Talk:Elysia Gaia Illiris/@comment-25763181-20131205082604

Please forgive me for the delay. I really had it tough within the last two weeks. Hopefully, you'll forget those trifles and listen to what I have to say about your OC.

IMHO it's a well put together OC, nicely detailed and well thought out. The one thing that I really enjoyed reading was the "Appearance" section. Fantastic use of imagery; it would be one of those descriptions in which I would let someone draw Elysia from the details you have given that person and when you look at the finished product, you will say "That's exactly what she would look like."

However, this OC is the type of character that I like to call a "Goldilocks OC", in which there is enough details to recieve a two thumbs up, yet it's not enough to really "wow" the reader. I suggest to simply put some more detail into Elysia and maybe grab some artwork for her.

Overall, Elysia is a really good OC. Just try to add some things to her that would REALLY make her stand out from the bunch.

8.3/10

(BTW is there any chance Reiku Hogosha can RP with Elysia? I don't want him to fight her but I was thinking along the lines of "survive the wilderness, attepting to find their way back home" where teamwork is essence.)