Talk:Penina Silvermane/@comment-24544506-20150814221819

Helloes! No mod, but I noticed your character, and it kept my attention for longer than 5 minutes (which is rather impressive), so I decided to leave a review! Hope you find it helpfull.

In general, she's looking like a very solid and original character. The species of birds is incredibly unique that will definately make your character stand out next to other bird faunus. There are a couple minor working points I can see right now, but nothing to let your hopes down on!

The appearance is great. I love how you made it look practical and subtly follow the pirate theme you're going with her without making her look like so many other OC's I've seen and give a RWBY-like feel. That being said, I do question the reason for the forearm armor device. I feel like the function could easily be fullfilled with a scroll. Maybe she doesn't have a scroll and uses those instead, I assume?

The personality section is nice as well. It contains everything you'd need to know about her, and again, feels like a type of character I haven't seen before, though I do think the last paragraph belongs more in a trivia-type of section.

I do feel like Penina's semblance could use some more information and detail. How much aura does it need? How long can she usually use it, or does it depend on the angle of the surface she's walking on? I can imagine her, despite everything, still having trouble to run/move as fast at 90°(if she's moving upwards) as on flat surfaces, and gain speed when going down.

I like the backstory as well. It's not woe-is-me despite the more unfortunate events and gives a more realistic feel.

Lastly for my review, I'd request you to add more info on her name. In which language does it mean pearl? Does her name have any connection to the rest of her character.

So yeah, great work! Also, I hope you don't mind, but I took the liberty to gave her a spin with a doodle. I mean, if you have those manes, you got to show them, right?