Talk:Melacha Maverick/@comment-27743663-20170111232829

CNR checks out, sure.

Personality is fine.

Appearance is fine, save the existence of the armor, which I'll get to further on down.

Backstory has issues. People don't just get "chosen" into an Academy. They make their way in, and there's nothing given here to show she could. She has no priror training shown. The Academy hand-picking a team based on past alone is doubtful as well, as they would need to know the past of each person.

Moving on, the Grimm described should not exist. Not because fan-made Grimm aren't allowed, but because anything that can turn a human into Grimm shouldn't exist, since that's not a thing. Using Dust armor to heal her doesn't make sense either. At all.

Weapon is noted, ignoring the other issues with it mentioned previously.

Semblance, there isn't really an explanation for how it works. At all. Does it heat up her body more? Does it cool it down more? Because that'd be less beneficial than you think, since it would end up doing more bad than good. How does it allow her to hold her breath longer?

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Backstory issues, decaying into Grimm, Grimm haing a poison that can do that, a Grimm existing that can do that.

- Semblance doesn't make much sense, no explanations given.

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