Talk:Rowena Burrows/@comment-25924729-20191109032230

A pretty cool character, no pun intended :v

Appearance, personality and backstory seem alright. It all ties together really well, and I can definitely see how those elements influence each other and make sense.

Weapon and abilities seem okay. Some issue with the semblance though, it's mostly fine except for the part about freezing an opponent internally after being stabbed. This is fair game for Grimm, but for human opponents aura should not make this possible. Even if it were, an instant kill ability like this is a little too powerful. You should nerf or remove this ability, or limit it to working only on Grimm.

Another problem in the relationships section. While the rules do allow Beacon students to interact with Ozpin, it is only to a minor degree. Having him counsel her extensively and personally like that is also too much, and the advice given sounds a little out of character for Oz. It also should be removed or kept at a more vague, less personal level. The other relationships are good, I like the amount of detail put into there.

Lastly, in the trivia section, while Fannar may be a valid name that relates to a colour, the rule is that this reference must be in the first name, not the maiden name or family name. Some quick googling shows Rowena means white lance or white haired, so it is still a valid name. You just need to explain it's relation to a colour in the trivia section.

No other issues found. Just parts of the semblance, relationships and trivia that need fixing. Good try though.

Rejected.

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