Talk:Nemophila Windrunner/@comment-1309458-20140826235025

Alrighty, here we go. This one isn't nearly as long.

Review - Part 2

Norah Gorn Windrunner has a pretty tried-and-true backstory. Troubled childhood, had it rough, tragedy, develops egotism, all that jazz. I think there's an interesting false dichotomy between her current personality and her past, namely the fact that she has an ego despite her initial hatred for the thing that caused her ego. I think that's an interesting dynamic. I've seen this sort of character before a lot of times (goodness knows even I have characters with similar backstories) but they work and a lot of the time, it's all that matters. Coming off of that, it's still somewhat distressing that there are some inconsistencies with how she works as a character. The big one is why she wants to be come a huntress. Hunters and huntresses fight Grimm, not superpowered criminals. I suppose it makes sense she'd get inspired by the white-hooded woman, but it makes no sense for it to be because of revenge. The guy's already dead. You should probably clear that up.

I would also like to point out that her relationship with Leo seems incredibly odd. There's a strange airiness about it. Why does Leo think she'd make a better leader than him when she's shown herself time and again to be incredibly immature due to her repetitive instances of scheming to become LGNR's team leader? Is he just that nice of a guy?

Moving on to her weapons, they're fine. Nothing wrong there. I really dig it, actually. Abilities and Semblance seem fine, though I'm a bit nervous about the whole "hereditary Semblances" thing, since we don't know for sure how that works yet, but it's fine. The only thing I would say is wrong is that the stats seem a little too overpowered, but that's just me (and adds to why I think the stat charts are not such a great idea).

Not much more I can say about Norah, but other than the grammar and formatting fixes, there's not much I'd change. I suppose clearing up inconsistencies (such as why she gained such a big ego in the first place despite her hatred for her training) would be all I'd add.

All in all, not bad.