Thread:JackWasup/@comment-28857181-20150509062421/@comment-28857181-20150604123520

I made some comments, edits, and revision at the link below. As copied from the very bottom of the document:

'''To be light in my words, quite a bit of this was just fluff and I cut them out in this final version here. Of course, as I always say, these are only suggestions and you aren’t forced to use my edits. I corrected grammar and spelling as much as I could and added some bits to help the flow of the story. Otherwise, it’s good and applies very well to the RWBYVerse.'''

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