Talk:Arthur Hartest/@comment-25924729-20190110100130

Really interesting character, simple but has some nice touches about him i really like.

Appearance, personality and backstory are good. Wood armour is unusual, but an interesting concept to see. His general abilities and weapon are also good, it all meshes together very nicely into a character.

There's issues with his semblance however, the activation requirements seem really vague... like, doing visible damage to an opponent should be better explained. Does it work against aura, which protects a person's body until broken and therefore wont leave any visible wounds; or will aura damage trigger it too? What exactly would the semblance consider an opponent? Does it have to be a living thing, human or Grimm, what about machines or training dummies? Is it just anything he considers an opponent and can physically hit?

I have to ask this cause thinking about how his semblance could be used, theres nothing stopping him from just whacking a random tree or stomping the ground a few times, leaving small scratches, cracks or just footprints and that counts as "visible damage" to buff up before a fight.

The maths behind it also doesnt add up. It says he doubles in strength and power every 20% of aura drained, so it can be done 5 times maximum and would go something like: 1x > 2x > 4x > 8x > 16x. So his maximum capabilty is to become 16x faster and stronger than an average person, not just 5x. 16 is too powerful imo, 5 is acceptable though, so yeah.... might wanna check out the maths in that part.

His CNR is a little vague too, cause there are many types of bears and "bear king" can be interpreted as anything from brown grizzlies, white polar bears, black sun bears etc. It does bring to mind colours though, just that dfferent people may think of different colours. Still acceptable, but a bit shaky.

So yeah.... overall a nicely written character, just issues with the semblance that need to be addressed.

Rejected.

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