Talk:Mikado Troika/@comment-13593058-20170504180857

Issues not addressed.

Fan-made Kingdom

While the mention of a fan-made kingdom was removed, the mere use of him being separate from Remnant is grammtically wrong. Remnant in and of itself is the planet/world and thus the character and his organization.family must exist within this world, namely one of the 4 continents of Sanus, Solitas, Anima, or Menagerie.

This is not limited to tiny islands located outside of these continents but must be within a determinable distance and location must be stated relative to these lands or kingdoms.

Armour

Duration of power is still unclearl just stating that it has finite run time is not enough.

Semblance

Semblance still lacks definite range and upkeep. Please mention to what extent the Semblance lasts rather than "a short time".

Weapon

Ammo count is still technically infinte, state how many shot/barrages can be performed at a time.

 Rejected 

~RP Moderation Team~