Talk:Ivory Valon/@comment-25924729-20190702060549

Interesting OC. We dont see a lot of child OCs on this site, or at least younger OCs that arent Hunters or students in hunter academies yet.

Profile is good, though information like that should normally be put in an infobox instead. Appearance and personality section are alright, not much to really note there. Backstory is a bit short, but also okay.

Weapon is pretty cool, general skills and abilities are fair too. Small problem in her semblance. Creating, shaping and shrinking or enlarging force fields seems fine in concept, but you cant create them inside people, as that would bypass Aura and be impossible to dodge or counter. Both of which we have rules against. You should also add limits like the size and number she can create, range she can create them at, durability and time they last before collapsing, to get a better idea of her strength.

This page is missing a Trivia section and CNR explanation with it. It is clearly acceptable as a white bony substance, but you must still explain how her first name Ivory relates to a color in this page.

Nice try, just some small issues that need fixing.

Rejected.

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