Thread:Fedorastorm/@comment-26130256-20150530050157/@comment-26104528-20150530062841

In southern AZ, it's ALWAYS summer. (Save for those few weeks and nights where it gets to the low 30F)

Interesting premise for a plot. To be honest, I never really thought about how Zephrion Flagg would behave when not on the job (or drunk), especially considering how 'strictly business' the guy is normally.

(Also not sure if in character) Perhaps this 'fancy party' you mention could be Institute's yearly Technology Demonstration and Ochre is at the afterparty, trying to negotiate a deal with Zephrion that if he sponsors the construction of a new factory, the Cardamoms get a nice discount on the Institute's products and services.

If you're really wondering how my tech didn't tick off the Admins, (Not in character for anyone to say, but this is OOC so whatevs) they have drawbacks, mostly in the very real department of maintainence cost/logistics. I know as writers we don't want/like to think about that sort of stuff, but this is what happens when all of your writing consulatants are engineers. :P

In any case, there's some damn nice writing in Azzie. Especially the evolution of his family through the backstory. Ethical, but still having that 1920s mafia flavor to it. I applaud you as well.