Talk:Eagle Umbra/@comment-27603392-20130812003715

Perhaps you are either new or have yet to read the other fan made character (or both), but your character is breaking pretty much every single rules belongs in the RWBY universe. That is included:

- Canon-Fanon interacting, a huge no ESPECIALLY if your character belongs in the canon RWBY world, not the AU one as a slightest contact will break the canon storyline.

- Complete overpowered. "A combination of martial arts, swordsmanship, magic, and other athletic abilities" is somewhat close to impossible, given that Monty himself stated that magic DOES NOT exist in the RWBY world, and the fact that he's only 17 makes it harder to believe that he could actually master anything at the said age, let alone multi abilities at the same time.

Overall, this character has left a sour taste in my mouth and I would suggest you to make changes (a lot of changes) to make him fits in the RWBY world. Until then, please take a good look at the other fan made character here, to see if there are anything you can learn from the other writers.

~ThanhnuFia~