Talk:Mira Ciar/@comment-13593058-20160223235839

 A Review of  Mira Ciar

Appearance
Physical Faunus trait confirmed, no further complications.

Personality
Point of personality made, nothing major to note.

Weapons and Abilities
Rule of one multiple purpose twin weapon followed.

Backstory
Nothing worthy to note. No contradictions.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced and source checks out. Under Grandfather Clause.

Verdict: Accepted
On the grounds of:

- Nothing, move along.

Review Summary
This one wasn't as bad with the repetitiveness but I still get the hint that the profile was written by a twelve year-old. I think being more firm with your statements might fix this. Rather than  saying, " Those things being said...you don't want to make her mad. If you do make her mad...just be aware that she can be very fiesty when she's pissed off." Try "Her temper is not to be trifled with and definetly not an something one would like to experience."

 It's short, sweet and professional. It doesn't go around and pamper a reader, it states what it is and moves on. It makes the statement more powerful.

 The Semblance does have a resemblance to Ruby's but since even Sel pointed that out and the application is different enough as it is, it stays.

 Other than that everything else checks out.

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