Thread:An English Birb/@comment-34413212-20180625123814/@comment-35675122-20180627123838

Just got done looking over Calypso. I like that you used an animal with a taxonomy fallacy that claims the species to be something that it really isn't. Another example of this would be the red panda, which really isn't a panda.

To start off, her appearance. I feel that it really fits her. Her aggressive appearance corresponds with her personality nicely. I honestly can't nitpick anything about it.

As for the personality, Calypso seems to display a rather aggressive/impulsive personality (which is probably due to the Asperger's Syndrome you stated). I like it, but I personally feel that some more detail could help (coming from the guy who had an OC rejected due to overexplaining). Don't quote me on this, but I feel that the personality section could work as it is if you plan on placing Calypso into pending. Then again, I'm not a reviewer.

As for combat, I feel that Asperger's may affect her combat ability. I read that it can cause clumsiness, which could be a problem for a fast character. As for the weapons, I feel that the are somewhat cut-and-dry. You could add a bit of flair to them to make them stand out. For example, a weapon I plan on giving one of my OC's are a pair of large shields with rocket propellers attached to the bottoms of the shields. Try to think of something that makes her weapons unique. But try not to go overboard, it doesn't end well in most cases.

As for Calypso's Semblance, I like it. A simple but effective sonic roar. Now, I'm not saying that simple Semblances are bad. Look at Ruby's, her's is simple and effective. I feel that it lacks detail, however. If you wish, you could add a bit more detail as to how loud the roar is. Can it shatter glass? Can it cause internal bleeding? Think of how sonic booms from fighter planes work and see if you can apply it to her Semblance. Another thing to take note of is that most Semblances take aura to use. You could go into detail to how much aura it takes to use it.

As for her backstory, some extra detail could be useful. A tip from me, try to make sentences flow. That was one reason a reviewer rejected one of my OC's on, so I feel the need to warn you. That aside, I like the direction her backstory is going.

I apologize for this extensive response. I have a bad habit of overanalyzing things. Overall, I like the direction Calypso is going, but I feel that some more detail could help.