Talk:Chryses Diamandis/@comment-30530552-20180206190236

Aaaah, I remember this gal from Discord, where you were debating color schemes and looks for her. Let's see how she holds up.

CNR checks out. Do note that for more obscure references or very specific sources, linking said source would be in your best interest for a slightly faster review. Regardless, I found it as the first result I searched for.

Appearance checks out.

Personality has no visible contradictions or major issues, though if you were to add more to this section in the future, specificity with her day to day demeanor (and what motives might drive her to deviate from her base personality) and actions would be highly beneficial additions, albeit optional. (Not rejection-worthy.)

Backstory...hmm, were both the father and mother Huntsmen, just as a clarification? I know you say it was a form of clan, which would imply the answer being yes, but that doesn't necessarily guarantee all of them would go the same way of life. I also question the circumstances behind "tearing him apart." Was his Aura broken at the time? Was he distracted and thus the blades were more effective in depleting his Aura and continuing past once it broke?''' It's a bit unclear, I'd clarify that. I would also mention who the "trusted hands" are for the children she's tasked with keeping watch over.'''

Weapon-wise, she's fine. Per guidelines, defining what forms "Impact Dust" is required, as unless you're referring to the Cyan Dust Weiss has used on numerous occasions (and hasn't been given a clear definition in-canon), it's considered Fan-Made, which needs to be derived from in-canon Dust sources. See the Dust-Guide (Section 6 of the main Guidelines page) for additional detail.

Semblance could benefit from additional detail, the concept itself works, but needs slightly clearer limits on how much effort is put into maintaining a particular amount of swords based on her overall stamina, which would be extremely helpful.

Overall, solid start. The main issues here almost exclusively derive with a need for more detail, but aren't particularly huge issues outside of Guideline standards. Regardless, they need fixed.

-Rejected.

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