Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20140704110526/@comment-24828824-20140828185342

Review by SideShot, character written by Flora:

Tianee Musk

A character with a natural feel to the writing style and a good structure. Although it has the occasional mistake it is not enough to distract the reader. The information provided is within canon plausibility and fits the universe so no problems in that regard either.

Of particular note is that the appearance is very descriptive and very clear on the outfit and the appearance of Tianee, this combined with the abundance of artwork leaves little doubt in how to picture this character, well done!

The only problems standing out to me are centred around the weapon The Ocean Thorn: Firstly the mention of using aura to make the piercing attack more painful. I do not see how this is acomplished and would like clarification.

Secondly, and more importantly, I miss some clarification in the personality or background that would explain why Tianee would use such a vicious weapon. The personality and background of hunting for food would indicate a more respectful sense of combat rather than a cruel one the weapon seems to indicate. Further explination would be apreciated in this regard.

If you can explain the two issues with the weapon she is golden, but for now I will have to reject her.