Talk:Aureolin Royce/@comment-25924729-20200202080755

There's quite a lot of issues to adress on this page... lets see

Appearance and personality are alright. We dont allow straight up using character art from other media as the official appearance of an OC, at least you should credit the source the image is from, or only make it a reference image.

Backstory has the most issues here. The biggest one is the time rewinding ability of the hourglass? No matter how its done, semblance, magic, technology or otherise our rules do not allow any time manipulation abilities due to it being imposible to balance in interactive RP. I'm sorry, but messing with time is just straight up not allowed.

There's also the issue of it being an ancient artifact that still works, presumably via magic or ancient technology. Our rules do allow OCs to discover ancient ruins and artifacts from long forgotten history of RWBY, but they cannot discover magic or functioning artifacts and devices. Simply put... he can discover the ruins and the two artifacts, but having them be able to still function and channel sand, rewind time or do anything else aside from just being regular objects is not allowed.

Aside from these, smaller issues in the backstory must be adressed, like how is he good enough to be specifically requested to be a Huntsman at age 16? Why is he allowed to work alone instead of on a Team? Unusual stuff like this may be allowed if the character has a good enough reason to justify it, without magic artifacts of course.

It would also help if you spaced the backstory into paragraphs next time? Not really rejectable just very hard to read...

Onto his weapons... Sand Dust doesnt exist in RWBY canon. You are allowed to create your own fan Dust types though, if you want to use it. But you must specify what Sand Dust is, how it was made and what it can do. However, we do not allow any sort of Dust that converts a person's aura into sand. a semblance that converts aura to sand is fine, but doing it via Dust just something we have not seen in the show, nor have any reason to believe it or anything similar is possible using Dust, even fan made ones.

His semblance of controlling sand is alright, but could use more limits like the amount of sand he can control, time limits etc.

Trivia section is missing a CNR section. All RWBY character's names must relate to a colour. I assume you know this already since Aureolin is a valid CNR meaning gold in latin iirc, still it must be explicitly mentioned in the trivia section.

No other issues found... theres quite a lot of work here but i think the character can be salvaged. I suggest talking to some people in the Discord server? They will be able to help you.

Rejected.

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