Talk:Chessur Cayt/@comment-24678303-20150805065017

Okay, so i opened this up to review it and went in and fixed the Source code. After that, i went in and took a shower. Forgot about it for an hour or so, but when i came back, the first thing i read was, To which i respond with this.
 * Chessur has over 500 confirmed kills and is trained in gorilla warfare.

Anyway, that aside, let's take things from the top.

Okay, first off, you have two Faunus Traits. That's unnaceptable in its own right. Actually, no, make that three, since you also have the cat eyes. NOPE, as i read through the  paragraph, you just keep getting more traits. I'm going to stop you right there and direct you to the rules on the front page. Yeah, those little links there? Those aren't optional reading. Go do that now.

His personality is acceptable, although majorly flawed. He's happy no matter what and does what he likes. Somehow, i doubt he could be happy all the time unless he were mentally damaged in some way. Guess we'll find out now.

...Yeah, no, there's no reason for his insanity, and the "giggling from birth" thing ain't gonna fly. Either a baby cries or it is silent. After that, he proceeded to do stupid unreasonable things that i can't really see any character doing without probable casue or reason. To me, this just seems like poor character development, since there's so much you could do that would make it better overall and make him believable.

And yeah, that capybara thing just seems stupid, unbelievable, and tacked on.

The weapon- I...What the flying shit? I...I can't even...Pistols that fire exlosive toy mice and incendiary salmon...PLEASE tell me this is a joke character, because i'm struggling to believe that this is serious at this point.

And he has a bag of holding. Hell no.

I'm not even going to go any further at this point in time. Redo this after you've read the rules and get back to me.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

Also,

> Over 500 kills and is trained in Gorrilla Warfare

NOPE.