User blog comment:Elektro7/Doing Reviews and RPs/@comment-28257386-20140528202848

Forgive if i may have mis-read this post, but could you do a review of my story: A Pawn's Tale

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/A_Pawn%27s_tale.

Its my first time writing a proper, and extensive, story. Its also my first time writing combat. As a consequence of my newbieness the quality may be a little spotty but I'm confident I did a decent job. The story is your basic RWBY premise. Four people are all attending Beacon academy in their first year and they eventually become a team. I've created character pages for 3 of the 4 main characters, which were all reviewed and accepted.

I would like to ask that you pay special attention to main protagonist Zahn Fa. I paid special attention writing him but after rereading I fear that I may have written him as somewhat of a mary sue. I'm not completely sure, perhaps I'm just paranoid. Thank you for your time.