Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20140704110526/@comment-4806269-20140704153615

Crystal Nelde

Overall a well-made, balanced character. Her backstory explains well her personality and her raison d'etre; also the consequences of the abuse she suffered when younger showing up as well but in a more "natural" and "real", not over-dramatic way like people tend to do. However, regarding her encounter with Sirce: did Sirce found her in the iniciation and after that Crystal got accepted into Beacon, or they just found themselves together before the iniciation? Maybe you could write a more clear explanation on that part.

Her weapon is different from the stuff that I've seen in the fanon, and in a good way. It fits perfectly with her Semblance and with her abilities, trying to compensate her physical weakness with powerful, ranged Dust attacks. A balanced fighter, which is very appreciated specially considering she's a 1st year student. However, I think there should be clarified if the only kind of attacks she does are shooting Dust rays or if she can perform other kind of attacks as well. That's everything I would address; everything else looks fine to me.

Accepted.