Talk:Bleu Aticus Ka Pua/@comment-27743663-20161207013134

CNR, well, it is obvious, but it is mandatory that it's said somewhere on the page. Usually people do a trivia section for that.t

Appearance is fine.

Personality is fine.

Backstory, you make a note of him having been a slave, hence where he got the collar, but make no mention of it happening here. Rather, it looks realively peaceful if less sophisticated.

Weapon, well, have has two of them...somewhat. His first weapon is obvious, but then the armor might as well count as one given all its abilities.

Semblance doesn't correlate. How would increasing brain activity allow him to perceive threats and actions before they even happen? That sounds more like future-sight than anything, which is largely iffy. Also not stated how long he can keep it up for, or if there's a cool down.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Lack of CNR correlation (it's mandatory, sorry bud :P)

- Backstory inconsistency

- Semblance

Rejected.

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