Talk:Lloyd Donalbain/@comment-24087318-20131215051930

Your characters page seems to be written more like a true biography than the typical format OC pages are written.

In addition, there's a lot of speculation involving the specific time the Faunus War was set in, and exactly how many years it was before present time.

Semblances arn't uncontrollable, even Yang can turn hers off simply by calming down. It doesn't effect or alter her emotional state either; it just makes one particular state more deadly.

Your character also seems to be quite overpowered in terms of abilities, posessing superhuman levels of Strength, Speed, and Endurance that would best even canon characters like Glynda and Ozpin in a duel.

My suggestion is tone down your characters power level, and alter their Semblance to be more canon fitting.

Until then, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~