Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20141130191712/@comment-24573568-20141201203811

On Amet Revfold First off, this seems to be a well written character. However, I do note some issues. History and Personality

i'd prefer you'd elaborate on why he is so pro faunus. You imply it runs in the family but make no mention of it, and it seems to contradict with the White Fang's actions. Also, mention of why his parents were dust shop owners and not warriors would help.

Possible Fixes

Add a reason for his pro-ness. Maybe he was raised as such and he agrees with these beliefs due to faunus friends (maybe a store employee was a faunus and a very good friend?).

He parents could be black sheep of the family. Maybe the family has a history of discrimination, hence why they were targeted. It would also make sense if they were pacifists: explains why they didn't follow the militaristic trend of the clan, and explains why they didn't train Amet or even get him a tutor.

I do have a question about his attire being how it is. It seems a bit too fancy for his history, though I could see it being a result of saving up and/or many hours of sewing.

Personality

Looks good to me, but i'd love to see a bit more detail.

Powers And Abilities

I'd love a name for the semblance. I think the weapon is good too (seems to be similar to Oobleck's).

Stuff on the clan

Oh, this explains it a bit! I assume the unclear reasons are a PLOT HOOK!, right?

ACCEPTED, THOUGH I WOULD PREFER THESE NOTES REFERENCED TO ADD DETAILS