Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20150113152446/@comment-25291880-20150116001536

Chloe Chroma

First and foremost, she has no History sectio and it doesn't say what her Faunus trait is. Second, Multi-colored hair and eyes that change colors? We may have seen the eye part with Neo, but it's still unsure if this is because of her semblance. And the hair? We haven't seen any character with a trait like this, so it's probably not acceptable in terms of fanon rules. The only part I find in need of being rewritten for her weapons section is the part about infusing dust into her coat. Dust can be infused into clothing, as shown with Cinder and her outfit, but I doubt just cracking open some dust and letting it fall onto her clothes will enable her to use dust-based attacks, as the dust could just drizzle off when she waves her arms or moves in general. Her semblance has to do with time-travel, and like her appearance, we have not seen in the show, so it's not allowed, not to mention it's a little confusing to read. Lastly, her name. It doesn't state if it relates to a color, but I looked it up myself and found that it relates to the Greek goddess Demeter. Might want to put that in.

Because of the reasons above, rejected.

Denver Verde

His backstory is good, considering the fact this is the first one I've read in a while that isn't sad nor horrific. His personality is also acceptable as well, with just enough info to give me a general idea of how he acts. However, his abilities and powers section is lacking greatly, and require facts like how big his glyphs are, how far they can reach, and how long he can activate his semblance, which, if you expand on it, might want to make sure it doesn't mirror Weiss's too much. Adding strengthsand weaknesses would also be another thing I suggest considering. For his weapon, where does he keep the dust needed to resupply the weapon? And how long does it take for him to refill?

In conclusion, he's a good OC. Plus, the meaning behind his name is stated. But his semblance and other sections need to be elaborated on more before he can be accepted. Thus, rejected.