Talk:Lucas Cray/@comment-24087318-20131219095954

Backstory could use a little more elaboration. How did he leave the slums? Did he have any sort of way to defend himself? How did he recieve his training? He's got some impressive titles, but how were they earned/given?

In addition, while it's not rejection grounds, I'd suggest cutting down on the characters arsenal. Characters in RWBY arn't known for carrying multiple kinds of weapons. Just one that does every job it needs to by design and/or transformation. As well, I'd suggest narrowing down is martial arts repetoire to ones that are best used alongside a sword or other one handed weapon, to better fit the characters overall combat style and strengths.

As such, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~