Talk:Zilba Warwick/@comment-25924729-20181118125440

Right... It took me 3 days to process this OC, reading up, researching facts and making a decision. He's very interesting, but also has a lot of issues.

His appearance, personality and fighting style are fine. Nothing to comment on there.

Onto his backstory. Gaining a split personality from falling into a reactor and getting electrocuted sounded a little far fetched at first, but there are real life cases of people developing personality shifts or strange quirks after getting hit by lightning. Nothing as serious as gaining a full blown villain persona, but plausible enough to let it pass.

Another issue is the fact he regularly raids Atlesian military bases for droids. That would make him a very serious threat that can't realistically exist without encroaching into the show's canon and warranting Atlas responding to it. One man, no matter how powerful or how many droids he controls cannot go against the world's largest army that way. I suggest reducing the scale of his raids to remain unnoticed enough that he doesn't affect canon that much or doesn't draw Atlas' attention, or find another way for him to collect droids.

Trying to recreate a Penny level droid is fine, but please note the fanon rules don't allow other aura infused robots or robots with Penny's level of intelligence to exist yet. He can try, but if he ever succeeds in making a Penny 2.0 he will get rejected.

Next his semblance. Sentience transferring is only seen in Ozpin in canon RWBY, and only happens because of literal god magic. Other characters seem to show surprise seeing this initially, implying that it should not be possible as a semblance, so I'll have to reject this. From what I read about how it's used though, the same effect may be achieved through simply hacking the droids to make them his minions, which is acceptable. You can keep the effect of the semblance, just change the method it's done.

Having unlimited range and controlling an unlimited number of droids also breaks the no limits fallacy rule. You must specify an effective range his semblance has effect over, and the maximum number of droids he can control.

For his weapons. The energy shield has no apparent weakness or way to breach it, according to the description. Even being vulnerable to electricity isn't a valid weakness when his secondary weapon can simply draw and redirect it away. You must add at least some way to defeat it to be fair, nothing is invincible. Last problem is his bionic arm. I like this weapon, sounds like it could make for some creative and flashy uses in battle. The only problem is the 1 ton grip force is way too much, even with cybernetics. You should reduce that.

Overall, I really like this character. He's like part Ultron, part Joker levels of terrifying, intelligent and dangerous villain, and I'd love to see him in an RP. His personality is also complex, and I can  appreciate the thought and hard work going into the many aspects of this character. He's a fantastic OC, but unfortunately not acceptable by our rules in his present state.

Rejected.

If you have any questions, please DM me on Wikia or Discord.

~RP Moderation team~