Talk:Asgier Bloodfang/@comment-24087318-20140101085144

His personality and behavior do not line up. If he acts like he hates the world and everyone, and spends his life killing criminals and gang members, why would he be interested in joining Beacon academy, a school designed to train warriors to fight Grimm monsters, not people.

In addition, it's far fetched to think that Ozpin would extend an invitation to someone whos history is entirely centered around criminal activity. (Even if it's killing criminals, it's STILL murder.)

His whole history as to how he found his weapon also doesn't touch on RWBY canon. Ruins are abandoned, they don't have artifacts or guardians protecting them. As well "Greek" history doesn't exist in a world where Greece didn't even exist. As well, Hunters and Huntresses often forge their own weapons at combat academies like Signal.

His semblance of controlling fire doesn't fit canon ideas of what Semblances are, and is too close to the Semblance of a canon characters, specifically Yangs. Semblances are abilities that are used in tandem with the Hunter or Huntresses other weapons, skills and abilities to produce one entire solid fighting style. Nothing stand outs as an entirely separate attack or ability.

All in all, this character needs a lot of work. His backstory for both his weapon and past needs more detail and depth as to how or why it ties into him wanting to be a Hunter at Beacon, and train to fight Grimm instead of people. And why said academy would accept someone who's clearly murdered many people, which is against the law.

As well, the article is messy, with many paragraphs using separate fonts and sizes. Spelling and grammar issues run rampant and frequently.

Due to the above, Rejected. Please clean up this page and have the character better fit the world of RWBY.

~RP Moderation Team~