Talk:Electra Forester/@comment-30530552-20180617011813

Alright, let's have a look at her.

CNR is fine.

Appearance could use some extra details, since it didn't go into full detail. Not rejection worthy by itself, but still should be done.

Personality needs some extra details, but what's there right now makes sense.

Backstory could also probably use some extra details: what sort of technicality allowed the boys to get off scot-free? How was a baker well-off enough to support 10 kids? General things like that.

Weapon...I'm a bit confused as to how it works....does she have to put her gauntlets together to form the bow? And what makes it single-shot? It could use more details.

Semblance works...I'm curious, if one didn't use the full burst of speed, would her "grounding" time decrease as well? Aside from that, simple and effective.

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Overall, most sections would benefit from some elaboration, but what you have so far seems to work well enough. Once those details are in, make sure to resubmit!

-Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

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