Talk:Eirwen Actaeon/@comment-30530552-20190521164044

Alright, let's see what we have in store here.

CNR references acknowledged and easily verified. Curious to see how his last name might come into play with his story, given the reference to the Greek hero who was punished for his pride. Sounds like you could do interesting things with just that alone.

Appearance section is fine for me. Considering you don't mention any details about them aside from their existence, I'll presume that his cybernetic replacements don't function as weapons beyond what a normal person could do with their fists (save for the extra strength).

Personality has no major contradictions and makes for some neat conflict and potential interactions.

Weapon-wise, under the 4-point system you have one main weapon with 2 forms (Arcblade), thus 2 points, with the extra things is does being a result of Dust or direct function of the blade itself. After some discussion with the others, the other stuff he has (armor, sheath, visor) don't count for points given there's no specific offensive capabilities with them, so despite my initial confusion about the system, you're good to go. This works for me, and I'm curious to see how this weapon set would be used in combat.

Semblance makes sense and is balanced well enough for me.

Backstory seems good.

All in all, solid character you've got here that I'm curious to see more of. I'll note that certain parts were jumpy, grammatically (particularly with sentence structure where it's been separated into fragments as opposed to one longer sentence) but this didn't detract from my understanding of the character or much else. Just something to note for future reference for a cleaner product overall.

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-Accepted

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