Talk:Shuiro Niavera/@comment-30530552-20170716221056

Here's my 2nd look to see what's been done about my gripes.

Your main weapon is acceptable now. Your secondaries also fit into guidelines.

Semblance limitations are okay but for one thing: why would his Semblance have 3 blasts instead of 2, because he can only make 2 foxes? Unless that's a later Tier thing when he becomes more powerful?

Backstory has a couple new issues. While you've worked out how to work in Battle of Beacon, there's two main issues with an easy fix. First off, you've got Shuiro killing a Goliath (and apparently no help whatsoever?), which overstates his abilties, since even Oobleck, an expereienced Huntsman, was not willing to fight one of these. Secondly, you've called them the "best second year team at Beacon," which overstates their importance foro ne thing, and then you've got them going on a mission to Anima of all places. Why would they go there under orders (by Ozpin himself for another thing) rather than stay on Sanus for Kingdom defense?

-Rejected for unclear Semblance explanation for alternative ability, and the stated canon-interactive backstory issues

~RP Moderation Team~