User blog comment:StarlightAT/Original Story Synopsis/@comment-13488655-20150219224729

o.o The plot seems good but it doesn't seem very descriptive. I'm at a bit of a loss to the setting. All i can tell so far is that there's a school and demons.

You need a propper introduction to the story, not something that just smacks a summed up version into the readers face. Like maybe showing the story from one of the main characters viewpoint. Showing only what they know, see and feel als the storry goes on. You need to show character pressence, the atmosphere, and a lot of detail on the surrounding area. One way you can do it is by writing it down like your talking to a friend. Like explaining to them the scenes from one of your favorite anime episodes that they've never seen before.

Hope this helps :)