Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20130818011012/@comment-1618120-20130819175828

Marcel is a well written character in my opininon. His personallity is quite good for me and that fact that he was doubted as a leader is good. However you need tell us what makes him get angry or is he ever angry?

His history is okay for me, but it doesn't quite explain why his personality is that way.

The weapon is something I haven't seen before, so I like it. I think it's good.

Master Swordsman doesn't make any sense to me. He's 17. Only at his first year of Beacon. I believe that 3rd years to Ozpin Types would have Masters in their abilities(I feel like you like Bleach). Because Master is at the top of the chain, you've basically stated that he's a great swordsman. The Abilities are really good and interest me more.

Rirri is a good character. For one, she's the first 3rd year character I've seen. Her personality is okay in my opinion but she doesn't have anything to trigger her emotions. Is she a robot?

I like her abilities, they seem normal and quite interesting. Her being able to speak beowolves is okay, but it's not explained properly. Her abilities page should be more than Marcel's because she's a 3rd year because it looks like Marcel would win in an actual fight.

Her backstory is normal, it's not traumatic, it's really good.

My vote goes for Ririi. I think I like the fact that she's a 3rd year. But I would like to see more 3rd year stuff.