Thread:Aldrasos/@comment-5999656-20170426201626/@comment-5999656-20170427153810

I noticed much of the progression in the masquerade comes from Iva not knowing better. I'll trust you since you've got the story down. At the very least though, I don't think it would hurt to make her a little more likeable from the get-go. Aside from the obvious fact that she's law enforcement and the enemies are mafia, there's not really an emotional reason the audience should root for her instead of the villains she's up against. Again, that might be your intention, and things could change really quickly in the next chapter, so that's just my observation given the limited knowledge that I have now.

I'm looking forward to your next update, for sure ;)