Talk:Rubra Wolfsbane/@comment-13593058-20160806205914

 Rubra Wolfsbane Review

Appearance
Nothing technical to note.

Personality
Point of personality made, nothing major to note.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon amount followed, however, the number of options available for the puppets is too high with a normal mode, an exo-skeletal mode, axe mode and Dust armour. Grounds for rejection.

Semblance needs to be revised as it contradicts several guidelines. No unbreakable strings, puppeteering of other characters. Grounds for rejection

Backstory
Backstory is difficult to understand. Grounds for rejection.

Miscellaneous
 Colour reference acknowledged.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Weapon contradiction

- Semblance contradiction

- Confusion backstory

- Bad rhetoric and grammar

Review Summary
The character will need some work; in particular to her weapons, Semblance, backstory, and rhetoric.

The weapons itself have two many things going for it. How you improve it is up to you. There is also the fact that as physical puppets, they are rather vulnerable to being destroyed without the protection of Aura unless you were to control them with your Semblance. This is mainly for when you are controlling them via voice control. Suggestion would be to add some retractable strings to the puppets to maintain physical contact with them through Aura.

The Semblance needs to be redone. Basically unbreakable strings... until they break? Confusing and contradics itself.

Finally, the backstory and general wording of the profile is off-putting to say the least and unreadable at worst. Please take the time to review and rewrite some sentences and paragraphs. This is an issue of clarity and understanding.

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