Talk:Verdure Jean-Locke/@comment-24087318-20140829022848

Typically characters weapons/semblances/abilities have to be fully fleshed out before a review can be given, even if they're from a Fanfiction that hasn't shown off the full extent of what they can do. Unknowns or things simply not detailed yet may change the judgement of the Review should they be revealed. This characters Weapons are barely described and rather vague.

In addition to this, Semblances of a psychic/telekinetic kind are currently not Accepted, as we havn't seen any sort of psychic powers at work in the Canon so far. Double goes for effects that alter the opponents minds.

His personality traits and combat abilities basically state he's everything at once, and are very contradictory. Smart, sly and cunning, but forgetful and not bright at certain subjects not specified, he's shy and reserved, but proud and boastful of his work ethic. He's open to both Humans and Faunus of all sorts, but then considers his short height to be "Girl height" showing a bit of a sexist streak. And then in combat he can simply turn off anything not needed and focus on winning. It's very mary-sueish in description since it's written like he's able to do practically anything, except when his writer doesn't want him to.

In addition, refrain from using words that describe what a wider group would think, such as ''"the belief of growing powerful through defiling others; a code that most aristocratic children follow." ''Since it assumes how other characters would think or act. There are other OCs from noble roots that don't act like that either.

And Lastly, Characters must have a name that follows Monty Oums RWBY Character naming conventions (Viewable here: http://static1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20131130235255/rwbyfanon/images/2/2d/ColorNameRule.png ) If the name doesn't clearly resemble a color or something that reminds people of one, it must be added to the Trivia on the character article.

For all these, Rejected.

~RWBY Fanon Review Team~