Talk:Luna Kojote/@comment-30530552-20180617021349

Alrighty, let's take a look here....

-CNR isn't mentioned in a Trivia section, and it needs to be. I understand what "Luna" means, but you still need to bring it up.

-Appearance is fine.

-Personality is somewhat lengthy but it's in depth...some of the points feel like they could be condensed for legibility purposes, but what's there works.

-Backstory makes sense I suppose. Just be careful about the scaleof her company, seeing as that could lead to issues in canon later.

-Careful in how you describe how she fights, seeing as you make it sound like her foes normally don't have an Aura to protect themselves...regardless, her main weapon's form in itself is fine. I do have some concerns about the power levels of the Dust within the first form though....I would tone those down somewhat, and offer some better organization, seeing as the length of the section makes it hard to read.

-Her Semblance seems fine.

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Right now, the issues to fix are: CNR listing/explanation, cutting down on some of the unnecessary content and details within the other sections, and rectifying the power levels of Dust in her weapon. Once you fix those, feel free to resubmit to pending.

-Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

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