Talk:Carmyne Trylltur/@comment-25924729-20181126133141

Nice cheracter, gives me dark fantasy vibes reading this page, like Dark Souls or Game of Thrones type.

Personality and appearance are alright. I think there's a typo in the Appearance section, maybe you meant shoulders instead of shovel? Weapon is also good, nice and neat writing overall.

Her semblance is probably the most iffy part of this character. Berserk mode power ups are kinda common, but rarely to the extreme of creating an entirely different personality for the character. Even in this case, i'd argue Minos is simply an emotional state of Carmyne herself, instead of her own person. Still, no rules broken, and its actually very interesting, i like the details on how its actually a hormone effect instead of pure magical semblance power, i personally love seeing somewhat realistic abilities ilke this, instead of unexplained magic shennanigans.

The backstory mentions her family has like a heritage of possessing similar semblances and interpreting them as elder spirits and stuff. Two things to note here:

First, Ozpin is the only canon example of a dead person's spirit being able to pass into another person's body, and that ability was given only to him by the Gods, meaning nobody else is allowed to do that. From what im reading here, its all done through semblances and split personalities, and the elder spirit thing seems to be merely superstition of the family. So its fine, but please keep in mind never to literally have an elder spirit manifest in her.

Having hereditary semblances is also possible, but claimed to be extremely rare. I bring this up because multiple generations of the family seem to have similar semblances to this one, implied by the backstory. Though thats not really an issue with this character, but the family as a whole. If you ever create more OCs related to her, you should give them different semblances, or similar, but with variations to make them somewhat different and comply with the canon.

But yeah, all these issues arent really rejectable. Just points to note.

Accepted.

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