Talk:Kuro Nagendra/@comment-30530552-20170527235008

Let's have a look at this.

CNR doesn't work, since you need to reference a color in the first name or a combo of the first and last names. Unfortunately, from my research, Kuro means "ninth son," which has no obvious connections to a color. Unless you can link something here, that's one strike.

Appearance is fine, save for the Faunus traits. While the snake tail is fine, having advanced senses and venom in addition doesn't work, as was pointed out on your other character, Daimon. Pick just one of the 3 please.

Personality is okay.

You have next to zero backstory, so that classifies this as incomplete.

The fighting style and weapons are okay, save for his seemingly unmatchable strength (shown through "his physical strength is outstandign, even surpassing that of his teachers and classmates"). Considering this is implied to be against persons from Shade Academy, a high level school on the same level as Beacon, that's overstating his abilities. Sorry.

Since you didn't describe the Semblance HERE that's one problem...the other is the fact that it was pointed out to be problematic on the other page, so until that gets fixed you're out of luck.

All in all, you need to do a bit of overhauling to get this to work. :/

-Rejected on lack of CNR reference, multiple Faunus traits, missing backstory, unreasonable amount of strength, and Semblance issues that were outlined on the other page.

~RP Moderation Team~

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