Talk:Faigel "Faye" Acheflow/@comment-30530552-20171115183712

Let's see what we've got here.

- CNR needs to be more specific...bird could refer to any number of colors, and it's not like "rainbow" which makes people think of all 7 straight away...so a specification is necessary. Her last name does evoke the color white, so perhaps you could go along those lines?

- Looking and reading about Faye I don't think sexy is the right word, but it might be just a personal thought, as most of her description makes her sound more adorable than sexy. Nonetheless, appearance looks good.

- Personality is befitting if a little bit scary with that last point.

- How big are these chakrams we're talking about? Do they have any other functions? What sort of arrangement is there for the spikes? Overall, weaponry could benefit from some extra detail.

- Semblance needs more detail to be acceptable. Restoring people's Aura's needs specific limitations and feasible bounds to actually be acceptable, and right now there isn't anything for it.

- The backstory is pretty much the same as your other character's, so that's fine.

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Overall, you just need some additional detail for the weapon & Semblance, and to be more specific with your CNR reference.

-Rejected

~RP Moderation Team~