User blog comment:Xanneer/Here we go again./@comment-24911350-20140615200224/@comment-24911350-20140617045648

Nothing in itsef, but mixing tenses and written perspectives without at least clear, definite breaks (Such as the beginning of a new chapter) just doesn't work well, it never does. Having the characters introduce themselves as you said is much better, as long as you don't just outright say, "This is Bob".

I'd also recommend trying switching to past tense in the future. Don't worry about this at all for this story, because it's a pretty fundamental change and would take a very long time to do, and present tense is working alright for now, but for future stories I'd give it a try. I tried a couple uncommon tenses and perspectives at first, but after a while it became pretty obvious why 3rd-person past-tense is most widely used, it's not something I could explain any better than that.