Talk:Kirin Mizuiro/@comment-24296957-20140519134425

Being only eleven and overpowering an entire group of bandits is very overpowered, let alone taking into account his older brother couldn't even fend them off. Also, 'His identity as an illegitimate son' is confusing. Is he adopted, or was actually born by him? Some clarifcation would be nice.

Also, if he was in Forever Fall fighting grimm and was overpowered by their numbers, why would Opzin want him? And it's also said Kirin was accepted into Beacon because of his skills in the forest. This is contradictory, and needs rewording or explaining.

It's best worded as 'vitality' rather than stamina. Also, saying he can recover from serious injury rather quickly is overpowered, seeing as aura can do that, but the injuries return as soon as the aura is dissapated from the target injury.

As a side note, and although not grounds for rejection, the font is hard to see in your FanCharBox. Perhaps darken it?

For the above reasons,

Rejected.

-RP Moderation Team-