Talk:Ryan Crimson/@comment-10356852-20140209212527

Ok so this what I see so that stands out,

You're only allowed one weapon unless you dual wield weapons that are the samething. So having both Archangel Wings and Flaming Justice is not going to be good. I would suggest taking out Archangel Wings and replacing it with another version of Flaming Justice so that he dual wields. That or you can keep Archangel Wings since they go with Ryan's Semblance so that way you dont have to make up a whole new Semblance for the character, but bare in mind a character does not a Semblance to pass to be accepted so if you do take out Archangel Wings then you may not want to go with a Semblance until further information is aviliable.

The personality could be expanded a bit, go more into to depth on why he acts the way he does so that its easier to understand where he comes from on certain matters. This would also warrant an expansion of the backstory.

Overall a well written character except for a few expansions on certain points and a changing up of the weaponry. Please feel free to reply to this to explain anything I may have misunderstood while reviewing this character.