Talk:Character: Teal/@comment-8182065-20131212034523

Thought I'd come back to give some new input, as the first one sounds a bit rude to me (sorry if it did):

Before putting him back in pending, you really need to look over a lot of stuff still. In Teal's bio, it starts off good, but what's bugging me is this, "Teal lost his sister,Turquoise, to a pack of Ursa at age 10. This no doubt had a major physcologicl impact on him. Also shortly before dying Turquosie told Teal that he has a cousin. So now Teal knows he has a cousin." I'm sure everyone has a cousin, so it would be good to explain why their cousin is significant.

Then we have "When Teal became a Cyborg is unknown however he has shown Cyborg traits BEFORE Turquoise died proving he didn't become a Cyborg after his sister died. When asked why he became a Cyborg Teal says, 'meh I wanted to be unique.'" The wording there is bugging my grammar OCD a bit and could be a bit confusing for others. Then the thing about him wanting to become a cyborg is a start, but everyone wants to stand out from each other. In all honestly, I think it would've been better to say that he became a cyborg because that Ursa who killed his sister nearly killed him, meaning he could only live if his body was technologically enhanced. Everything else in there is alright.

Again with his weapons, the modules for a blade and gun are fine; the guns that fire exploding guns still bugs me, because even though you said Teal can't use that model anymore, it's still in there. I'm thinking at least make a section separating what weapons he can use, and the abilities he lost if you're going to keep that in there. Now the HCPS are very similar to Crescent Rose, even if the guns are different. However, the pistol part doesn't seem to fit for that weapon at all to me. I think he'd just be fine without the HCPS.

His weaknesses: the first 1 I would actually only classify as a weakness. His stubborness, works as well, but that could also be a great strength if you think about it. Because he's a cyborg, I'm thinking that Teal maybe could have a great dislike of water since it messes up with his robotic circuits or something.