Talk:Avery Rachel Chere/@comment-27603392-20130811061640

This character has quite a few issues that require alteration and addressing to have Avery fits into RWBY. Firstly, you make Avery a Duster, something that as far as we know, does not exist in RWBY. On top of that, you immediately assume they'll be slaughtered for being dusters despite the fact that that type of character would likely be commended for their ability IF they existed. Moving onto personality, she feels far too... all encompassing. As if she envelops all moods depending on what you want to write at the time. Take a look at your character and try to avoid such cliches as being loved by everyone but not having friends, or having family that places your character high above everyone else. Additionally, as we've said before, wings are not allowed for characters.

Addictionally, her design is entire based off Riona, which can be considered plagiarism. A few minors changes shall do, to reduce the similarities to Rinoa.

When you've finished editing your character, please put her back into the Pending Character category and we will take another look. Thank you.

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