Talk:Sam Moramee/@comment-30530552-20170517230610

Let's take a look at this now, shall we?

CNR, you haven't made a noted reference to it, but supposedly it can refer to God, which can mean white, and "dark" in Iranian, so it's there, but next time please add it in a Trivia section.

Appearance is fine, Faunus trait is noted (the teeth could be sharp through wear, so I won't coutn that as a Faunus trait, which is good for you.)

Backstory is where the problems start to arise...while the general past with the parents is fine, you've got canon interaction with Ruby Rose, which is an automatically rejectable issue. Not only that, but you've lacked the mention of what he did durign the fall of Beacon if he was part of Beacon Academy during that time outside of the main profile.

Weaponry is another problem. To have a scythe is to go against what Ozpin has mentioned, having only seen Ruby and Qrow be able to wield a scythe with great skill, which pretty much means that having a scythe is taboo. Having a broadsword is fine, just not the scythe aspect. Dual swords are also fine, but a cursed katana which means that no one else can use it, lest death or injury can occur? No. Just, no.

General combat too screams "Gary Stu!" considering that he's being considered comparable to the skill of Pyrrha Nikos and actively going against canon through that, with the stats you've given him actively reflecting that.

Semblance is semi-vague: How long does the clone last? How many hits can it take? Can it damage other people? What are some demerits to using it?

Overall, if you're going to try and make this work, you need to fix several things before you can even reconsider putting it back in pending.

-Rejected on: Heavy canon interaction in backstory, combat skills without limits, the broadsword-scythe weapon, and a very vague Semblance.