Talk:Charles Daorenzhidun/@comment-24087318-20140111025057

Character lacks detail in multiple areas that need addressing.

His weapon seems to be a shield and dagger that combine from how it's worded, but it's not explicitly mentioned.

Beacon accepts Students that generally have previous combat schooling and posess transcripts, this character appears to have neither.

In addition, his Hunters Sense ability seems very...more like a mindset than an actual ability. And it wouldn't likely force him into a particular set of actions, only help him choose what to do.

His Semblance on the other hand, needs more explaination, or to be removed. We know Emotions can play into how some Semblances function (Yangs) but what the ability is itself isn't listed at all here.

In conclusion, the entire page needs more work, more detail and description.

As such, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~