Talk:Nox SteelArm/@comment-10337166-20160402234228

Alright then fourth times the charm? No it isn't.

It doesn't look like you've changed anything from the previous review, but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and assume you have.

-The weapon still is hard to understand. It's a st of weapons? HOW MANY? HOW ARE THEY CONTROLLED BY STRINGS? It sounds like a big revolver but why the fuck does it need strings.

-Onto the actual weapon. Hard Light is almost always going to be rejected unless it's done well, and it's not done well here,it does too many things allowing too much bullshit. I'd honestly cut it completely from the weapon.

-The semblance, ohhh boy. Semblances usually can do ONE unique thing your semblance does FOUR. DO you see the problem here? If you want telekinesis fine I can live with that, but he cannot affect people with it to any degree, because then you're free to just bullshit your way through everything else.

-As to the other 3 things his semblance can do which I count as..... you know fuck it I'll just link it here

''His will power and control of his Semblance influence his Aura consumption rate. But usually it doesn't change that much due to Nox's naturally low will power. His emotions also influence his strength like Anger makes his power much stronger but uses more Aura or Fear/Panic makes him much faster in using his Semblance but weakens his strength.''

He can also affect humans/Faunus or anything with Aura but the more Aura within the thing he is manipulating, the lesser the effect of his Semblance on them.

''Even without anything to manipulate, his ability can condense his Aura to make barriers and melee non-transformable weapons to aid him in battle. But this ability uses a lot more Aura. He can also condense his Aura to make spikes that is slightly longer than his range but disappears within 1-2 seconds.''

''He can also manipulate his clothes and weapons to allow levitation but he cannot fly. He can also manipulate his power to encase his body with a telekinesis armour that provides a slight increase in protection. ''

Cut ALL OF THIS OUT, I repeat his semblance is about 5 different things which is not okay.

REJECTED

-RP Moderation Team-