Talk:Glitch Systems/@comment-27603392-20140601112329

You mentioned he's 25, then how is he capable of entering Beacon when it requires a transcription ? Even if he looks like a 15 and is capable of faking a transcription, his experience still gives away his real age.

I'm not too fond of how you takes someone's else art, add a few scribbles in and calls it your character, but I suppose not everyone can afford custom art. However, wearing a sweater over a T-shirt ? That is kinda a fashion crime right there. You also need to describe the device: What does it look like ? how does it work ? Etc.

Personality is two dimensional and very typical, especially Glitch's personality. While I understand that Zero's personality is the typical lone wolf one that can be built after years of military training (Though I can't say that I like it), Glitch's personlity is very plain and lack of a human feel. You can add more to it. Another thing, what would be the trigger for him to switch between two personalities ?

There are certain things that doesn't quite match each other in his profile: You said he's trained in the military, yet it isn't mentioned in his history. Travelling between universe is impossible, I'd recommend changing it.

His weapons and ability needs to be in the profile as well: Please note that overuse of Semblance can cause exhaustion. How will he fight with his weapons ? What is his strength and weaknesses ? You said he's a cyborg, yet you never mentioned which part of him is cyborg and how it will aid him in battlefield.

Rejected. Please make appropriate changes and notify me by replying to this comment once you're done, and I'll take another look.