Talk:Sandi Beryl/@comment-30530552-20190105031215

Alright, let's go through a full look over the character again since it's been awhile since he's seen the light of day.

CNR works.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is multi-faceted and well-done, if a bit lengthy. A bit of trimming might help with the ease of reading the page a bit faster for anyone in the future. As I've said before, relationships aren't necessary to write, but it does help with fleshing out the personality and backstory a bit more, so kudos.

Weapons, Semblance, and his Abilities all check out.

Backstory-wise, it does it's job, though some sections feel like they could be combined with other closely related sections to form larger paragraphs but less overall. Perhaps a teeny bit of trimming could be done here too.

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Good to see one of your eldest characters is still up and kicking. Keep up the good work.

-Accepted.

~RP Moderation Team~

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