Talk:Emerald Verona/@comment-24012109-20170620185909

Alright, so. While it can be nice to not be long-winded in explanations, this profile is way below explanatory details. You could definitely bring out more out of her character aside basic words. Aside the minor detail that a gown is a terrible choice of clothing to actively fight in, there's also the problem of "summoning" out of nothing, as well as there being no reference to what a "Mountain Sentinel" is. You're going to have to explain it or change it to something more feasible.

It's also worth noting that Patch is an Island, off of **Vale**, and that relationships with headmasters are typically forbidden outside of typical student/staff relations.

As for such, Rejected for now. You are free to ask me for assistance, and also take notes and basic structure from:

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Guidelines

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Character_sheet_base#Profile

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:EvergreenLeaf/Original_Character_Creating_Guide