Talk:Robii Mauve/@comment-27743663-20170316013532

CNR, I see how the last name relates to a color, but not the first name. Which is the one that matters. Either way, the relation needs to put in the trivia

Appearance is fine, though make a better mention that he has an artificial arm because a brief mention of an interchangable portion.

Personality, fine overall, save for the mention of Neo. Fanon OC's shouldn't have any kind of interaction with canon characters of the scale of a rivalry, due to the fact it cross the fanon-canon line and takes too many unconfirmed liberties.

Background, no one should ever realistically think he's seriously an Alien. When meeting /anyone/ of mysterious origins, real life included, Alien is faaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar from the first guess, and always a joke guess. He actually needs details for his backstory and not just "blank." Why was he alone? Whatt happened to his parents? Why music of all occupations? How on earth did he even get a vehicle at that age where driving should be illegal? That aside, more to other problems. He's 21 at present, so he'd be...likely barely a teenager while freely traveling the world? Several things wrong with that, namely someone that age traveling the world dealing with Grimm. Aside that, Roman's right-hand man? Also a no, for the same reasons as mentions of Neo is a no. Becoming something like the school's "Guardian" is equally a no, since nothing like that has been shown to exist.

Semblance, no. Dodging every attack from someone is horribly rejectable. If it's just a lock-on system for people who have Aura, I fail to see how it even works that way. That's just a leap of logic that doesn't make much  sense, if any. Ignoring illusions because he focuses on that person's soul? How even does that work.

Weapon, I'd like to know what linking to his aura does exactly? Does it just link and that's it? Where's it get all the plasma to fire from? Or in other words, how does ammuninition and reloading it work?

Tl;dr

Rejected on

- Lack of CNR mention

- Mention of fanon-canon interaction, i.e. Roman and Neo.

- Various issues with backstory: Age. having a vehicle at that age, traveling at that age, etc. Being a Guardian of Beacon is not a thing.

- Weapon needs more clarifications

- Semblance is broke  and doesn't many any sense

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