Talk:Amet Serpentyne/@comment-30530552-20171110182731

Alright, let's take a second look here.

You still have multiple noted Faunus traits, (tongue, tail, skin - particularly in the facial area, given it's much further away from the tail than the leg) which is grounds for auto-rejection.

Okay, maybe my wording wasn't clear pertaining to his Faunus abilities. When I said that snakes, on the whole, have bad vision, I meant to say that night vision could be his make-up for it, even if it doesn't help with his normal eyesight he'd be much better off in the dark. It doesn't justify the sensory abilities of the tongue.

Weapon - the Dust abilities got a minor elaboration, which I guess is okay.

Semblance is better off now. I'm assuming the 5 to 10-minute estimate is when he's at full strength and concentration, which would be almost never in combat, which makes it more acceptable.

Backstory doesn't really accommodate for established canon for the Tournament still. However, you did fix the blizzard problem I outlined last time, so good on you for that.

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Overall, much better this time. You're much closer to acceptance.

-Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~