Thread:Amet Revfold/@comment-28257386-20140519211447

Ok, so with all due respect, there were several parts to your review that I had problems with. I shall attempt to explain and present my arguement.

Let's start on the backstory. Yin would've had to attend Signal in order to go to Beacon, or she would've had to steal applications and forge stats/signatures to be accepted. That needs to be changed accordingly, along with anything tying into that.

Ok, so the problem here is that Yin HAD attended a school, not signal specifically, just a school of signal education level. I used the term "advanced level school" as something of a catch all term because most people agree that Beacon is an equiv to college, so Signal is equiv to highschool AKA an advanced level school. Also, she isn't from Vale City, shes from a different region of Vale. She attended the local combat school in her home city, completed her pre-huntress training, took a year break, and is now moving to Vale City where she will attend Beacon while being a year older than most first years.

Shockwaves...eh. She'd have to put A. Lot. of aura into it. And energy beams made of aura...that's not something aura can do.

With this, I am fine with removing, but personally I want it but I can deal. I would however like to point out that both Ren and Sun could create shockwaves with Aura presumbably. Sun only used it once, but he didn't seem fazed by the loss of energy. Plus, I took Pyrrah's explanation that weapons acted as conduits for a person's Aura to its logical extreme and allowed Yin the ability to concentrate that Aura into a Sword Beam.

As for her fighting style, it seems...contradictory. She'll do anything to protect her tem mates, yet she'll rush headlong into battle? Also, it's said she tires easily, but has large stores of energy and knows how to use them efficiently. That's contradictory, as well.

As for energy, alright I should probably re-write that. But as for her fighting style, I did not claim that Yin rushed into battle, thats reserved for my 4th member. Yin fights through brute force rather than any large amount of skill. Like I said in personality, she has a mother bear mentality. Mother bears do all they can to protect their young and it is specifically through brute force. She thinks deeply on how to handle opponents and keep her team safe, its just that her style of fighting isnt very refined. She just relies on raw power.

I also don't see how her name alludes to a color.

This one is fairly obvious. I put it in the trivia. Yin is part of the Taoism concept of Yin and Yang. Yin is the black half with the white spot, and is associated with water, earth, the moon, nighttime, and femininity. Thats like about 5-7 different colors.

And her semblance, while there's not a whole lot wrong with it...it could use a longer cooldown.

This one I can change. I'm totally ok with increasing the cool down. 