Talk:Obsidian Lector/@comment-24012109-20140724154135

Alright. There is a ton of redundancies that need to be addressed.

First of all, Telekinesis is not allowed as a semblance, not just because of what it could do, but because we have no evidence of an offensive. Like, picture Pyrrha just gingerly moving Jaune's shield so he could graze a blow from an Ursa with her light magnetic pull. It could only pull metallic objects slightly, so it is more defensive in design. Yet, one could also use it for the same way you want to reveal your weapon's different lengths. Not telling you to use a magnetic semblance, but it is an example.

Secondly, it is understandable you want to make him strong, but with how you made him, things do not flow for what he is. He's a weapon master, a true die-hard of the blade.....yet he has a 9mm pistol. Why? Also, you made him quite smart enough to use telekinesis along with the blade and the gun. I call this a redundancy because you make him sound to be the best in every category- Strength and Wisdom of the Blade; Dexterity of using a gun, and. The only thing I could really pick up is his speed and his ego for being so good, but if he is smart enough, speed becomes rarely an issue.

In the end, He just seems way too good for very little tolls. Even the best in hunters have more than one flaw. I recommend dialing back his skills, or reworking him to where he only focuses on his swordsmanship. Change the semblance as well, as I have said, Telekinesis is simply not allowed.

Rejected on thus grounds.

--RP Moderation