Talk:Intro To Monster Hunting Saga One: The Signal/@comment-23784953-20130817070133

So I was waiting for some interesting stuff to happen in the wiki activity feed. Saw this, and it picqued my interest.

A little prologue may be in order. While an in medias res is good, at least give a short summary of what's happening so that you can get the readers up to speed. It can go like

"It was past midnight in an orphanage in location X. A group of Dust Company security can be seen outside. etc..."

It's refreshing to actually see a character that isn't super excited to kill shit. Most of the time, a few are too excited to learn how to fight.

And jeezus, can't that guy get any more villainous. Then again, he's the dumb muscle kind of villain, so I guess that's to be expected.

One thing I'd point out Jr., his name specifically. Thanks to the period, I tend to get a little confused on certain sentences. But that's my personal nitpick.

It's a good start. And it further motivated me into starting that fanfic I've been planning. Though before I can do it, I need to find out how Beacon's Initiation works first.