Talk:Vermont Giada/@comment-24911350-20140514235053

--Review--

His weapon seems quite odd, in that it's a pool cute that's an assault rifle. There's simply no room for that sort of mechanism, at all. The only semi-usable way you could turn that into a gun is by making it bolt-action, or muzzle-loaded, no way it could be automatic though, not if you want it to retain the unassuming pool cue look. The page doesn't really say it looks like a plain pool cute though, and if it doesn't, you can entirely ignore this part. I'd recommend making that more clear though.

His semblance is also a very odd choice for something you obviously put some thought into, with minimal cooperation between it, his fighting style, and his weapon. It's overcomplicated with pointless trivialities that add nothing, and make it sound like an ordeal to use his semblance. You could just say "he can make a high-speed dash in any direction (even upwards) within a range of 10 meters, a maximum of 3 times per 10 seconds, then has a 15-30 second cooldown", It's the exact same information and semblance, without all the pointless information and preparation.

And there's no real backstory here, what you have is pretty minimal in substance and doesn't explain at all how he came to be the way he is.