Talk:Alice Weston/@comment-9087084-20130816192807

Review:

Appearance wise, I see nothing wrong. Personality wise, she kinda contradicts herself with the whole "cute with Black but blood thirsty thing." Unless you were going for the whole yandere thing, then maybe you should tweak her personality and keep it to one aspect.

Power wise, she seems abit OP. The elemental breath and claws are cool, but I suggest picking only one of those abilities, not two, as they make her seem unbeatable.

For her backstory, again I'm getting yandere vibes from her relationship with Black. Again, if this is what you were aiming for then just specify it, as her interactions with Black seem creepy without doing so.

Finally, the whole dragon thing can easily be removed or changed. Try to make her into a fauna, and even that is controversial, as we haven't seen any legit fauna characters in RWBY yet. Furthermore, if she is part of the "Red Forest Experiment" thing, then just specify that as well.

Overall, a good OC that just needs a little clarification and moderation concerning her abilities.