User blog comment:Tuckapenguin/The Review Game/@comment-13488655-20130816061658/@comment-23784953-20130816100010

I guess you're up first. Eh, time to go for broke. Also, http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Maki_Kuronami this again.

I'll be reviewing Kurai Jack Jade, I guess. This will mostly be based on his wiki page version instead of the updated one you had lately.

For now, I'll start with the pros.

As a general character, he mostly fits planet RWBY in terms of content. Though a bit rough around the edges, his backstory holds some interest.

As a person, he's mostly all decent and that's good. But I think it can get more detailed.

As a combatant, I'd like to praise his ghost blades, which, while done a few times in some games, still manages to remain badass. It also piques my interest because it leaves no friggin' wounds.

Now that that's done, I'm gonna go on his cons.

As a general character, he has a lot of powerful abilities for a young age. This doesn't bode well. He can go two routes, he can either be older or lose some at least two of his speciality, which can either go as his martial arts mastery, his swordsmanship skills or his genius-level intellect.

As a person, he falls a bit flat. Sure, he seems like an okay guy, but that's the problem. He's too mysterious that he's skirting the line between flat character and rounded character.

As a combatant, I'd go on a record and say combining all his specialties makes him incredibly powerful. And that's bad. For his age, he's already surpassing a lot of the more adult characters such as Glynda. The main justification is his cyborg enhancements. (though this was updated in the recent revision, just not the one in the wiki page)

Overall, Jack borders between a good character and a bad character. This isn't entirely terrible, since it means there's quite few changes to be done, and after a little refining, he can be a pretty cool character as well. I recommend reading a couple of novels to help enhance the vocabulary. Brevity is wit, but there's no harm in going into detail.

On rating, I'd give him a 3/5. Decent, yet his setbacks make him a little average as a character.