Talk:Niebieski Zlota Tarcza/@comment-13593058-20161025175222

Refering to /u/ Nice Things' review, I still see some problems with the character.

Character Backstory Confusion
As to why some sort of fighting or military operation needs to be done was not clearly stated by either the "Ruby Rose" operation nor by the backstory itself.

In essence, the backstory makes no sense as it presents itself for now. Please organise your thoughts appropriately

Semblance Remains Non-specific
While a Semblance aimed as controlling air as an element is not against the rules, it having no reasonable drawbacks on the user nor a reasonable indicated range makes it susceptible to very intense godmodding during Roleplay scenarios.

Contradiction as to the definition of "brutal"; character has qualms with death by suffocation but not with death by amputation/blood loss.

Verdict: Rejected
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