Talk:Blood Raserei/@comment-13593058-20160228195301

 A Review of Blood  Raserei

Appearance
Not much to judge on a technical level. Faunus Trait present and lack of explained. Nothing more worthy to note.

Personality
Personality present.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon is overly complicated and contradictory. Grounds for rejection.

Semblance is overly complicated and contradictory. Grounds for rejection.

Backstory
Nothing worthy to note.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced and source checks out.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Weapon contradictions

- Semblance contraditions

Review Summary
I want off this wild ride.

On a serious note, this summary review will be a long one. Please sit tight and really take in what I have to say about this character. This is in no way an attack or anything provacative, a straight review which I will make the best effort to be fair, critical, and respecting in judgment.

Let's start with things that stop the character from being accepted. First, the weapon, which being a Chemistry Student, doesn't make sense.

Structurally it makes sense as a pure melee weapon, but what I have a problem with is the science behind the hydrogen generation mentioned in the weapon. Air as you know is composed of a whole lot more various gases. Nitrogen and Oxygen to name the most abundant - both at 78% and 21% repectively. Now let's look at Hydrogen - a measly 0.00005% per volume. What does that mean? Either your air compressor is so good it can suck up a rediculous amount of air around him before the weapon explodes due to a rediculou atmosphere change, killing him, or it might as well suffocate anyone in vicinity trying to extract Hydrogen out of the air. I did not do the calculations myself, that is not my task nor do I want to but a simply thought experiment shows how rediculous this is.

Second, the Semblance; solid air is solid air, it either acts solid and has solid properties or it acts gaseous and has gaseous properties. What you are describing here is a contradiction which I will assume is bad wording. I would suggest having stronger winds instead of dense winds. Solid air will not redirect attacks, air that's pushing on an object will. Other air pressure manipulationn Semblances do not play with the density of air but rather the properties that pressure has on surround air. What moves things most of the time is the sheer volume of air acting on something rather than the density of the air.

Moving on to other things that do not mark a rejection in my book but are still worthy to note.

<p style="font-weight:normal;margin-bottom:1em;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;">To but it bluntly, this character is too full of himself. "Edge Lord" as the community would call it. Fought a wolf at 6? Not even plausible but highly, highly, highly unlikely. Raped a Grimm because he was drunk? How? How was he even able to A] overpower a Grimm at the an age where he can't even apply to Beacon?

<p style="font-weight:normal;margin-bottom:1em;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;">There are a lot of problems I see character development/wise that I read in this profile but simply forgot them because of the sheer number nor do I have the time and patience to do so considering I have numerous other characters to review.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"> Other than that everything else checks out. Just change the Semblance.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"> If you require assistance in the matter, please feel free to ask other Fanon mambers for help. If you believe there to be a misunderstanding or mistake, please contact me via message wall or another reviewer. This is a special treatment, a character like this motivated me to write a whole-hearted review on it because I know it has potential to be something else and the creator definetly needs some sort of pointer. I have tried really hard to go against my wish to really rip apart the character like an immature human being with memes and jokes, but I restrained myself, because it benefits no one and I know I will regret it. Please take this review into careful consideration and I recommend you rewrite this character to the best of your ability. Good luck.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"> If you require assistance in the matter, please feel free to ask other Fanon mambers for help. If you believe there to be a misunderstanding or mistake, please contact me via message wall or another reviewer.