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Before I get into my review, I want to establish a few things first:

1. There is no such thing as an unbiased review.

I find this to be true. One can make many arguments for why a show/person is bad or good. Like, "Asuna from SAO was incredibly weak because she just turns out to be a damsel in distress in the second arc." Or, "Asuna is a really strong character because she had a really badass intro that she just hides because of her love with Kirito. Plus, she faced tougher bosses as the story went on." Just to set a few examples.

If a review were to be truly unbiased, it would go something like this. Quoting a bit from Gigguk:

"SAO was a story with characters in it. It had music, but it also had animation. If there is one thing that can be said about SAO, it is that it's an anime."

Even this is not a perfect example, for one can argue that SAO is not an anime, but a cartoon.

And my next point:

2. There are always two sides to any story.

Everyone has heard this before. It's a famous line from Aesop's fables, and, IMO, one of the best to take away. The fable depicts a human and a lion, arguing about what happened in a competition they had. It's a bit ridiculous, but it has real life applications.

One might ask, "Like what?"

Taking another much-loved/much-hated show, Attack on Titan, there are those who say that Attack on Titan was enormously entertaining, while others claim that it was shit. However, clashes between these two groups will most likely end up with both saying that it depends on personal preference, or not end at all.

Now, what does this have to do with my review?

Well, rather than having an unbiased review, or having a good or bad bias, I'll be taking both of these perspectives, good and bad, and turn it into a dual-biased review. That way, I can point out the things that I liked and were innovative  and  point out things that still need improvement.

That being said, I'll be reviewing Tianee Musk. Forgive me if I seem a bit picky.

Appearance:

I can really see that Tianee is prepared for a tundra habitat. This section being incredibly detailed, down to certain stitches and scars, I don't really have a fault here. Both the OC and her clothing are described. However, if need be, I could also suggest describing alternate wear, if the user has the effort to do that, such as sleepwear and formal occasions.

Personality:

Again, really detailed here.

Just something I noticed, though. There is more than one kind of relationship. For example, there's the parent-children relationship, the boss-employee relationship, and most importantly, the friend-to-friend relationship. The section doesn't explain which relationship Tianee can be shy in. Strangers? Teachers? I especially can't really get why Tianee would be distrusting of men exclusively. If she was friends with Neil, then wouldn't she be distrusting of anyone human, since she was born and raised in a harsh environment? Don't forget that her parents wanted to cook Neil at first as well.

Another inconsistency that I found was her moral code. What exactly comprises her moral code? If she, again, was raised in a cold, harsh environment, then wouldn't she have logic as well? Did she have any moral code when she was killing animals? True, she might have a flawed moral code, but I'm pretty sure the moral codes at Beacon are at least slightly different than that of Neviah.

Overall, I would like a bit of explanation on the two points that I raised. It doesn't really affect my judgement; I'm just curious as to what they are.

I did like how Tianee's personality is detailed in nearly every situation, though. Most OCs on this Fanon don't have much to go on with their personality, and some turn into cliche characters because of this.

History:

This is actually my favorite part of any character.

Why?

Because history defines what and who that OC is going to be. It is the basis of personality, appearance, weapons, abilities and combat style. The only things that might not be affected by history is semblance, which is a minor detail in my eyes.

With that out of the way, I like the animal friend relationship with Neil, for it's unique to have a relationship with an animal that you can't directly communicate with. As far as I've seen, there are no other OCs with that kind of friendship.

Other than that, though, as a story, for histories can sometimes be that, it doesn't really show any change in character. It does explain her appearance and her weapon pretty well, for that is what most backgrounds do: Explain.

Weapons and Abilities:

Might need to be logical here, as the only way to find any inconsistencies or flaws in the weapon is to do a full-on analysis.

/Shingeki cracks his knuckles/

It's the world of RWBY, so I'm gonna cut physics some slack. After all, most animated shows are, obviously, not our world.

With Ocean Thorn, it's a solidly designed weapon that I can imagine. But there's a few things that I think needs a bit of explanation: How does the launching of the claw work? And what powers the mechanics of the DMCT? Is it pneumatics? Hydraulics?

Again, the issue here is elaboration. It again doesn't affect my judgement that much; I'm again just curious.

I also feel that the semblance can be more powerful. A rush semblance can be useful for more than one thing, such as dodging and approaching an opponent that uses a long-range weapon. I would also want some limitations with the semblance.

Wait.

In fact, I actually would want some limitations with Tianee's semblance. Anyone, from Flora's description, can 'rush' with enough strength. They'll just run out of stamina quickly. And I can assume that Tianee's ability is an enhanced version of that. But does it use UP Aura to do it? Or is the level of Aura proportional to the strength of the semblance?

If we just completely screw the connection with Aura, then Tianee definitely needs some limitations with the semblance. Think about it. If she just spams her semblance, then we'll have a speed demon on our hands, and we don't know the acceleration that the semblance provides, even if it is very small. She'll dodge easily, she'll get in close range, and she'll get the kill with Ocean Thorn. All at high speed.

That, I think, needs elaboration. MAJOR elaboration.

And the verdict?

Nearly every part of Tianee's character is incredibly detailed. Appearance, Personality (with only a little elaboration), and History checks out. Even the weapon checks out.

The only thing I'm honestly frustrated with is the Semblance, which is easily the least detailed of the article. I don't know the limitations, and if that's the case, then neither can a lot of people in this Fanon. Due to this,

Rejected.

-Ray.