Talk:Forrest Daisuke/@comment-25924729-20181114074723

Another really simple character. Not much to talk about, semblance, weapon, aura and abilities seem fair and balanced. His appearance section is also fine, grammar could still really use some work.

Part of his personality section confuses me. "He can be manipulated easily and confused that he did not know everything. However, he is an intelligent person in secret who had learned most of the history and some information and curious person who was fascinated by interesting things."

Its hard to understand. Like... i can interpret it as "He's easily manipulated because he knows nothing", but that contradicts the middle part saying he's smart. Or that "He can be manipulated to thinking he knows nothing", which just doesnt make sense... Either way, both dont make sense, i suggest rewording that paragraph or explaining things to be more clear.

His backstory is also too vague, especially the part mentioning Ash and Ash's father helping him get past an internal struggle. There is no mention what that struggle is anywhere else in the backstory, or how he got it in the first place and how its affecting Forest. To be clear, it may be best to explain that too.

Rejected.

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