Thread:An English Birb/@comment-34413212-20180625123814/@comment-35675122-20180627131949

Looked over Abby, I find her well developed character-wise.

It was a bit jarring for me to jump from an overall extroverted aggressive character to a introverted cheerful character right off the bat, but I feel that I can provide decent feedback.

I shall start off once again with her appearance. The only problem I see is that she is rather heavy for someone suffering from anorexia. While yes, the wings add weight, hollow bones are required to take flight, which cuts down on the weight. Then again, I'm applying science to something where conventional science is kind of moot. Overall, I have no qualms with her appearance save for that, but I'm not planning on going all Albert Einstein to find the average bodyweight ratio of wings for birds then multiplying them to Abby's wing size.

Her personality is fine in my opinion. It is a bit of a maelstrom of aspects, but that is justified in her case considering her mental disabilities.

Combat-wise, I can't help but see her as a ranged combatant considering her anorexia and flight advantage. Despite that, everyone has to have a way of fighting back when in melee range. Much like Calypso, her Asperger's Syndrome can hinder her combat ability, but in a much more hazardous way considering the fact that she seems to be frail and the fact that she can fly. Which could cause her to crash into something and damage her wings. Her weapons are fine, they stand out enough in my opinion to not need much change. However, my obsession with symmetry causes her weapons to bug me due to one firing a single shot and the other firing multiple shots. This, however, is a "me problem." So you don't need to worry about that.

Her Semblance is perfectly fine in my books, you even added limitations to the Semblance to balance it out. Overall, I have nothing to say against it.

Her backstory is fine save for that some sentences could've used a bit more flow into the next sentence. But what am I to judge on that? Before I was given this tip, I would essentially write my paragraphs more like lists.

I like this character as well. The perfectionist part of me is satisfied to see this as a finished creation. The only things I was willing to nitpick about were more scientific than anything. Even then, science in Remant most likely does not work the same way our science does.