Talk:Lawna Lelantos/@comment-30530552-20170504025042

Alright, let's take a look at what we have here.

CNR checks out.

Appearance and Personality are fine, if a bit lacking in length. I can let that slide, though, since your descriptions are very much to the point.

History, it was fine for the above categories, but your backstories need to be longer. I get that mysterious origins are a necessity for soem characters, but here the minimum requirement to have a decent backstory is usually around 3 to 4 paragraphs. I recommend you add some additional content so you can flesh her out some more.

Weapon is simple and to the point [pun intended]. I presume when this blood is taken from humans their Aura is not active?

Semblance, mmm...I'm going to have to say no. For one thing, blood-based powers have always been a touchy subject on this site, so maybe it would be wise to just make it a simple tracking ability, not requiring blood. Along that same line, aside from the necessity for blood, your ability has no visible demerits and is lacking in some much needed detail.

Overall, it's a start, but you need to fill it with more content.

-Rejected.

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