Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20140704110526/@comment-13593058-20140807074518

Reviewer: DustpeltX (Please don't slap me)

Character: Tianee Musk

Author: ThanhnuFia (Flora-senpai)

The following review on the character of Tianee Musk is as follows:

Tianee Musk, a truly well-made character of fair proportions. The character itself shows definite effort in development as well as a unique vibe in physical design.

The theme is consistent throughout the whole character with little to no inconsistencies. Examples, like Niel, present a good case to her reindeer theme other than her name and obvious antlers, as well as the winter environment colour scheme she possesses. Another good incorporation of this theme would be her Semblance resembling the defense/offence tactics of real reindeer. Good incorporation on this one.

Personality of this character is well developed and the result of said personality is well explained through occurrence of events or environmental developments during the character’s childhood. Many characters can be calm or polite in any circumstance, but adding in certain glitches such as annoyance to teasing due to being teased by her brother a lot as a child or being strong-willed and respectful due to being in a familial environment where one must be, really promotes the illusion that this character can really exist and is a living person.

The back story is plausible and clearly displays Tianee’s reason for being at Beacon and is also accompanied by a well written full-short story.

Finally, the weapon of choice and the fighting style that comes with it for our Little Wrath of Winter, the Ocean Thorn. First of all, a unique and well thought out weapon which fits perfectly within the RWBY universe. It transforms, has multiple functions, matches in terms of colour scheme, and most important of all, kills things in a gruesome manner. Which is what this show is all about anyway.

Ocean Thorn appears to work as well as it is described and compliments the character fighting prowess. This of course meaning that a small and agile but strong individual still lacks one thing, range. The weapon is perfectly designed to void the problem and makes complete sense for the character to use unlike some characters who have redundant weapons just for the sake of “coolness”.

Fighting prowess is acceptable, nothing special to point out assuming that her strength doesn’t outperform her size at a reasonable level. Even so, a reasonable weakness, like lack of pain endurance, is present, balancing her.

I will not review her relationship with other as they are no grounds for rejection and as much as I have read, are consistent and probable.

Despite all this, there are still some problems I find in this page, but none are big enough for the grounds of rejection nor do they really matter. I will still state them as something to keep in mind, but all in all a good character.

Accepted.

Note: Here are some of the problems I found, please do read through them.

1. Grammar

<p class="MsoListParagraphCxSpMiddle">English may not be your first language, so this one is no biggy, everyone sucks at grammar anyway. There’s a few missing words here and there as well so the page should get some proof reading.

<p class="MsoListParagraphCxSpMiddle" style="text-indent:-18.0pt;mso-list:l0level1lfo1">2. Ocean Thorn

<p class="MsoListParagraphCxSpLast">I know I said it was a great weapon before and it still is. It’s just the name that bugs me. If the theme of Tianee is the scent of deer as well as winter wildlife, perhaps the inclusion of the ocean is a bit too farfetched. Yes I know, winter means ice, ice means water, water means relatively big water body, but that’s kind of a big jump. In my opinion anyway.