Talk:Jade figaro/@comment-8182065-20150630210505

So, just gonna drop a few helpful links: boom, boom, boom, and boom. Also I'd highly recommend that you take a look at some guides as well to better develop your OC.

Letting you know now that the naming rule applies to the first/whole name rather than the character's surname. Went ahead and looked up Liam for you, and it doesn't bring a color to mind honestly; that website is good if you want to look up a few meanings of other names.

Don't say "Snake-like Faunus" just say Snake Faunus if he is one. If not, then what sort of Faunus is he? Komodo Dragon (not an actual dragon), Gecko, etc. there's lots of different reptiles to choose from. Along with that Faunus only have 1 known animal trait (Blake's ears, Sun's tail) and advanced night vision, so you have to choose one between the eyes and the tongue.

Being socially awkward and his confidence in front of crowds are two personalities that really clash IMO, so I would try to fix that.

If he's a Beacon student, what is his weapon? What does it look like?

Take out that bit with him nailing any target "perfectly" with anything, as nobody is perfect; everyone has their physical flaws as well as mental ones. And you should add a little more to your backstory too. How long was he trained in marksmanship for? Does he have any other skills? How was it like in the circus? How did he get inspired to become a Hunter? What exactly got him into Beacon? Ozpin doesn't send acceptance letters out to everyone like Oprah.

While making your OC, act like you're a reporter and the next story for your company is about them. Treat character creation like an interview, ask them (just ask yourself of course) tons of questions about their likes, dislikes, life, inspirations, etc. Just a tip to help you out.

-Takeshi