Talk:Shut Up and Save The World/@comment-203.104.11.43-20130726143103

This is absolutely excellent!

Jackson is a solid character, as someone else said, he does kind of remind me of John Marston from Red Dead Redemption but their motivations are different. He is humourous and grew on me in the short time I was reading (I did read it all though! :D)

I think you absolutely nailed Weiss's personality, she is nice but can be a bitch at times. All in all you really did well to get her personality right.

Walter seems like your cliche kind of manservant but in no means is that a bad thing! It suits the theme of royalty.

The dialogue and use of language is really excellent, the story fits together and flows perfectly. I am interested to see where you take the next chapter!