Talk:RAIN: The Chamber Spins/@comment-9581622-20130731074100

Though I'm not one to judge writers based on their products, this does particularly lack a major thing that most readers want. Description. This is more like a script to something, rather than fiction. Yes, I realize you are "comfortable" with the script/screenplay writing method but it is a slight turn off for me...

As for the speed of things, it seems just a little too fast. There is too little interaction and it does not paint the picture for me.

I'm interested to see if there will be more though, since you seem to have decent ideas. Overall, I'd rate this only a 5/10 for its lack of development.
 * As for "Description", this is what I'm talking about.