Talk:Heather Lynette Koki/@comment-24147026-20131218023936

Review Request for Terra:

First of all I would like to say, this is a good developed character; I do have some recommendations and questions I would like to point out though.

As far as Heather's appearance goes, I believe more can be added to it, what you have already is enough to invoke some vision of the character; however, it can be fleshed out a bit more. Moving on to the Battle section, I noticed some things that struck me as odd; mainly how Dust and Aura are used in the weapon processes. As a side note, the arrows that she uses are as you've written "simple arrows" yet are able to cause a blinding light? I don't know if that's plausible, unless a semblance is at play there. Finally, as more of a comment then review on Heather's history, I find it extremely sad and fits well with the thought processes you showed in her Personality.