User blog comment:WeissSchnee/Codename CSPN/@comment-24052959-20141115071128

Its time for Samjay Fashion Check™

Well it is nice that you finally try to give multiple color on an OC design and you even gave a strawberry motif for Straw Berry. However, I had some issues with his design.

First of, his motif with strawberry is rather too obvious. After reading his occupation being a soldier, It made the obvious strawberry motif feels like being out of place. It makes me thinks that his appearence is unfitting to his background. I suggest to make the strawberry motif more subliminal. like perhaps a strawberry tatoo, an armor that resembles shape of strawberry in some way, or other way on designing stuff. (I'm not in creative mode atm)

Second of, the color choice. Its unique that his overall design do resembles strawbery. However, they made him looked like some sort of clown in a circus performance. I hardly can tell that he is a soldier when those color choice distracted me from thinking a soldier. Color choice is hard if you want people to have specific sensation to your design. Even I often having trouble with it.

Third and last, His lower decoration.This is the most prominent thing that makes me think of a clown when looking at his design. The decoration and the color. His boots is indeed already something that a soldier would wear, but its the color(again) that seems very clown-ish. Also the way his pant is decorated is giving me the sensation of "weird" instead of "unique". Maybe try different color, give a belt that hanging from his waist, give some torn. After all, he is the brawn of CSPN. He must look tough and intimidating.

Piece of Advice : When designing a character, make sure it fit their background and not only their personality. Like, a character who loves fancy outfit doesn't mean they have to be designed wearing fancy outfit. They might have poor background and unable to afford the fancy outfit they want.

Meanwhile Straw is a Soldier and the Brawn of CSPN while having "strawbery theme". So here some small insight. Note that Straw is also a Black Mamba Faunus. It is possible to mix Black Mamba, Strawbery, and Soldier into a new design.

Also I have some inspiration : Melon Energy

That design have the motif of Melon, Archer, Samurai, and Soda. I thought of two things when looking at that design which are Melon and Archer. The Melon and Archer motif he have is balanced. He didn't made me think of Archer prominently neither does with Melon. It made me think both of them.

Anyway, Its a step of improvement for you to start experimenting with a design that involve multiple color. Keep practice™. Sorry if my feedback is somewhat offensive. Also, I'm an amateur myself.