Talk:Ao Hino/@comment-26104528-20170910020212

There's numerous grammar issues that make reading rough, but I think I can get the gist of it all.

Personality is ok now, gives a clear picture of how this character behaves in most circumstances.

Weapon is very similar to Adam's weapon. Now I know it's not said whether or not Flaring Butterfly is based on a Katana-style sword, but I'd still reccomend going into more detail about it.

Semblance is still too bare-bones. What's the largest object she can use it on? What's the maximum speed something can be going? Give me more specifics here.

I would still reccomend editing the backstory more and most importantly shaving it down. I see a number of paragraphs and sentences that can be combined to save on length.

Rejected for now.

-RP Moderation Team-