Talk:Linnea Oleander/@comment-24828824-20180204131445

Ok I am not a reviewer but I can already point out one or two things you want to work on before submitting the OC to the pending category:

There seems to be some information missing, there is a weapon mentioned in the trivia but no further description, there is also no mention of Linnea's curent age and no indication of Linnea's current situation (has she applied to a combat school? is she still living on Menagerie or moved away?). Also the background stops at 7 years old, does this mean Linnea is only 7 at the start of her story here or is she older? and if the latter what else happened to her since losing her father?

Lastly i would like to point out that the White Fang for most of their existence were not a bad thing to the people of Menagerie. The current chieftain of Kuo Kuana was leader of the White Fang until only 5 years prior to the show start and after that while they became more violent under the rule of Sierra Khan they were still respected by the majority of the Faunus. It is unlikely there would be any need for Sterling Oleander to hide his involvement with the White Fang when Linnea was 7.

I'd recommend expanding on this profile before submitting it for review, and if you run into problems or get stuck you an always join the Discord chatroom and ask for help there.