Thread:Takeshi kun21/@comment-25363089-20170225204349/@comment-8182065-20170324082158

I'd wanna suggest adding in a reason for him to want to fight in the first place, as well as why Rasuk respects Coyote at all. Show how his anger gets the best of him. I'd say, say Rasuk was always picked on by the neighborhood/school because his father wasn't around. He would in turn get furious, scaring people away from him and earned himself a bad reputation. Then once Coyote returned, he might yell at his father which would lead to Rasuk getting punished, negatively affecting their relationship.

How remote is the cottage away from civillization too btw? And how did everyone adapt to such a small living space? Something I feel that would be brought up in a review. Perhaps, instead of a cottage, it can be somewhat of a mansion or estate that used to be a base for Coyote's enemies after he "tied up his loose ends." It probably wouldn't be in the best condition, but would suffice for all 9 of his children.

From when they move on to their new home, maybe Rasuk starts getting picked on again (probably a few years later, maybe when he's 12-14). His older siblings offer a few tricks for fighting back or getting away, and then Coyote would offer to train him. Rasuk refuses out of anger, runs off and then gets attacked by 5 thugs. He gets the crap beaten out of him, and Coyote comes in to rescue his son. After that Rasuk starts to call him "Sir" showing some respect towards his father.

It's no problem at all, glad to hear you're improving a lot too. :)