Talk:Wynston Arkwright/@comment-28932554-20170108191016

Review:

Name: Subject to rejection

Reason: The name Winchor is undoubtably creative however it bends the rules with regards to the fanon guildines. Winchor being as you written being the mixture of the words 'Winter' and 'Ichor' does not allude to a colour but instead alludes to two words which allude to two different colours. Simply put it is a tad too quirky to be accepted, however there is a possibility it can pass. You can either change it or hope for the best. Both decisions aren't bad in the slightest.

Appearance: Discrepency free

Reason: A basic enough appearance described fairly well. The character doesn't possess any unallowed characteristics such as silver eyes and all in all will not let you down.

Background: Subject to rejection

Reason: Quite honestly this section is what let me down. Although quite good and interesting early on, it quickly became quite ridiculous. Are you honestly trying to make people believe that a 10 year old boy can just run up and kill a grown man just like that? Assuming that you just failed to mention that from the age of 8 to 10 Winchor trained to kill someone, it still sounds quite far fetched. No sliver of an emotional response, no explanation of why a child would willing decide to murder someone in cold blood. There's no clarification regarding the situation. Its honestly hilarious when you put into perspective a small boy who could barely lift a shotgun firing said weapon into a grown man without any written response. All in all I'll just stop my personal review here and say that you should re-read your OC's page to check for logic holes and guildine discrepensies.

Mistakes:

Backstory paragraph 4: The music school WASN'T without its flaws

Latent Troubles paragraph one: Deeper than that, he realised that HE couldn't play the way he does

-MasterClass