Talk:Jet Phillips/@comment-24416658-20160308060625

To begin with, the OC's name does not fit into the Color Naming Rule, or CNR. The CNR says that the first name must be a color, relate to a color, or make you think of a color. If it's not obvious, it must be specified. Please change this.

Appearance, while not reject worthy, is extremely unimaginative. I'd recommend looking around the wiki and taking inspiration from other people making appearances for their OCs.

The weapons are also not reject-worthy, but they have little to no explanation. We don't know about their detailed looks, their name, anything. Again, take a look at other OCs on the site and go from there.

Semblance is not acceptable. While the powers themselves are, there are no limitations stated on the semblance, i.e how much time he can use it for or if there's a certain condition he must meet prior to using it. Please add these in as soon as possible.

Backstory needs a lot more work. Two sentences would be enough in some cases, but in this case, there is not enough information in those two sentences. For example, Signal is an actual school, not somewhere someone can just run off to.

And please, work on your grammar. I am aware that it is very likely english is not your first language. However, here on Fanon we ask that your OC page be legible for other people, so that they can read your OC. There are many sentence fragments, run ons, and missing punctuation here. Please fix this.

Rejected.

--RP Moderation Team--