Talk:Jade Pegas/@comment-24678303-20150307214106

Reading through, it all seems good, except for the history. While it seems to be pretty well thought out and detailed, the way it is presented here seems a bit unattractive. While I do like the inclusion of RWBY history, we're not actually sure howling the events of Moutain Glenn happened, but popular estimates put it at 15-50 years ago, so your character couldn't possibly have been there. Other than that, it looks fine.

As for the Semblance, I'd say to limit it to only effecting herself.

Other than those, everything looks good.

Rejected for now.

~RP Moderation Team~