Thread:Takeshi kun21/@comment-13488655-20140113114648/@comment-8182065-20140113120622

He's good, but a bit bland. I'd go with Selena's suggestion on adding something that shows what made him leader. By the way you put Yoki a lot on the page. :P

Hmmm... maybe add something in his backstory and personality about a time where he felt like he couldn't be trusted at all for some period of time.

Here's my idea: go for a "The Boy Who Cried Wolf" thing and say, he used to lie and make a ton of excuses. He then proved that he is trustworthy by saving his sister from some accident (it's going to have to be a fairly known event for word to get around, especially in the halls of the Academy), but only to her and a few others; everyone else just didn't take him seriously.

That event could have earned him a spot in Beacon, because the Hunter on the scene believed his story; however students only paied attention his bad reputation rather than his good deed when he got there, and all talked about they hoped they didn't get partnered up with him. There'd be a moment of course during initiation where he'd prove his trustworthy-ness by leading his partner and our other 2 members of team LOYD safely out of the Emerald Forest.

I think that would make him stand out a bit more.