Talk:Siegfried Drachentöter/@comment-17711993-20150517235301

Hmm.

I'd like to point out that being fierce and being socially awkward are a bit contradictory to each other. If he is brave by nature, then it should be reasonable to assume that he's incredibly outgoing in social situations. Overall, his personality just seems incredibly confusing to try and figure out, when you actually think about it. His history doesn't really match his resulting personality as well.

His abilities are leaps and bounds over what most RWBY RP characters are capable of, but since you've announced that it isn't for RP purposes, I guess that doesn't really matter. However, it isn't the great power of a single character that makes a good story. Rather, if you're going to make a good story with character development, then I suggest making him have a lot of flaws, then changing him to become a better person, slowly but surely, as the story progresses along.

Not sure if I like to quantify stats, as I've made all of my OCs without it. Most of them, if not all, have been accepted without this particular feature. However, if you want to actually do this, then I suggest making him average in all stats, as he is a jack of all trades. 9 is near perfect in most people's perceptions of the chart.

Auric manipulation is something that is frowned upon purely because it hasn't been shown yet in RWBY if we can actually do that.

Of course, this is all just criticism on my part. Take this with a grain of salt, if you must.