Talk:Sorrel Verda/@comment-7838080-20130720050845/@comment-10298385-20130720063622

Oh, gosh! Thank you very much, I'm glad that you like my writing/art! (You shouldn't compare yourself to others too much though ahhh the important thing here is that we enjoy ourselves! ;; Your art is fine and I see a lot potential, keep practicing!)

As for tips on writing, I'm a little confused- do you mean in terms of /how/ I write or /what/ I write about? I'm also not sure if you mean my writing in general or just the way that I wrote this article? I'm not sure if I'm in any position to give out advice, but if it's the latter; I'll do my best to help.

Overall, I try to keep myself detached. I find that (especially when writing about fan made characters) people tend to try to say too much, either because of their attachment to their character or because they're discovering things as they go. I've had Sorrel in my head for quite a while, and while writing this I tried to think 'hm, if he was an actual character, how would he show up? If I knew nothing about him and saw him from that point, how would I write him?' and wrote this. It's more about substance than context, and I referenced Blake's page in the official RWBY wikia quite a bit.

"Although little is known about Blake's personality, she does seem to have some righteous moral obligations in regards to human life, as she disagrees with Adam's plan to blow up the train with the crew still on board."

Rather than 'because this happened-" or "She's ___, so-", they simply stated what happened and what they gathered from it. They didn't try to explain why she cared so much about the crew, because they didn't know.  Sorrel is a mysterious character similar in light as to how Blake is, so I did something similar. Rather than explaining /why/ he's antisocial, I stated that he's antisocial with shades of laziness. Observation, then explanation.

This only really works if your character is a simiar type, though. Some of them like to tell people everything from the get-go; in which writing a telling article would probably be better. Instead of "She aspires to be a Huntress", it would be "Ruby has idolised Hunters and Huntresses since she was a small child, and now hopes to become one herself." Most of the rest is just going over what you wrote and polishing it up.