Talk:Leon Gin/@comment-30530552-20170417133127

Okay, let's see here.

CNR is passable, what with Leon referring to lions, which have a set color scheme, but I would recommend adding the basis in the Trivia section for future reference, as that can lead to confusion.

Appearance, you really shouldn't have to mention his level of attractiveness. What you do with the appearance section is simply describe how he looks. That said, it's not a huge issue, but a quick rewrite would easily fix that.

Backstory is missing. I understand if you just wanted some feedback on the character, but until you add some content there, it can't really be accepted. If you were just looking for some feedback, just contact a reviewer or even another Wiki member on their wall, and they should be able to help you. The other thing to note is that Mr. Gin here wouldn't be attending Beacon as of now, considering the events of Volume 3. If and when you write his backstory, I recommend making mention of that, because right now, it's written in the profile and the first section as if it's current attendance, which steps on canon toes.

Weaponry and Fighting Style, I doubt that he would have "complete mastery", as even experienced Huntsmen and Huntresses often slip-up when fighting. The other thing I noticed [actually, throughout most of the page] was dabbling in the whole "better than most" at x, y, and z skills. That could potentially be viewed as Mary Sue/Gary Stu-ish, so I recommend rewriting it so he has some form of expressed weakness, as you've made no mention whatsoever of it.

Semblance, similar problems as mentioned previously. Personally, I find it wasn't explained well enough, so I'm confused as to what it actually does. An example would greatly help with confusion, and along those lines you would need some demerits just so its not too powerful.

P.S. As a sidenote, I sincerely hope you asked for permission in using the images here, because given your wording, it sounds like they wasn't yours, and no credit was noted...and if that's the case, then we have a much larger issue that I'm not set up to deal with.

Rejected on: Missing backstory, skills without explanation or weaknesses, and unclear Semblance lacking definitive demerits

-PisceanWaterbender, reviewer-in-training