Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20140704110526/@comment-24189217-20140829215408

Sirce Marion

Overall there are a few grammar mistakes thatshould be touched up on and other places that just sound a bit akward. Nothing that a bit of proofreaing can't fix.

Her backstory is good and pretty original. Props to you for that. There are a alot of cliche backstories out there.

Sanctuary is a great weapon and personally i think it's really neat. The fact that she isn't a big hulking character is good for giving her realistic flaws and the overall design is cool. Although the blade not being very sharp is a bit odd for the RWBYverse. The only issue i would have with it is her ability to alter her arrows in mid flight. We have been told that weapons act as a conduit for aura and we've only seen this with melee weapons, but we haven't been told it's not possible so it's ok for now.

Her semblance seems good bu the bit about her seeing where arrows will land might just be skill and experience less than an ability of a semblance.

Accepted with a caution about the arrows.