Talk:Arjana Baiardo/@comment-13593058-20161215051755

 Arjana Baiardo Review

Appearance
Description of appearance present.

Faunus trait acknowledged.

Personality
Point of personaility made.

Weapons and Abilities
Both weapons and abilities are acceptable.

Semblance is confusing, consider rewording. Grounds for rejection.

Backstory
Backstory is present.

"Freelancer Mercenary Huntsmen."

Freelancer and Mercenaries are borderline synonyms. Either Mercenary Huntsman or Freelancer Hunstman is fine.

It's also Huntsman, not Huntsmen. The former is singular and the latter is plural.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Confusing Semblance

Review Summary
Everything is good save for the Semblance, which might not be broken at all but rather it's the wording that confuses me on a basic physics level.

Is the Semblance simply just adding the feeling of whatever Arjana feels to her opponent? So in your example, because she is upside down, she feels that her chest is heavier because it is now supporting her legs as well rather than her legs supporting her chest, her hands are being pushed by the ground reacting to the weight of her whole body. On top of that, her legs have this wavy feeling as they need to be constantly adjusted to keep balance. This translates to the opponent feeling their hands and chest being pushed UP as if their hands were supporting their entire weight, their chest was supporting its own weight plus the weight of their legs, and their legs would feel wavy. Essentially, you're making them feel as if you flipped the world on them.

On the OTHER HAND if you apply actual physics, you're actually transfering vectors and reducing people's weights by introducing forces generated by her own weight. So you could essentially make people weightless or even float upwards if Arjana is heavier than they are.

<p style="font-weight:normal;">OR this Semblance just doesn;t work logically like you think it does and I'm just trying to figure it out.

<p style="font-weight:normal;">I don't know. Until then, please to try to sort it out. <p style="font-weight:normal;"> If you require assistance in the matter, feel free to ask other Fanon members for help. Alternatively, you may consult my  character creation guide   for further information regarding my reviewing process. If you believe there to be a misunderstanding or mistake, please contact me via message wall or another reviewer.