Talk:Erebus Bedlam/@comment-933831-20140221023352

Well, in the absence of Sel, I'll have to step up to bat to go back to my prior title as a reviewer.

So, to start, I don't think this sort of "Experiment" as part of the military is in any way likely, so it's already a pretty major issue. Secondly, the character feels far too much like you simply strove to make an inhuman character. The weapons are essentially useless in any legitimate fight, as there's no way a weapon like that is bypassing Grimm hide/Armor worth mentioning, or Aura. You'd be better of sticking a metal ball on it or something so it has some method of working.

Now for the next issue, the semblance. In truth, ailment recovery isn't too bad, but it cannot be innate. It can be activated, and clean out his system, similar to Jaune's, but to just be straight up "Immune" to stuff is too far. In addition, having chains along his arms to block attacks won't be working... There's a scientific principle that states that blocking a sword swing with a chain sitting on your arm isn't doing much of anything.

So, overall, to me he feels like a character made elsewhere, and given a semblance to rwbyfy him. For these reasons, rejected.

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