Talk:Bartholomew Varega/@comment-68.96.189.32-20150801025822

This... doesn't really seem like much of a RWBY character.

If anything it seems like he was made for something else. You never really mention how old he was excactly when he started to make his weapon, you say by the age of seven he went on runs at around Signal Academy [with no parental supervision I might add] but that's about it, nothing else to state his age. In fact i'm not sure if the military would allow someone that's... I don't know, 14 at least? Again you never state how old he is. I get that it's the world of RWBY but the military is far from normal.

You never really stated his goals before either, he thought about becoming a doctor after he killed his father and that was to prevent him from joining the Military but gave that up and then joined the Military after all that? Wouldn't it make more sense for him to want to be a Hunter considering that's how he made his weapon? Speaking of which it's kind of irresponsible for someone that young to have their own weapon, I don't think a teacher would even allow that, and how can he keep it in the military?

The backstory is very clunky, a child that young killed his own father wants to join the Military after two years in prison? It would make more sense for him not want to hurt anyone again, and he joins Beacon by the age of 19? That's a bit odd... and old.

During his military life, "Fauna [Faunus] were usually peaceful" ...According to who? Has he never come across the White Fang before? I hardly doubt he wouldn't know who they are. Also, how is it that someone from the military was so easy to break in interrigation? I get that Movina was beaten before but seriously? She got two other teammates killed,.

Going back to his past, has he never seen his mother? I get she has this disease but there's no like safety suit or anything? You don't even describe what she was like so there's no reason for her to even exist really, it could have been his uncle if he had one and nothing would change.