Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20150113152446/@comment-24416658-20150114015247

(Alright. All over again. Here we go)

Breyal Yoland

First off, the name checks out. Trivia says it refers to a gemstone, and a quick google search confirms it. We're good on that.

Backstory, to me, seems a bit short, but still has enough information for a proper backstory. The part talking about the reason for her comical state is interesting, but I would suggest, later on, fleshing it out a bit more.

Weapon is one of the more interesting ones I have seen as well. I've never thought of boxing gloves being deadly, but in this case, it's pretty cool. The spring-loaded glove can also be a ranged of sorts, making this weapon versatile.

Now, the semblance. This part seemed a bit iffy, but after a closer examination of the rules, I can conclude that it works, especially due to the flawless execution of avoiding the No-Limits Fallacy. This semblance doesn't fall under any of the unacceptable ones, it has a limit, and it has application for the OC.

Biggest problem? Lack of faunus trait and lack of real reason for this character to be a faunus. Don't get me wrong, this character is really good. However, it seems like it could have done better with her not being a faunus. With a few tweaks it could work, but that is the only reason for this OC not passing.

Rejected, but only for the last note.