Talk:Belle Carmela/@comment-24911350-20140603193250

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The Appearance and Personality sections are quite short, but very well done and create a good mental image of Belle.

Her History is very long, but no less effective than the prior sections. A few spelling and grammar mistakes though.

Pixie Dust could use some more detail though. How does she refill the dust? How long does it generally last between refills? Exactly what kinds of dust are inside the bulbs? (I'd guess a mix of Impact and Fire dusts?) It's also five feet long, so in mace form they're each two and a half feet long, which will make them a little unwieldy and suspectible to being wrenched away very easily. Consider making the staff slightly telescopic so they can collapse to a more usable length in mace form, and adding pommels/grips so they can't be torn away from her so easily.

Or for more emphasis on the polearm mode, it would make the weapon much more user-friendly to remove the bulb on one side, so there's only one. This would allow her to strike with far more force, and with much less recovery time because of all the extra momentum and potential for more fluid motion, although would limit its transformation down to only 1 club (With a telescopic pole). This would be a more offensive alteration, at the cost of the greater defensive capability that having two weapons would grant, but her general solution in combat is to not get hit at all, so it may not affect her much to have decreased defensive ability. It's something to think about.

Her semblance is fine to the best of my knowledge, and an interesting one. I've seen lots of dash-like semblances, but the fact that hers is more of an impulse effect sets it apart for me. It's simple, but more versatile than a plain dash and very unique.