Talk:The Four Huntsmen/Introduction Arc/@comment-6975131-20130819001109

This is a good overall idea, and i like that there is a lot of action, but the formatting here is what turns me away. You skip tenses frequently. My advice here is to stick in past tense, it is very difficult to write in present. I do realize that doing that is a lot of work but it will make your story that much more apealing. The all caps shouting when angry is rather unprofessional, If you added aquestion mark it would be sufficient. It is not a bad story by any stretch of the imagination, but the formatting is what made me have to come to this page 3 times before reading it through.

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The dialogue feel natural in this, which is good. The references to things not in this World was weird, but i was able to flow with it. Hopefully you wll take this advice.

The characters are very intersesting and you put a lot of work into them.

I do not usually do RfR but since we are the only 2 active series on the site, con you pease review Intro to Monster Hunting?