Talk:Manhattan Blues/@comment-24678303-20150211210323

Okay, first off the list, she's interacting with Canon Characters, right at the top. Big nono.

Next up, you can either be Human or Faunus, not both, even if there are no features, which makes it pretty pointless in the first place. Even then, it specifically states in the rules that if a character has both human and faunus parents, they are human. There can not be halfa's.

Manhattan is not a color, to my knowledge. Show proof of the color or change the name.

There is NO possible way that Signal could be attacked by Grimm. It is right in the middle of Vale. Then, there's more interaction with Canon Characters. The only reason Glynda saved Ruby was because Ruby was a special case. I seriously doubt Glynda would magically appear to save some random student. There is no city called Gotham in the RWBYverse. Then some interaction with Ozpin, plus more interaction with Glynda and a city that DOES NOT EXIST in the RWBYverse to put the icing on the cake.

From the strengths, she is WAY too OP. If none of the main characters of RWBY can break a Grimms armor, neither can your OCs.

Her weapons have no sort of descriptions beyond their basic use, which is what ANY weapon in RWBY can do.

Overall, this character is much more salvagable than Gotham, but needs a TON of serious work to come even close to being acceptable. Go read through ALL of the guides before continuing, as it is apparent that you have not read any of them. Plus, go read a bunch of Accepted Characters to get an idea of what you should do with your characters.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~