User blog comment:N1SMO GT-R/Natsu's Mercenary Service (Writing Practice)/@comment-24857097-20141012041100/@comment-25763181-20141012044433

Ooh. Natsu will DEFINITELY love interrogating the White Fang, though the kicker is that she'd probably dislike Oliver's presence as his role would project to her as an insult to her professionality and superiority. That said, there's almost no job she'd be willing to turn down, just as long as the right payments are made.

Anyway, what you have here is a skeleton. One that is quite sturdy so far. Now, you need the guts. What are the police trying to get out of the White Fang member? What time of day does this take place and what's the weather? (This may seem quite unecessary, but adding imagery would help add content and perhaps some "pathetic fallacy" to induce pathos/empathy). How much money is Natsu being paid, or what does she need so that that object (tangible or not) could be used as a potential negotiating device? Why do the VPD hire Natsu specifically, considering that her role as a hired mercenary isn't exactly legal? How did they even get her contact number - does she have a close friend in the VPD? And what can Natsu possibly ask or do to the White Fang member complete her task?

Again, it's an intriguing idea to me, and I'm very glad you take interest in assisting me in my practice as a writer. But details are obviously but unquestionably important, and so I cannot work without these.