Talk:Ermey L. Winters/@comment-24416658-20160322071608

Okay, well, the name fits under the CNR.

Personality and Appearance have no issue, they're just...bland.

Backstory....alright, listen. This backstory doesn't seem very plausible. Going from a specialist foot soldier to huntsman in training? This is even after knowing that Atlesian soldiers don't look like this OC whatsoever, and are very technologically advanced, covered in armor and sporting blaster rifles. It just doesn't really work.

He still has three weapons: the rifle, the shovel, and the pistol. Pick two.

Semblance feels way too painful. The shock of having a lot of pain coming at you at once can put a man into shock, and no amount of Aura is stopping that.

Rejected for above.

--RP Moderation Team--

Notes: SPACING. Please, space out the paragraphs. Nobody wants to read a massive wall that takes up the entire screen. It's painful to the eyes, it's annoying, and it's really off-putting.