Talk:Electra Forester/@comment-25924729-20181125122958

Really interesting character, reminds me a lot of Tracer from Overwatch in a lot of aspects.

Her appearance, personlaity and backstory are alright, make sense and no real problems. I personally like the backstory a lot, she's an interesting but simple type of character, very refreshing to see in stories, likable and relatable, has great potential to develop in RP.

Minor mistake i noticed in the profile template. She's listed as 100cm and 90kg, a very disproportionate body and contradicts her appearance section saying she's slim and finesse. I assume its an error, and not really rejectable, but you might wanna fix it.

Her combat and general abilities seem alright. Weapon and semblance need more expanations however, like how does the weapon fire the bolts? Does it transform into a ranged form, or has a built in system to fire them from the blade form or something else? Its also better to list doen the types of Dust and chemical bolts she uses, and their effect.

Im also having trouble understanding parts of her semblance. After using it, she's "grounded" for a period of time, but what exactly does being grounded mean? The page doesnt explain what happens to her. Its very vague, and could be interpreted as anything from being electrically grounded and unable to use her semblance or any electrical attacks, or being literally grounded and stuck in place unable to move. You have to clarify what being grounded means.

Rejected.

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~RP Moderation Team~