Talk:Zilba Warwick/@comment-13593058-20180616235709

While not the worst character I've come across, I do have quite a few problems with it from the guidelines point of view.

First of all the Semblance is simply too powerful considering that it can control even frequency broadcasting devices. If that were the case, what is stopping this character from just touching one of the CCT Tower and completely wiping the system out? Complete by-pass of digital security systems and absolute data manipulation? From a touch of a finger? I'm surprised this character hasn't just randomly touched a computer in the middle of nowhere and suddenly gain control of the every Kingdom's airship fleet and completely obliterating the military.

Secondly, the Sentience Radiance Device is not plausable as we have never seen a weapon that can amplify or completely alter a Semblance nor are there weapons that or techniques that allow for altering or amplification of Semblances. (The case of Jaune Arc is treated differently as A: we still do not understand how that functions or is possible in the first place and B: The ability is mostly likely due to main character tropes and most likely exclusive to him only.) At most, a weapon set is designed to be used organically along with a character's Semblance, but never technologically amplify.

Those are the only two guidelines based issues that I am willing to reject your character on.

The other, personal, issue I have is with the writing and construction of the page. There is too much irrelevant content that is better off categorized as Fanfiction and contained in a separate page. Every section overexplains details of the character with unnecessary accuracy, the lack of flow from sentence to sentence only worsens the experience of reading it.

This is a Roleplaying site, and so a character page is more like a character profile in which readers are able to easily locate and understand information about a character. The page you now is an autobiography, written for textbooks.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~