Talk:Stehlen Texan/@comment-27743663-20170122021935

CNR, not mentioned at all how how his name correlates to a color.

Appearance is eh.

Personality is eh.

Backstory, so for starters, labeling him as SEAL doesn't work. I highly doubt Atlas would haeppen to have a Military unit specifically named after the one America has IRL. We really don't know how Atlas' Military is structured, and I wouldn't do it based  off America's. Or even at all.

Weapon, His weapon is literally a bolt-action railgun. Rail-guns, in the first place, would KO someone quite easily. Quite the problem there, especially when it can be fired as quick as bolt action can. Aside from that, he passes over the limit. He has a listed primary and secondary, but then in equipment is noted to have an over-abundance of grenades. A large amount of grenades count as a secondary, and even beyond that in special skills, you note he has a jumpback. Why is that noted in equipment? The jumpback also falls into the secondary cateogry, so really, he's have one broken primary and 3 secondaries. Pick one, ditch the other 2.

Semblance, define project. Does he allow other teammates to see it? Or does he just shout it out? If it's the former, it'd needa maximum range for how far someone can be and a maximum number of people he can project to. Besides that, the semblance needs some demerits. Nothing's stopping him from just keeping it on forever. It lacks a max lasting time, a cool-down, a drainng effect, or anything.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Atlas Military structure, lack of canon info to confirm, doubt SEAL exists

- Primary is broke. Has too  many secondares

- Semblance lacks clarifications and demerits.

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