Talk:Spring Apsat/@comment-30530552-20170503011301

Alright, let's have a look.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is fine.

History is a little bit lacking, and could use some more detail with it. Typical length of a character's history is from 3 to 4 paragraphs worth of content, but what you have so far is alright. The other thing of note is that while you made reference to Battle of Beacon in the top of the profile, you did not mention it in the history section...so you'd need to add that.

Weaponry, honestly, I'm not aware of our rules regarding custom Dust types here, as I'm a newer reviewer here...so even though the weapons themselves function okay, the Dust might not. I'm going to bring that up with some of the other reviewers, so until there's an answer, I will say no to that for now, and follow up with you later.

Semblance is fine in function. My question though: what other demerits does it have? It's fine you have a vegetation limitation, but what else do you need to do to make it like that?

Overall, you've got a good start, it just needs some work.

-Rejected.

-RP Moderation Team-

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