Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20150113152446/@comment-5426254-20150114174702

Aight, let's see what we got here.

Breyal Yoland: Not bad, actually. Personality is good. I need some more elaboration and specifics on what she calls medium range and multiple opponents. However, I have not seen any Faunus traits, or what type of Faunus she is. I'm a bit iffy on the Semblance, because we don't know exactly how much knowledge of any person that she has. Plus, like some of the other reviewers, I could not find the gemstone on the Internet. Citation needed!

Rejected.

P.S. On a seperate note, you might want to diversify your character writing a little bit. The "joker that's a scary good martial artist that is a force to be reckoned when angry" is slowly becoming a dead horse...

Chloe Chroma: Holy jeez. We don't know what kind of Faunus she is because we see no traits, the Time Semblance is a bit iffy, as I'm not exactly sure that it might fall under banned Semblances, being possibly OP. And for Christ's sake, can you please put in a citation for the name? I can understand it, but other people won't.

Rejected.

Denver Verde: Hmmm.... This guy comes dangerously close to passing, name, personality and all. But not only do we not see some specific limitations, but I have also seen a lack of drawstring in the transformation, and I fail to see how he gets arrows, as I don't know whether they are physical or Dust based. By a narrow margin,

Rejected.

P.S. I do not know if it's just me, or if I have seen his personality archetype before on other characters...

Well, that's all. Smell ya later!