Talk:Kuro Takeshi/@comment-24087318-20131231061149

Article is still labeled as Incomplete and a Work In Progress.

As such, it will be removed from Pending. Pending is not for In-Progress and incomplete characters. It is for finished characters that are awaiting approval.

That being said, there ARE some points so far that will be rejected that should be pointed out while I'm here.

His character is too overpowered on knowledges and skills. Knowing all these is on swords, guns, AND martial arts, and being very proficient in building and using them by age 11. It's way too overpowered and unbalanced.

In addition, his martial arts training doesn't fit with the rest of his abilities. He's a sword fighter, he doesn't need to be using multiple styles of unarmed combat. It's just adding to the characters Mary-Sue levels of combat capability and efficiency.

Even though the character can be bested by people with more knowledge and ability, the way he is written there are HARDLY anybody with that much of either.

In addition, Aura doesn't posess the ability to just add power to strikes, that would be delegated to a Semblance.

His backstory posesses an element that contradicts his entire character: If he's very independant and doesn't talk to or deal with others, it's highly unfitting he'd call them all to show off and boast out of the blue.

The character has too many weapons and combat tools, and doesn't fit the spirit of RWBY. Characters typically only carry one weapon, or two of the same one, that simply posesses every feature they need for combat. No extra utilities beyond extra or different ammunitions for their guns, if appliable.

That being said, since the character is still listed as a Work In Progress, it will not be rejected, but simply moved out of Pending. But the character is, overall, VERY overpowered for their age. Compensating for a lack of personal skills with combat abilities that would rival Beacon teachers isn't acceptable, it just Mary-Sues the character. I would suggest changing the above points before submitting it again.