Talk:Pearl Crevan Lotus/@comment-25924729-20190624031131

Cool character. Kunoichi girls are nice, she seems very well written too~

Appearance section seems nice, detailed and interesting character design. Have to ask what's her Faunus trait though? It's said she's a Faunus but I cant find any mention of a trait anywhere. Maybe you forgot? Please add that to the Appearance section.

Personality and backstory are very fascinating. The history of and workings of the ninja clan were really well fleshed out, as was the effect they had on the character. It really feels like someone seeking escapism to leave behind a hopeless life. Had fun reading, genuinely feel bad for her, and that's solid character writing.

Onto her combat sections. We do have some new rules regarding Hardlight Dust projections and weapon number limits. Each Hardlight Dust melee weapon projected counts as one transformation form, and each OC will only be allowed a maximum of 4 "points" which are deducted by having transformations or certain abilities for their weapons. In this case, having two weapons with two transformations each: hairpin blades and pistols, plus two points taken by the Hardlight dust projections puts her at 6 points total, too many.

It's... Kinda hard to explain. We staff have talked about this in the discord chat but I know you don't get on often, so I understand you may not know this. Sorry for the inconvenience... Basically, you will have to either cut down a few transformations, or remove the Hardlight Dust parts to bring the points down to 4.

The rest of her combat abilities seem good. She's strong, but has the right background training to justify it. Semblance is really cool, balanced and good, literally called it a Stand lol.

CNR works. No other issues found.

It's mostly just the weapons that need a bit of revising, and a small thing in Appearance. On behalf of staff, sorry for not letting you know these kind of things sooner...

Rejected.

If you have any questions please DM me on Wikia or Discord.

~RP Moderation Team~