Talk:Danner Jackson/@comment-4681758-20150308033403

Ok... I'm not going to comment on what is or isn't wrong with your character, because that's not my place, it's the reviewers. I am however, going to give you some pointers on cleaning up the page, because it's a mess, and it makes the life of everyone easier when it's neat and organized. It's easier for the people reading it to find what they're looking for, it's easier for you to edit things, and it just makes it look more presentable overall.

First off, and this is the big one, rename the page to the name of the character. Aside from just being common sense, your characters won't stick out if people don't even initally see their names. To rename the page, click the drop-arrow next to the edit button at the top of the page.

Secondly, the format of the page is just a mess. Things are spaced seemingly at random, there doesn't seem to be any logical order to each of the different parts of the profile, and it just looks like a long, unbroken wall of text. If you want a better idea of how to format the page, just take a look at some other characters on the site. Like this one, for example. Unfortunatley, I can't really hold your hand on this, so if you're having trouble, just do a Google search for "Formatting Wiki pages".

Finally... Your spelling and grammar. Now admittedly, this is not a requirement for having your characters accepted, so whether or not you want to fix this is up to you, but if you want to be a better writer, I'd HIGHLY recommend you take a look at it.