Talk:Pan Everest/@comment-933831-20131007222537

Okay...... this backstory seems quite out of setting in a few ways. People taking children for mining is a bad idea... If slavery exists, children are far too weak for it to be effective. Second, there are no wings in RWBY thus far. Third, if you have several people on a boat, injured including one with a gunshot wound, guards aren't going to be laughing at anything. They'll at the very least investigate it, given the ease in doing so. They have massive hovercraft ships. Fly over it. Fourth, how did he get into Beacon? He was a relatively malnourished kid, and had minimal training with no official teachings... I'm concerned some players are viewing Beacon as a bare minimum, just somewhere people go to learn to fight. Lastly, I don't think the parent's reaction is accurate, most oparents would at least consider the possibility, and thoughtlessly rejecting the kid is needlessly cruel and pointless from a narrative and character perspective. Just a few things, but quite major things. For now, Rejected.