Talk:Angela Valentine/@comment-25924729-20190115080923

First OC here? Pretty good actually, character is interesting and page is overall easy to read :)

Appearance, personality and backstory sections are fine, theres an AU part that you specifically asked to be excluded from review, so i didnt read that.

Abilities (BS sensor lol) and weapons seem alright, though a little more details would be nice, like the weapon's appearance and amount of ammo she carries. Not really rejectable, but it would make it easier to get an idea of her weapon's capabilities.

Her semblance is the only real issue on this page, it seems a little overpowered especially allowing her to hit a Beowulf eye at 2200 meters. There has been only one recorded kill with a .50 BMG bullet at such range in history, and even that was body shot, let alone hitting an eye. Id suggest reducing the range she can effectively snipe with her semblance. It also has very few weaknesses, adding a few more like the time it lasts, cooldown times or negative effects on her for using it to balance out the ability would be nice, to keep it balanced and fair.

CNR checks out, no other issues found on the page. So yeah, just the semblance bit needs some work.

Rejected.

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