Talk:Belle Carmela/@comment-1309458-20140831044121

Alright, let's get this party started.

Review - Part 1

Well, there's one thing I can definitely say about Belle's profile - it's very well written. As far as grammar is concerned, you've got that down pat. However, I would like to point out that there are occasional misspellings in Belle's profile. Things like "gloden" or "mode" (instead of made). Since your grammar is actually quite good, I have to assume that this is a symptom of typing too fast. I also noticed that there are some slight instances of awkward wording, but they're not too bad. I would suggest simply looking over the profile and proofreading it a little more. These mistakes are relatively minor, but mistakes are still mistakes, which means that they still need to be corrected one way or another. I know I may seem like I'm nitpicking, but that's only because I can't find anything else wrong with the grammar or the formatting.

Actually, I would tell you to combine "Pixie Dust," "Semblance," and "Combat" into one giant section labeled "Ablities" but maybe that's just my OCD getting to me. All in all, really dig it.

Review - Part 2

I like Belle a lot! As a character, she works incredibly well. Everything about her is well-formed and makes sense. There's nothing I can see that's particularly contradictory, so you've got that down. I like the influences of Tinkerbell that you gave her, especically Pixie Dust which I dig a lot. Her backstory is quite good, too. Realistic, even if I find that the whole tragedy thing is a little overdone (not like I'm not guilty of that myself, though). Still, it works as an effective character builder, which is never a bad thing. I like that she encountered a Beowolf but didn't manage to kill it, which is awesome as well as realistic. I also like the use of an anonymous Huntsman as the catalyst for her determination and dedication to the cause of Hunting. It's quite good. Actually, this is all really good. No complaints.

Now, I really like her weapon and abilities. It's simple, but effective. There are a lot of really overblown designs, which makes sense; this is RWBY after all. Overblown designs are kind of its thing. But it makes sense. It works. It's great. I also like that you account for potential weaknesses with her small size, and giving her strengths that make sense. Actually, it's pretty awesome how incredibly consistent this all is. I always say that consistency is the best thing a story or a character can be. And Belle is incredibly consistent.

All in all, it's great. I dig it.

Good job.