Talk:Dr. Alexander Nobel M.D./@comment-13593058-20160817011037

 Medicus Nobel M.D Review

Appearance
Nothing technical to note.

Personality
Point of personality made, nothing major to note.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon rules followed, however, with the strength and size of such a weapon and the ammunition it operates under, a reasonable ammo system should be put in place as well as a weight limit for equipment.

Semblance is lazy but acceptable.

Backstory
Nothing technical to note.

Miscellaneous
 Colour reference acknowledged.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Hammer space is probably not a good idea

Review Summary
First, I'd like to applaud you on your obvious enthusiasm in this character of yours. You obviously had fun making this guy and I had at least half as much reading through it. Anyway, let's get the one thing out that's keeping your character from being accepted.

Ammunition.

Yep, it's kind of stupid but you do have to think about the sort of thing considering the type of weapon you're carrying. We're talking about a glorified grenade launcher that can turn into an artilery gun and as you have said yourself, the rounds weigh about 80 kg! I don't even weigh 80 kg! For reference, a normal US Ranger carries around 73 kg worth of gear.

Anyway, this is some made up universe where physics doesn't really apply so I will let that pass. However, what I do want is a reasonable amount of rounds Medicus would carry on say a normal mission. Personally, I'd say since a normal real life grenade belt holds about 12 rounds, I'd say that's pretty reasonable. I would go for a 12 round limit for the grenades. Perhaps for the transformed artilery gun, a 2 or 3 round limit would be best so it forces the character to think carefully about when to use such a devestating yet effective weapon.

Other than that, I nothing really stopping it from being accepted so I'll move on to what I personally think about the character.

The character has too much going on with him.

And when I say that I mean his kit, backstory and personality has a little bit of everything where it just bleeds intoa one big mess. Of course, everyone falls into this trap of trying to make a "perfect" character and while your character has several flaws of his own, it's simple too much. It almost treading the Mary Sue trope which is a sign of poor writing. However, it is not grounds for rejection just food for though when creating future characters.

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