Talk:Carmine Verdant/@comment-31408668-20190303074511

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Carmine is the name of a deep shade of red.

APPEARANCE

Short, concise, paints a nice picture in your head. Nothing to detract from. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

The personality works well. Carmine is the jovial center of attention, where he wants to keep everyone happy, and the same intense temperment carries over to his hot-bloodedness. His not absolute respect of authority is a good touch, which paints him as the one that would play dirty, if it was for the greater good. No obvious contradictions. No problems here.

BACKSTORY

The backstory is very point to point, and it works. It paints a picture of a young man meant for the life of action, where he stands up against what he thinks is evil in the way he sees is best. Absence from Vytal Festival is noted. No stepping on canon toes. No problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Weapons are within guideline specifications, We have a single, transforming primary in the form of Halbmond and a secondary in the form of an unnamed onehanded shotgun. The longsword with the Dust alternate forms is a very clever weapon, emulating it's inspiration in a clever way. It's limitations is clearly noted. It's a good, solid weapon. No problems here.

When it comes to combative ability, it seems very reasonable. His fighting style is well defined, and it's a clear styrategy that has been built for the character. Very happy to see it so clearly laid out. No problems here.

SEMBLANCE

Rally as a Semblance can't be accepted. I understand the reference to the life regain mechanic in Bloodborne, but it breaks a clearly laid out guideline; Aura Regeneration Semblances are not allowed. Even with rewording, this Semblance can't work.

CONCLUSION: REJECTED (Semblance regenerates Aura based on limitations.)

'''Carmine, all in all, is a very good homage to a Hunter from Bloodborne. I really like the character, and I am jealous of the weapon, but sadly, the Semblance is not allowed. If it's changed to something not relating to Aura, I see this character being accepted.'''