Thread:Aldrasos/@comment-27332019-20151205182543/@comment-25389303-20151207191242

Hmm. There are two main problems I see with the backstory, and I have a feeling it was because you haven't read the rules yet, am I right?

Firstly, I really don't think you should have him be 90 years old, just so that you don't have to apply the colour-naming rule. Compound 21 in itself is unlikely to be accepted. I mean, think about it - a powerful self-healing drug as well as a chemical bioweapon? The stuff would be mass produced and used all around the world! I think the bioweapon story is a very good idea, and I think you should definitely keep it, but don't involve the Great War.

As for the compound itself. I think you should just keep it as either a superdrug with some very nasty and unexpected side effects, or deliberately keep it as a bioweapon. Rather than him being a doctor in the Great War, I really think you should make him a doctor in the Faunus Rights Revolution - it happened much earlier (so he wouldn't have to be 90), he could be a medic in the human army, and he could develop the compound which eventually got used against a small faunus force, so not much backstory would have to be changed.

Secondly, it is VERY important that the backstory does not influence the main story in any way. Like I said before, the drug is too powerful right now. Him being a war criminal is fine, just don't make him front-page famous.