Talk:Nickolas Steele/@comment-31408668-20190219125044

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Nickolas, in context, does make you think of nickel, as well as the beginning of the name being exceedingly close to the actual word.

APPEARANCE

Nothing to detract from here. The description is short, but concise and puts an effective image in your head. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

Nickolas' personality is two-toned in a good way, with his distinct split from his public and private personality. His public personality is the one with rogueish charm, which leans into some interesting RP options, while his private, slightly more reserved and caring side is there as a contrasting undercurrent. The note about him being altruistic is also nice. If I were to try and compare his personality, I'd say maybe a Robin Hood-esque character.

It's also nice that you note how the situation with Angela had a distinct impact on him. I would be interested to see if the Battle of Beacon changed him at all as well. No major contradictions. No problems here.

BACKSTORY

Nickolas' backstory seems to make sense to me. He entered Beacon after, I assume, 5 years of practice under the eye of a retired Huntsman. Otherwise, it is short and to the point, covering what needs to be covered. Placement in Vytal Festival is noted. Reference to Battle of Beacon is present. No problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Weapons are within guideline specifications. We have a transforming primary in form of Retribution, as well as a secondary weapon in the form of Judgement II. Very concise and informative in the description of Retribution, with the notes on it's firing capability, the same with Judgement II. No problems here.

As for combatative ability using his weapons, it isn't noted, but I assume they are not crazy. It is good to know he is a practicioner of multiple martial arts, which inclines me to believe that a lot of his martial comes in there. I would maybe recommend adding a few notes about his training with his weapons, but it isn't necessary. I agree with the Speech skill comparison and the tailor trade. No major problems here.

SEMBLANCE

Nudge, as a Semblance, after some reflection, works. My first instinct here was that it was too powerful in comparison to the deficit of Aura, but after doing basic math, as well as doing some rewatching of what kind of hits people took in RWBY, I agree more with it. It has a few limiters; the fatigue limiter, a weight limiter and a gravity limiter. It is well described in it's function. I feel like I would need to really see it to get a proper picture though. No major problems here.

CONCLUSION: ACCEPTED

'''Nickolas works as the rogueish charm of team ANGL, something I can appreciate in a character. However, I would be very careful in how you describe the use of his Semblance. Don't go crazy with the effect. Because even at a thousand percent increase to speed, the effects are limited. Otherwise, all around good job.'''