Talk:Agave Koppai/@comment-27743663-20170118204909

CNR checks out.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is fine.

Backstory, there's no mention of her having the training necessary to get into Beacon. She just "appears" there essentially, cutting to initation for whatever reason. That, and, she knows about Cinder. Realistically, there's no way she could've known someone was behind the scenes, because no one did. She doesn't have some magical feeling 6th sense that allows her to pick up on this, there were no clues left behind, and hearing Cinder's voice after the Pyrrah and Penny fight won't make her suddenly realize everything.

Plus, Pentagonnal Ottoman will likely need clarifications. Fan-made organizations are allowed, but this is really just thrown in there and then...nothing. What is it? It is some bodyguard company? Is it some super secrety Huntsman training facility (that would be a no). There's no information given on it, like it assumes the reader to know everything about it from name alone.

Semblance, I'd like to know what the cost is and just how long she can keep it up in total, given she can minorly control gravity, whiiiiiich is largely an /iffy/ thing. Changing the direction of her gravity also wouldn't allow her to fly or levitate, at all. If she moved it up "up," she'd simply fly towards the sky until she comes in contact with a surface or changes it back. There's really no way it'd be possible.

Weapon, Dust dying isn't a thing, we have seen nothing in canon to insinuate this, and either way I doubt it's possible given Dust is crytallized elements. You can't dye an element, no matter how cool you think it'll be. Besides that, from my understanding, it implies using the Dust allows her to control the element entirely, which isn't how Dust works at all. Like I said earlier, it's crystallized elements, it's limited to the element stored within the crystals, and that's it. No total manipulation.

As a note on the weapon, you likely mean boots rather than socks, as inserting Dust into a sock socket is impossible, as socks don't have sockets.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- No training mentioned to get into Beacon

- "Knowing" about Cinder and her schemy schemes

- Pentagonnal Ottoman need more clarifications

- Semblance lacks the necessary demerits, and flying with it is largely improbable.

- Dying Dust isn't a thing, neither is full Elemental controll through using Dust.

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