Talk:Saffron Hurst/@comment-27603392-20140601120845

Most bitchy review alert. Don't read if you find me annoying.

Appearance: Robe over armored plates ? Dude, it's like you're calling 911 after killing someone.

Personality: Change of personality =/= change of physical ability. Kinda obvious there.

Ok, before I review any further, break that damn wall of text into smaller paragraphs, will you ?

History: It could use some more work. Like what the hell his parents were doing ? How did he NOT notice what his parents were doing ? I will probably nitpick more when you clear that damn wall.

Weapons: You do know that there is a term called "two-handed" weapon, right ? When I read about Saffron's gauntlets, I imagining him wearing two large arm cannon-like gloves on his hand, and it simply just can't work. Make them smaller. (I will also assume that Saffron has built like this dude 1, and a torso-sized gauntlet would be super hard to wield and walk around, let alone fighting with two of them)

Also, how can he be fast when he has large weapons ? That doesn't seem possible and gives him too much of a round edge, or in other word: He can't be beaten in a close to mid range combat given what is in his profile. Nerf it, dude.

The teeth thing is kinda overly describe, since human's teeth (most species' teeth) cannot crush bones. Another thing to be noted that (unless Saffron has a huge ass jawline and Joker's mouth combined) human's mouth cannot physically wrap around wrist and bite an entire hand off. I suggest you study more of human anatomy and make changes.

Rejected.