Talk:Yulon Xueshan/@comment-27603392-20140725015829

(Still the same issue with coding, just give me a call if you need it fix)

Appearance: Not much, the artwork do the job for me.

Personality: Well written, not much to pick.

Weapon: Do the fans has any mechanism system to withdraw the blade after it's being thrown ? Because to me, the string (and potentially the blade) can get in the way if Yulon throw in and then get approached in close range combat. Another thing that need to be address is throwing the fan as boomerang is that, if mishandle, the blade can injure herself, but I will assume that Yulon has enough practice with the fan to not let such situation happens (or at the very least, keeping it in the minimal)

Semblance: I think it needs to be toned down for a bit. Gliding is acceptable as long as it's short distance. Please take note that overuse of Semblance can be draining.

Ability: Her ability is a bit above average, but nothing too overpowering.

History: Nothing from her history is related too close to canon that potentially cross path with the current storyline, but I'd like to know a little more about the behavior of the White Fang and Grimm. Perhaps a short paragraph describe what kind of illegal activity that her family's business is doing would help.

Like with Sapphyre, I won't reject this charcter since she's in a gray area. Notify me once you've made changes to the page, and I'll take another look.