Talk:Amber Bella-Rose/@comment-31408668-20190304045011

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Amber is the name of a commonly yellow or... amber colored gemstone. The specific amber described here is black amber, which has a darker brown tone or redish hue.

APPEARANCE

Short and concise, quickly establishes small details like the necklace. It paints a good picture, and the actual image helps further focus it. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

The happy and outgoing figure. There are too few of these around on the RP servers these days, so it is quite refreshing. Her personality works and is defined well. I would be very interested to see what would be able to make her angry, as it would be nice to explore a breaking point for her. No obvious contradictions. No problems here.

BACKSTORY

Her backstory seems to work; but there are two major problems here; there is no mention of Amber's age here, nor is there any mention of where or what she was doing during the Vytal Festival or Battle of Beacon. And for a character that goes to Beacon and is from Vale, this is problematic. The age, especially, is a requirement as per the Guidelines, if the charavter is under 40 years old. No stepping on canon toes. No mention of Vytal Festival nor Battle of Beacon. Major problem here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

The weapon is within guideline specifications. We have a single, transforming primary weapon in the form of Katachi no Nai Yumi. Transforming from a bow to a naginata works with the length of the yumi bow. I would maybe define if it uses Dust or not, but since there is no mention of Dust at all here, i will assume it doesn't. I would recommend shortening the name a bit, but that's completely your call. No major problems here.

As for Amber's skill in combat, I would say it's reasonable for the amount of training she seems to have. However, this can only really be defined if I had her age. Major problem here.

SEMBLANCE

Hunter's Eyes, as a Semblance, is not too crazy, in theory. It allows her to see far at a cost, and if the wording is correct, it happens rather fast, on top of the mental toll which I assume will make it harder for her to concentrate on them anyway. In short, it has a limiter, in the form of a fatigue limiter with an exponential rise in cost, as well as a mental fatigue limiter. No problems here.

CONCLUSION: REJECTED (Character lacks age, as required by the Guidelines.) 

'''Overall, Amber works as a happy character to counteract many other characters here. She has defined morals and reactions, and seems hard to shake. Just give her a proper age, and she will be good to go.'''