Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20130924122951/@comment-5431934-20130924125423

Let's take a look here...

Starting with Mason, right off the bat, his 'Nicknames' seem more like titles or epithet(s?) than nicknames.

Nothing else really stood out to me until I got to the "Battle Style & Abilities" section.

Looking at the 'Passive Abilities', out of the four of them, only one actually seemed to be a passive ability. A passive ability would be one activated at all times requiring no effort from the user, and neither "Teleport", "vanish", or "cloak" seem to fit this.

For the active abilities, I can't seem to understand what allows him to do "Blur", which makes him attack three times faster. Foresight seems like he's just good at aiming, and Dash appears to be simply running away from an enemy or running towards them.

Now, for Eventi.

First thing that stands out to me are the drones in Powers and Abilities. They can altar their shape to whatever eventi wishes? That doesn't seem even remotely physically possible.

It says she uses her knowledge of machinery to cast electricity from a hidden device in her sleeve. What does her knowledge of machinery have to do with this? Couldn't anybody pick up said device and cast electricity from it?

Now, the dust etchings in the plates. How does a specific line of text in a colour of Dust give it specific elemental properties? It'd seem more logical for the plate to incorporate Dust somehow in their design.

On to backstory!

So at age eight, she was able to create a machine powerful enough to provide invisibility for three people? And they don't even need to be near the machine, it just cloaks them for two hours? Seems like quite a powerful invention that would likely be quite complex for an eight year old, no matter how mechanically-minded.

There also appears to be a random Weiss mention in there, saying that they knew eachother before Beacon. How, exactly? How would these two meet up? Later in the page, it says that Weiss would often visit the family, as her parents left the SDC to have eventi. However, if Eventi is indeed her age of 16 and this takes place at around the same time as everyone else's character - e.g., when the main storyline is taking place, then Weiss would be at most a year old, likely less than that. It doesn't seem like she would be visiting them 'once in a blue moon'.

In the end, my vote goes to Mason. He seemed to fit the RWBY fanon better and the only problems I really had with him pretty much revolved around the way the page was written, with things appearing to be mistitled and whatnot.