up to you whether or not you want it. I don't have a definite opinion. However, you might have to give some thought to whether your character can even manage a business such as a night club or a bar while at the same time doing mercenary work.

Maybe your OC watches over his business on some days and on other days he has some trustworthy companions to do it. In other words, your character is going to have a schedule.

Unless there's a reason he doesn't.

If you do have a business, don't mention it in the personality section; probably somewhere else like in the Trivia. If it's important enough, maybe try and mention details like how he started owning the place.

Weapons:

Again, weapons are up to you. Your current weapon bears similarities to Yang's weapons, but yada yada.

I have no problem against it.

For your secondary weapons, it did state that you can have secondary weapons. However, I don't think they stated how many different types of weapons you can have. I'm seeing that you have two secondary weapons, your machete and pistol (sidearms count as secondary).

Again, seems fine to me. Might have to ask someone else whether you can have more than one secondary.

Your attack dog seems to be more of like a companion than a weapon. You should be able to keep him/her.

Semblace:

We got to talk further about this. I think I know what you are trying to go for, but I have no definite idea.

Skills and Talents:

Since your character is going to use hand-to-hand combat as their main form of fighting, try and explain their type of style. Explaining how they fight is good way to help others visualize your character.

Semblance control should be a given to everyone once they unlock and understand it. I think the better words is that he is proficent and/or creative with how he utilizes his semblance. Until I inquire more about what your semblance is, I won't say more on this.

As for your OC's high aura reserves, I don't have anything against it nor does it seem to matter too much for me. But for me, rather than say he has high aura reserves, I'd say that he is proficent in managing his aura so he doesn't wear out too easily.

Weakness:

I don't think you even need to add this part in. As a hand-to-hand combatant, it's a dead given he'll have trouble with longer ranged enemies. You can always add that despite his disadvantages, he is experienced enough to know what to do when he's in such a predicament.

As for the rest of the part, it's better if you mention it in his personality. As to what is written, you're telling the readers that he's reckless when fighting, preferably relying on instinct rather than reason.

History:

Since there's really nothing really written here, I'm just going to hold judgement until there is.

Your idea seems fine to me.