Talk:Akane Sasha Ackerman/@comment-24490414-20141120012923

What you have so far is fine except for one thing I noticed: The time when the Nevermore attacked.

It says that Akane and her team were first years on a mission during the first semester. Problem is, we never saw RWBY or other canon first years on missions during their first semester  nor there was any implication that first years did anything other than train and study. (Which makes sense since they're barely beginning their secondary schooling and thus largely inexperienced.)  And even when they DID get their missions during second semester, it was with a shadowing Huntsman. The fact that Akane's team were already receiving an unsupervised mission in their first year seems highly unlikely due to what we've seen in canon.

You can change it so that the mission happened during their second year, however, as it can be assumed from Team CFVY that second years and above can start getting missions throughout the school year. Of course it means having to age Akane one year, but I don't see any critical info that would have to change due to a slight bump or two in the timeline of her backstory.

Also something I noticed is her former team name being ARCH. Keep in mind that team names also have to comply with the color rule, even a now defunct team.

Keep at it! Of course the Admin reviewers have the final say but there's my two cents. ^_^