Talk:Raye Kuria Delsun/@comment-25197246-20140804185222

(I find it funny that I made the allusion to Pyrrha with Peyton but not Sun here... maybe it's just the name, nunchucks and color I totally ignored lol)

Woot. A child-natured teammate. The picture doesn't convey that, but I got no complaints there. (By far, I think I like Dahlia and Peyton the most in terms of appearance, at least.)

Personality: Pyromaniac eh? That does fit well with a childlike nature. But COMBINE that with a potential genius. Geez, now I'm scared of her O.o

Backstory: A sickly child? That's rather surprising-- for a moment I thought Blaise was the one with potential health problems, but Raye's health doesn't seem questioned later on except by her parents? Either way, since you gave her the smarts, I'm assuming the drawback really is her strength.

Weapons: There is the possibility that it could be too similar to Sun's (we haven't seen him use his as actual guns or combine the nunchuks like what you have so far, though). Exactly how good is she in hand-to-hand? I imagine Blaise being better at it, but the concept of being weak in the beginning makes me think that Raye isn't fully capable of fistfighting, even though her weapon is melee oriented.

Also, with Blaise having that grenade launcher--- which Peyton and Dahlia (and Raye) being comfortable in ranged fighting, it seems that you may just want to give Blaise a more up-front role?

Ah yes, I am not a fan of long names (simple and short are my points with weapon names and stuffs) so I would've preferred keeping Kuria on the side and simply stick to Raye Delsun-- it appears more concise, just a personal thingy. Oh, and since you used spanish in the last name, why not Delsol? Sol is spanish for sun anyways >.> (but I guess a point to make against that is that it sounds too much like Diesel *sigh*).

Annnd that should do it for the team. You put a ton of effort into these characters and it really shows. There's good variety here, and I hope to see what you may do with them next! (Other than add a team page, asdf get onto that! And in the meantime, adding links to each other teammate in the relationships section may help a ton for people looking at your team!)