Talk:Echion Tyrian/@comment-24087318-20140101091150

Having a character with an above average and High IQ and intellect, as well as posessing amazing strength is rather encroaching on Overpowered boundaries. Being the best at everything there is in his classes, but purposely hiding it to remain "cool" is a very bad Mary-Sue trait offender.

In addition, his personality goes against his intellect and contradicts in an area. He's slow to anger, but once pushed lashes out in a complete rage. It's possible, but doesn't fit this characters relaxed demeanor.

His backstory seems rather grim for RWBY standards, even for the fanon. Involving child slavery, which is probably not something that occurs so openly to that extent. Civilization in RWBY is mainly delegated to four tight Kingdoms, which are build as large, developed cities.

The characters Semblance is too non-canonical. Semblances we've seen in canon are abilities that are used in tandem with a characters weapons, skills and dust usage to create one entire fighting style. They are not separate and independant abilities that act entirely on their own.

Due to the above, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~