Thread:StarlightAT/@comment-5831327-20141110083730/@comment-5831327-20141110142039

Well, I guess things might have picked up after I stopped, but from what I remember, after the initial shock of having Light in her life, she and Light fought Garland, then Hikari went off to train, then Hikari watched Light fight Haru. The only scene I remember between them was when they visited Mana's grave. Of course, I might be remembering things incorrectly, since I did read faster than I normally would.

Sure, I was pretty vague in my review. When I say convey your ideas, most prominent one is the world and setting. I'm pretty sure you have a good idea of how it works, and how magic is incorporated into everyday life, but it should be explained at the beginning. There's also the question of power scaling. Because if a student like Hikari can cast a 4th tier spell, then that means she's stronger than most White Mages. So again, this relates to conveying the setting.

Thanks for challenging my review. It forces me to futher formulate my thoughts, and I don't want to give out vague or bad advice.