Talk:Ahroras Seldom/@comment-13593058-20170726163613

 Ahroras Seldom Review

Appearance
Description of appearance present.

Personality
Point of personaility made. It is however, a bit too lengthy and can definitely benefit from some summarization.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon number exceeded. The Guidelines impose one primary weapon (Oven mit) and one secondary weapon. Currently the secondary weapon is taken up by too types of completely different weapons, the throwing forks and the adhesive balls. Pick one, or have her only carry one of them at a time but can switch between them during rearmament. Grounds for rejection.

Semblance is creative and simple, well done.

Backstory
Backstory has no contradictions but contains some unnecessary falvour texts. Not too much of a problem but noticable.

Miscellaneous
 Colour reference acknowledged.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Exceeded weapon count

Review Summary
Nothing I didn't mention above.

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