Talk:Yuri Burakku/@comment-27743663-20161211034418

CNR, can't find any source for it. For future reference, start linking them.

Appearnce, she has 2 faunus traits. Her ears and wingsuit. You can only have one.

Personality, sure, it's passable.

Backstory is a no. You pretty much just made the White Fang's first big operation and painted your OC's as the targets. That crosses fanon-canon interaction. As does the Atlas Millitary general turned criminal. You're practically manipulated the world to fit your own whims and ignoring the actual canon world.

Weapons are fine, just fix the 3 and change it to the listed 2.

Semblance is, interesting, to say the least. It needs a demerit though. Making something from nothing is impossible. It will likely cost aura. Also needs a cool-down time, otherwise she can infinitely spam smoke.

Tl;dr

Rejected on

- CNR

- Two faunus traits

- Backstory with fanon-canon motivations

- No semblance demerits

~RP Moderation Team~

If you  believe there's been a mistake or need assistance on the matter, leave a message on my wall.