Talk:Mayon Argent/@comment-25924729-20190331081817

Tamaki Amajiki is that you? o.o

Appearance, personality and backstory are good. Very well put together and can definitely see the refrences to the HDD nursery rhyme.

Weapon seems good too, no issue there.

His page lacks a semblance section. I can understand that its a sort of noise cancelling function by reading the other parts, but you should add a few paragraphs detailing what it does, how it works, strengths, weaknesses and limitations etc.

His stats and abilities also seem rather powerful for his age and level of training, id suggest lowering them a little, especially his speed, marksmanship, acrobatics and hand to hand fighting.

The last issue is in his name. All RWBY OCs must have a colour name reference in their first name, not their last names. Argent is valid, but Winston is not. You must either explain how Winston relates to a colour, or rename him to comply with the rules.

So... yeah, nice concept of a character. Just needs a little more stuff and tweaking.

Rejected.

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~RP Moderation Team~