Talk:Feng Huang Losung/@comment-27743663-20170111225657

CNR, his name fails to follow this as it doesn't relate or correlate to a color.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is noted.

Backstory has some issues. For starters, why was he wondering around the woods alone as a child? And further, where are his parents? Was he abandoned? Are they just did? Did he wonder on his own? Did that swordsmith pretty much just kidnap him? It's too unclear. Plus, wondering alone as a child, likely not the brightest of ideas, because Grimm are a thing. And if he's anything like a normal child is, especially with the knowledge of Grimm, wondering the woods alone is going to terrify him, and therefore attract the Grimm. Really as a whole for backstory, I'd ask you not be vague and list out all the major events that happened.

Aside from that, having made it to the Final's, of which I assume you mean the Final Round of the tournament, is a no. That's too prestigious a spot to claim, and if it was claimable, everyone would do it and there'd be 7 different Final's match for the tournament. Labeling him the top in all his classes in the past during Beacon and Signal falls under this as well, though that's a smaller note.

Weapon is fine.

Semblance lacks demerits. It's fine if it has a charging time, but that's redundant if once charged he can simply keep it up non-stop. Besides that, the area around him can be as little as 5 feet to as much as 30 meters. There's no given measurement, so no real way to know. Absorbing all sound around him to then make into an attack is rather creative.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Name doesn't comply with CNR

- Backstory issues. Too vague and doesn't clarify details. Finalist in Tournament in the past.

- Semblance lacks demerits.

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