Talk:Báihǔ Níng/@comment-25924729-20190531133457

Cool character, tai chi is a fun martial art~

Appearance is very short. Noticed you only described her physical appearance and did not mention any clothing. Its optional to also add a description of the clothes, combat gear or armour she typically wears, if any. But having none is fine too.

Personality is fine, can confirm cats like fish and chicken very much :v

Backstory has quite a few issues... especially in the details and context of it. A lot of important information is missing, it kinda just jumps right into the story like readers are supposed to already know everything. People reading this page to learn about this character may find it hard to understand, even im having trouble figuring out the backstory for this review.

At the very least, a brief explanation about who the Grandmaster and Team DAWN are and what relationship they have with her is needed. What does it mean by "looking for her school", as well as who are her charge and sister she helped in the Fall of Beacon. Answering questions like this would help make this a lot easier to read.

Weapons and combat abiliities seem alright. Semblance could use a litle more explanations like the range or area her light reaches, brightness and effect on people or grimm etc. But it seems alright in concept.

Her page is also missing an explanation of how her name relates to a color. I speak chinese so i know Baihu means White Tiger, but it must be menioned on the page too for non speakers to figure out, and adhere to the CNR.

Just a few things that need to be fixed. Overall still sounds like a good character.

Rejected.

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