Thread:Takeshi kun21/@comment-25628022-20141117203959/@comment-8182065-20141203045902

If it's a small coloney, a "war" isn't the best term. If the box is just a plot to bring in tourists, you'd just have a bunch of angry religious customers and possibly a few angry/despairing locals. How you put it now, sorry to say, also sounds a bit weird to me; a few people decide to say "Hey, this box here has a God in here!" and everyone buys it just like that. It would be more understandable if there was some sort of legend involved where a God was placed inside the box, some local folklore, and the people gave offerings to it as a form of worship.

Then the environment thing: don't say it "slows their lifespan", just go with they live in a much less polluted area, fresh air, and live longer just because of a healthy lifestyle.

And there was one line where it made me to believe that someone opened the box and someone found Strider inside.

And really? I thought you might've been going for a Pandora's Box allusion, since war broke out and Pandora's box is pretty much about a girl who opens a box that unleashes all negative traits into the world lol.