Thread:Takeshi kun21/@comment-25363089-20160830215318/@comment-8182065-20160916070859

The best way to hide is usually in plain sight. ^_^

Sounds like a pretty good plot overall so far now. You have a lot of big ideas that might work well as an actual short stoy haha. At this point I'd just say it has to be condensed a bit to the bare bones.