Talk:Nigel Stark/@comment-17970636-20151120153404

Aight, this asshole is good, for the most part, just literally, a couple of things that I think need to be fixed up, feel free to correct me if you disagree.

First off, in his backstory, really nothing struck me as odd until the last part.

We really don't know much about tournaments and how frequently they happen in Remnant. It would appear that Pyrrha winning the Mistral Regional Tournament 4 years in a row was a big thing, but those are official tournaments, and the Vytal festival Tournament is a pretty big thing too right now. The thing is, if he partook in official tournaments and won them all, were the smaller scale? Or were they private tournaments, not fully sure about that. And what is this Dust and Steel Tournament? Again, kinda wondering about that. And honestly, what rules can one break in a tournament where you're meant to beat the shit out of one another? Unless he tossed them out of the ring, then walked out himself and proceeded to beat the shit out of them.... Hey.... There's an idea....

And well, Pyrrha being on the front of those cereal boxes isn't really as much of a sponsorship as an honourific I think, kinda being in front of a Wheaties box? Maybe? Not quite sure about that.

Finally, can't see a visible limiter on his semblance, that's about it.

Have fun.