Talk:Revenge/@comment-25763181-20130912083322

Very impressive! Superb vocabulary describes the scene with crystal clear clarity blended in with relentless displays of lifelike imagery! Beautiful, magnificent writing, very well executed. The only thing I suggest you do is at the start of the story, describe what happens as Yang sees her sister getting shot by Roman, rather than what happens afterwards. But other than that, hands down one of the best RWBY fan fics I have ever read!

9.5/10