Talk:Iris Spark/@comment-25924729-20200222122331

LMAO What is that backstory?! Oh my god, no hesitation at all. It wasnt even a situation where she didnt have a choice or was helpless to fight, just... "Welp, im running away. Lemme just abandon my sister to the grimm so i can get away faster. Never liked her anyway"

Im laughing way harder than i should at this, its great XD

But yeah, to the review... Appearance, Personality and Backstory are alright, if a little short.

Abilities, weapon and semblance are alright. It makes perfect sense for someone who likes hurting others to develop an electricity semblance.

Theres a lot of weird stuff after that though, empty sections and links leading to other pages, some not even working or the pages dont exist? Im not sure if thats supposed to be how it is, or the page is just incomplete? It looks very messy either way... if there isnt anything in those secions or links i suggest removing them for now until you actually write stuff into them? Short descriptions of what those terms and people being linked to in the Relationships section are also preferred, its easier to understand what those are instad of making people go read an entire page to understand what you mean.

This isnt an issue i can really reject on, just a formatting and quality thing i suggest,

There is a real issue in the Trivia section though. Its empty like the others, but i cant ignore the lack of a CNR here. All RWBY OCs names must contain a colour name reference, and this reference be stated in the Trivia section of the OC page. Please add that, and maybe fix the formatting issues too.

It was a fun OC, unfortunately...

Rejected.

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