Talk:Knighttina Tento/@comment-24678303-20180327010943

For starters, this page has no Appearance. That is a must have for any given character. Please be sure to read the Guidelines linked at the top of the Wiki. That being said, you also need to include a trait. You said she's a Horse Faunus, but i don't even see a trait up in the art for her.

Secondly, it says that she is "capable of launching into a powerful barrage of emotions like a thundercloud." I have no idea what that's supposed to mean, could you clarify? It also says her eyes change based on emotion, but this is not linked to anything? That's not just a thing you can do. Characters shown thus far who have eyes that change color have it specifically linked to their Semblance. Please either change or remove that.

You mentioned that she went to the "Iris combat school"?? Where exactly is that?? And is this a pre-Beacon level school? Because you mention that she returned home to Patch after the Fall Of Beacon, leading me to believe she was possibly there, but it makes no mention of that. That being said, you also mention that she goes back to this "Iris Academy" and becomes a teacher there? How old is she?? Once again, this is something the rules specifically state you NEED to include on your character.

The weapon itself is fine, but you said Dust allows for Elemental attacks. You should really list some effects of the attacks themselves and the capabilities of it.

The Semblance is in the same boat, more or less. It's alright, but it does need a range to it saying how far away it can zap people, as well as how it works. Does it just arc in every direction at once, or does it arc to people in the same way a tesla coil would?

Lastly, as much as I would like to say the name is a rejectable point, it is a real color so i can't. I can, however, say that I personally feel you could do a lot better for it though. Just something worth mentioning.

Rejected for the above.

~RP Moderation Team~