Talk:Carmelo Hellslot/@comment-13593058-20170323060610

 Carmelo Hellslot Review

Appearance
Description of appearance present.

Personality
Point of personaility made.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon rules followed.

Semblance is not okay as is falls under Aura Manipulation. Inaddition, considering how little we know about the nature of Aura in terms of people, living things, and object, a lot of those abilities may or may not work.

Backstory
Backstory is too long. Please do not write a literal story with dialogue. A 3 paragraph summary, max 5. I am not interested in reading this in this state.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Lengthy/Unreadable backstory

- Semblance contradiction

Review Summary
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