Talk:Azur/@comment-27743663-20170218184118

CNR, going from "black" with Seraph is too much of a stretch.

Appearance, while Grimm masks are a thing, I doubt it's made from actual Grimm bones and are more likely just cheap knock-offs, given that Grimm bones can't be harvested as they disappear upon death. This ties into how he made his mask in the backstory, and how it's impossible.

Personality is rather inconsistent. It /can/ work if described well, someone who randomly helps some yet others, but it's not really described well here at all. There's nothing to differentitate how he would act in a certain scenario besides "I'm moody." Which in an RP setting is difficult to handlle.

Backstory, there's nothing given from his time before Signal and how or why he even joined it. It just starts with him being at Signal for no reason. I also highly doubt a 14 year old could survive in the wilds, as not even villages can do this. The only reason Ruby and Co. could in Volume 4 is because Qrow covered for them. Also doubt he could activate his own aura, and if he was at Signal, that should have been activated already in the first place. Also don't think a 15 year old can defeat a Beringel.

Weapon is fine.

Semblance is fine, just having a bit of trouble understanding if while he's using his projection he disappears or not, as it's written in a way that implies it but doesn't directly state it. Fix that.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- CNR don't work

- Bone mask is impossible to have. White-Fang ones are likely cheap knock-offs

- Large portion of backstory missing before Signal age

- 14 year old somehow surviving in the wild, without even having an aura. 15 defeating a Beringel is /iffy/. Ruby is not a valid argument for this.

- Semblance needs better clarification, does he disappear while his projection is active?

A note for personality not related to the rejection, word and describe it better, because as it is now it'll just be tricky and annoying to handle for RP's.

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