Talk:Sable Désert/@comment-13172690-20150213004932

Interesting character. However, there are a few problems.

If he is a Eagle Faunus, he has to have feathers growing on his body or face, not as an accessory and they only have enhanced night vision.

Its a good weapon concept, though red dust is fire, not for bigger impact.

Also, if he went to a place like Beacon Academy without going to combat school, you would have to explain how he got in. Their combat test or fake transcripts. And if he got accepted he would have to have a team.

Lastly, the semblance is balanced through I would suggest taking out the part with being able to see things hidden under clothes. Just because he can see better, it doesn't mean he can react faster. It basically means that he can take in the situation at a different angle like widening his peripherals.

Until these are fixed,

Rejected

~RP Moderation Team~