Talk:Star Elaine/@comment-24087318-20131223114459

No such thing as a "kitten" Faunus. There's Cat. In addition, the character would have ears big enough they'd more than likely be difficult to hide by her hair alone, think Blake, who has long hair but needs a ribbon to hide them. In addition, Faunus is the species, where the animal they share traits from would be their race. (Eg. Species - Faunus, Race - Cat.)

Having a fiery "rage mode" that triggers when she's upset doesn't fit with canon. We havn't seen characters that do this. In addition, the specifics of it are too close to Yang Xiao Longs Semblance, wrapping herself in flames. (Which triggers when she's angered, but isn't uncontrollable.)

The ability to make people see their "best dream and worst nightmare" would be conisdered a psychic or mind effecting attack, and most likely would not work on a Grimm, which is what Hunters and Huntresses are based around fighting, not people. In addition, mental based attacks havn't been seen in canon so far, we don't know if they exist in any way. It's possible that one of Auras abilities would block them if they did exist, as well.

Her other abilities make little sense. Summoning blinding light? How? Is it her weapon or dust? Semblance?

In addition, she posesses two very distinct weapons. What we've seen from characters in RWBY is that they either posess a single weapon, or two of the same one, and this weapon simply transforms or posesses multiple functions, such as Rubys scythe-rifle, or Yangs gauntlets that can fire projectiles by changing out their ammunition.

If the character is meant to be smart, but weak physically, it makes little sense her backstory has her solving problems by fighting off her bullies and winning.

Overall, the character needs a clean up of grammar, and more detail as to how her abilities are done. Reduce the amount of weapons she carries, and add more detail to how they work. Also, I'd suggest reading up on more things about RWBY, such as weapons, semblances and other things to help this character fit the world a bit more. Having unexplained abilities doesn't fit at all, and her backstory has quite a few contradictions and gaps in information. If the White Fang attacked her family, why would a group of unknown Faunus help her out of nowhere? And other such things.

To conclude, this character has many abilities that have little explaination as to how they work, or why the character has them. She also posesses too many unique weapons, RWBY is based around characters using one weapon, or two copies of the same weapon, that simply posesses tranformations or additional features to be everything the Hunter/Huntress needs.

Overall, the page lacks grammar and structure, and could use an overhaul with more detail on everything to better explain where exactly this character fits in the RWBY world, as well as correcting or removing many of the things that simply do not fit or make sense in the RWBYverse.

Due to all the above, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~