Talk:Hitori Kazami/@comment-24678303-20150310161752

While you did fix quite a bit from the last Review, i'm still having issues with the page, mainly with bits of the Backstory and Semblance.

This is a bit more of a minor detail, but still something that needs to be change. While it isn't unacceptable per say to have someone/someone's parents to be working for the SDC (since it is presumably a VERY large company), it is a whole different story to say they were "one of the top scientists there". Just remove the top part and you should be fine there.

As for the Semblance, ehh... Shadows themselves are, moreorless, simply a lack of light. One can not weaponize a shadow or make it able to defend something because it is a massless particle. Plus, the only 'elemental manipulation' Semblance we have seen so far is  being able to generate precisely controlled magnetic fields, so i'm really skeptical about the idea of one being able to use Shadows as a weapon or defensive object, since they are not a solid object. Until proven otherwise in Canon, shadow Semblances aren't possible.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~