Talk:The Rise of Team CAEL/@comment-23784953-20130818053755

Hm. The details in this one was amazing, safe to say.

The premise is pretty good and it'll do good as a slice of life of how planet RWBY works before the Grim sieges it.

For the launch sequence... Well, it's mostly sounding like something that can happen in the Initiation. Though the switching of perspectives can be problematic if you didn't add the names of whose perspective is it.

Here's a trick I use: I switch between first person and third person depending if the character on first person is around. If he/she isn't, then go for third person. For example: Cael's perspective is seen as he lands, but once Asche starts doing her thing, it'll be like Cael is the one narrating how they'll eventually meet.

Overall, this just inspired me more to do a fanfic sooner or later.