Talk:Ermey L. Winters/@comment-25924729-20190624025729

Really cool character. Sounds like a great guy with an interesting weapon.

Appearance is good. Personality works too, I like that you addressed the Atlas army leaders being kind of elitist pricks. People like Winter and Cordovan are really that way in the show, now that I think about it.

Backstory was a fun read, brutal at parts, wholesome and hopeful elsewhere. Some small issues though. While the rules do allow OCs to interact with Huntsman school staff like Ozpin, it's only to a minor degree so it doesn't interfere with canon. He cannot have Ozpin recognize him and make a special offer like that to recruit him to Beacon, or assign him on a special mission that way. Maybe you could replace Ozpin with some other teacher or Atlas officer? Or find some other way for him to enter Beacon.The counselling sessions with Oz are fine though, since they're minor and would not impact this OC or Oz in any major way.

Another smaller issue in the backstory is that Atlas did close borders and recall it's troops, but not civillians or citizens. So Ermey wouldn't have been asked to return anyway, since he was no longer in the military. Just a small issue, but you should change it to adhere to canon events.

Onto combat sections. His weapons seem fine, personally love more realistic, tactical type weapons, and the shovel is kinda cute. Abilities and semblance are good, all seems fair and balanced.

Relationships, Trivia and CNR all work. No other issues found. Very close, just some small hiccups on the backstory that need fixing.

Rejected.

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