Talk:Jade Black/@comment-27743663-20161214222617

CNR, while noted in Charbox, I'd recommend noting somewhere else on the page as well. Not everyone looks at the Charbox, if ever. Most people put it under a trivia section at the bottom of the page, the CNR that is.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is fine.

Backstory, is incomplete. It needs to be noted which Academy he's at, given he's on a team. Without it, it's a random pick and choose of the 4. He also needs to have some prior proper training to get into one of those Academies in the first place, most people using Signal. Besides that, I have trouble believing a barely 6-year old boy would survive an encounter with a pack of Beowulves, much less the Alpha.

Weapon, being noticably made mostly of Silver, and having engravings on it that weaken it, it being able to take the strain and pressure necessary to effectively work as a bow of 6.5 is largely unlikely. It isn't that tough a material in the first place. Granted, I'm not an expert on those things, so if you have something to prove otherwise go for it.

Semblance, while interesting, does need to have more demerits. What's the max range he can use it on? What's the cost to use it? Does it have a cooldown for each use? As it stands now, he could pretty much make any shoot he makes a 90 degree turn and nail perfectly, and is largely immune to projectile weaponry and practically untouchable in close combat.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Incomplete Backstory, Grimm encounter (pun intended)

- Weapon working

- Lack of Semblance demerits

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