Talk:Amet Revfold/@comment-933831-20131215201343

Okay, a lot of ground to cover here. First off, characters are required to have an appearance to be passed. Secondly, he is listed to have two semblances. The first is better off worded as what it IS, as opposed to what it seems to be. Word it more as a heightened perception and speed, as opposed to bringing up a time slow at all. In honesty, you're best off scrapping seeing though objects, as it's extremely out of setting.

Now the... Weapon. I could leave it at saying Pheonixes do not exist in RWBY, but I want to ensure the point comes across. A weapon cannot repair itself, discriminate friend or foe, or achieve sentience. I... Really feel this shouldn't need to be said, but evidently.... Anyway, the weapon needs some major work done.

Now for the history, his clan is described as "known for their peaceful ways, and fierceness in battle." Those are EXTREMELY contradictory, and need to be sorted out. In addition, the white fang targetting Faunus families is so very out of setting based on the knowledge we have. For those reasons, rejected.

--RP Moderation team--