Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20150113152446/@comment-13172690-20150118190530

Alright, ill give this another try XD

Breyal Yoland

Interesting character though there are a few problems that I found. Even though you mentioned that her name is from a purple gemstone, I couldn't find where you got that from. Could you please verify that by a link or description? You also mentioned that she was a faunus though what is her trait since all fauni usually have a trait from the species they represent (could be a pouch, ears, etc...). The weapons are a good choice though I can see the semblance to be a little iffy even with the limitations and some more explaination is needed like how long and amount of hits.

Due to these point, rejected.

Chloe Chroma

Hm, there are a few pieces of information on this that can be a problem. How you state that she can change her hair without the use of the semblance is not shown in canon. With eye color, we do not know how Neo could change her eye color so it could awaiting canon info. You could say she dyes her hair each day instead. Also, what kind of faunus is she and what is her trait? There is also no background section present so we do not know where she attended, how she became a teacher at beacon and how she became a huntress. The weapon is well described though the semblance is over powered regardless of the limits on it. Lastly, please add her name meaning in the trivia on her profile so we know it matches Monty's rules.

Rejected.

Denver Verde

An interesting character. His backstory is good though it makes me wonder why he chose to make a compound bow. His semblance is passible along with his weapon though it would be good to explain more of how it works. By notch after every shot, what do you mean by that? As for the holographic readout, can it be seen by something or is  it a projection? As for the arrows, how many can be fired and how many does he have? After you elaborate this, he will be accepted.

Rejected for now.