Talk:Solaris Phoenix/@comment-30530552-20171106183803

Alright, time to see how this goes for you.

CNR noted in Trivia, no issues there.

Appearance has no issues.

Personality has no major contradictions, though I don't think to smack someone upside the head is so much an affectionate thing as referring to "physical abuse," but I digress.

The weapon is simple and makes sense. (I will note that you accidentally used the name "Jace," which I presume you forgot to remove.

Semblance is for the most part, fine. I will note that upon losing one's Aura, they will in the majority of examples be unable to use their Semblance, save for a few exceptions such as Qrow and potentially Yang. I'm not going to reject you for this point specifically, but it needs to be adjusted. The other thing I question slightly is why one would have a fire-producing Semblance as opposed to using straight Fire Dust to achieve relatively the same effect, but I suppose with the variance in intensity you have listed it makes a little more sense.

The backstory is mostly acceptable, but considering they are a Beacon-based team, you need to reference what they did during the Battle of Beacon and where they are now, given the school is currently nonfunctional. However; you do have canon interaction with CFVY, which I can't accept. I recommend changing it to another unnamed team from the same time period, or coming up with a bunch more characters if you feel like it. I also feel like a great dance the previous year would be noteworthy in canon, but you could tone it down if you want to keep it in.

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Overall, very good start with Solaris here. You'll be ready in no time at all, I'm sure.

-Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

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