Talk:Eventi A. Takeshi-Meso/@comment-5431934-20140117023651

You neglected to address the aforementioned issue with Dust being utilized with either some form of a semblance, as appears in the case of Weiss, Glynda, and Crimson, or with mechanics. Merely having writing does not give it magical properties, not to mention that Dust is a fuel and is consumed with usage.

Stating that the drones can communicate with her again suggest a level of artificial intelligence neither seen in the show nor accepted on this website.

The blades themselves transforming evidently independantly of her actions extrapolates on the previous problem, as well as them apparently leading her arms in killing the Beowolf.

If the beowolf was then killed with 'minimal effort', then why did it exhaust her to the point of passing out?

Why would she have to keep quiet about her heroics to the other students? How would the other students learning of her killing a beowolf cost her greatly?

The only issues at this point are ones from the previous review not addressed, and a couple issues that arose when certain parts where changed and others were not. That being said,

Rejected.

--RP Moderation Team--

Other Comments: If all she did was kill one single beowolf, why was she granted such a grandiose title as 'Savior of Titan'? This isn't a rejection issue, as such a title was given by the mayor, and up to your discretion.

The recruiter was attracted to the village by what was, according to the previous paragraph, a false rumor, right? So then why, when he asked if she defended against the beowolves, plural, did she say yes?

I have to wonder why exactly they're going there on horseback, as airships seem to be the method of choice to get to beacon, and it might be on a plateau. Of course, it doesn't say they use horses all the way there, it just seems like an odd choice for any transportation in Remnant.