Talk:Faye Dearg/@comment-10337166-20160711005826

She seems a little underweight but that's just a small problem nothing too serious. Her weapon uses steel dust? Persoanlly I'm  not prepareed to say it exists mostly because steeel is a producted of forging and we're yet to see dust as such a complex substance or being 'forged' in combat

Her ribbons are fragile and delicate, yet resist tearing and can bear heavy loads? Contradiction. Also how did she make her original connection between pleasure and pain? I mean if I walked into my family's dungeon and saw a bunch of people bleeding and in obvious pain, my first reaction wouldn't be "FUCK YEAH LOVE THIS SHIT THIS FEELS GOOD FOR THEM" but that's just me.

Finally her backstory, so a group of highly trained warrior monks and nobles who broke off from the kingdoms after the war, okay cool, where did they go, wy were they not pursued? I find it highly unlikely that such a highly trained nad dangerous group would be left to their own devices and be allowed to settle anywhere in one of the four kingdoms. If you're going to make a location/faction, make sure it's completed before you start plastering it on your characters, because when I clicked the hyperlink, all I got was an empty page, and no explanation.

Rejected

~RP Moderation Team~