Talk:Olympia Tremaine/@comment-10337166-20160925010459

Okay so putting art into a character does not mean you need to put it back into pending, but since you did I've looked over her and spotted more than a few things that are somewhat awry.

-Faunus Traits, she appears to have or had two wings and her head feathers, remove one of them

-Semblance, if she manipulates the air, can she remove the oxygen from the area around her? If so what is the range of her semblance.

-You've given her a secondary effect that's remarkably similar to Yang's in her taking in pain and making her Focused.

-No appearance section detailing her outfit, add this.

Rejected

~RP Moderation Team~

Additional notes, general faunus abuse trope is still present though it does actually do something for this OC, so it's less reject-able here. Wing mutilation is gross as fuck, but I applaud you for being unique with something which previously you have not been

Something else I noticed Was her similarity to Adam, not inherently reject-able but something I noticed