Talk:Darian Rouge/@comment-13593058-20170517195130

First issue I want to address is the length and structure of the backstory. It is too long and too detailed and therefore I refuse to read it. A backstory is short and to the point, I do not need to know the specific actions taken that led to his kidnapping, just SAY he was kidnapped. I don't care that he stabbed a boy 25 times with a knife thrown in by a spectator, jsut say he killed the boy.

You leave these things in fan-fiction, not here. Here you get to the point.

Semblance issue addressed.

Rage mode still present. While not rejectable, it is absolutely another step in the wrong direction.

While I cannot comment on the rest of the issues u/Nice Things has against the OC, I can say by far this is only several traits away from a Gary Stu character,

Simply put, he has no individuality and is simply another mindless killing machine OC.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~