Talk:Désirée de Sade/@comment-25924729-20190624025355

Aww, that last part~ I assume you mean the whole Fun and Games thing. Glad to hear my RP had an effect on someone :D

Appearance is good, sounds like a pretty striking design. Personality and backstory are... eh?

Not really a fan of the portrayal of "S and M enthusiasts like hurting people/being hurt cause they're crazy"... Psychologically that incorrect, and personally I find it kinda rude. But thats more a problem with depiction of S and M in media generally, not this OC herself. Just a personal nitpick, not really something you're doing wrong or rejectable, I'll have to try and be objective about this. Though it is a misinformed stereotype, the other parts of the personality are good. I like the idea to explore guilt, escapism and violence as a way to deal with childhood trauma.

There are other issues in the backstory though. Some things make no sense or are hard to believe, like how she's clinically insane, suicidal, reckless and self harming but still allowed to have her own team on missions. Kind of a small stretch in believability. She also knows a lot of martial arts in her abilities sections, despite having not a lot of training in them. Killing kids isn't really formal training, I mean. It's possible she was trained by the gladiator ring or Xerxes, buy that should be mentioned in the backstory to be clear.

Weapons, abilities and semblance are good. Pretty powerful, but with defined limits, situational uses and balancing factors that keep it reasonable. The weapons sound badass honestly. Could make a very flashy fight scene in RP or animated, perfectly fitting in RWBY.

CNR checks out. No other issues found. Do-S is hot~ :)

Yeah, mostly just parts of the backstory should be revised.

Rejected.

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