Talk:Arin Midnight/@comment-30530552-20170906045210

Here's my review on your character.

CNR Reference clearly outlined, though this needs moved to the "Trivia" section.

Appearance noted, nothing major to note there. Good detail level.

Note of personality made, no inconsistencies with it.

For your weapon, what you have for now is fine, however; I would like you to add what other types of Dust she uses, if any.

Your Semblance is fine, for the most part. However; I would like to get a sense of scale and the full capabilities with it: how much is too much for her to handle at once? How much of a tax on her Aura does it do? How physically demanding can it be with a small amount compared to a larger one? Is there a specific percentage of Aura she would lose upon changing water into ice? These are a few questions that I'd like to have answered.

Backstory needs a bit more to it. Considering it's on the current timeline in the same year as Team RWBY, here's a major question to ask: How were they affected vy Battle of Beacon? What else did they do during their first and only year at Beacon? Additionally, what sort of job does her father have at the CCT? Is he helping to repair it or guard it, or is he off work because it was taken down by the Grimm Dragon? As it stands, he can not be "currenty working [there]" without context.

Overall, very good start, but some of the sections I've outlined above need some more detail

-Rejected for now.

~RP Moderation Team~

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