Talk:Azure Banneret/@comment-13593058-20170323054448

 Azure Banneret Review

Appearance
Description of appearance present.

Personality
Point of personaility made.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon and Semblance rules followed. However, structure is rather messy and tedious to read. Revision and condensation is advised.

Backstory
Backstory acceptable but contained too much unnesseary detail, consider major condenstion.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced.

Verdict: Accepted
On the grounds of:

- no contradictions

Review Summary
Good job on what I assume to be your first character on this site. Azure is well developed and well balanced in terms of detail and consistency which is all we Reviewers ever look for in characters capable of Roleplay. However, there are still some rookie mistakes present in most of your sections. These mostly have to do with the length and detail.

While I do understand the temptation is describe everything about your character, please keep in mind that this is a character profile page where anyone can come in quickly understand the framework of your character. Giving them a play by play of his or her backstory or even the full list of weaknesses down to several concrete numbers just makes it tedious to read and understand.

I've noted where this problem is most apparent. Other than that, you write fine.  If you require assistance in the matter, feel free to ask other Fanon members for help. Alternatively, you may consult my  character creation guide   for further information regarding my reviewing process. If you believe there to be a misunderstanding or mistake, please contact me via message wall or another reviewer.