Talk:Eli Leictreach/@comment-16141060-20130821175336

G'day Paradise Paradox! Thanks heaps for the review you gave, time to return the favour.

First is his art, not yours. Taking art that isn't yours and slapping a name on it is one of my pet peeves. It would be as if I copied Emile's bio onto my page and called him Aaron Thunder. Use Free source, tektek.org or Chibi Flash, that way it really is your character and your creativity.

My biggest critisisms is actually the same as the others on this page although you haven't reacted well to it. Taking inspiration from other sources is okay, taking all of it isn't. I'm a Halo fan too, loved Reach but I see so little of your hand print in this.

Starting with his name- Emile and Jun. Yes, you love Halo but it's so unoriginal. I'm sad that you couldn't even choose an alternative name for him... and the Lightning part lacks subtlety. http://www.20000-names.com/weather_names.htm There you go, three seconds in search engine 'names meaning lightning'. Personally, Baraq sounds awesome.

You need to distance yourself further from the Halo universe for me to consider Emile 'Original.'

Okay, a wise lecturer once told me with a twinkle in his eye, 'To steal from one is plagerism, to steal from many is research.' Break your RPC down into parts and find more sources of inspiration. Name from one place, weapon from another, history from another, personality from another .... keep doing it and you'll have something that's entirely your own.

Murdering all his friends to get into Beacon... I don't believe it. I think Ozpin is a meticulous in background checks.and doesn't make a habit of accepting sociopaths. I'm so jaded on dark, vengeful histories, it's become a joke. Beacon must be the most miserable place on the planet.

One question I always ask myself is 'Would I play with this RPC?' and in this case, no. There's too much Halo and not enough RWBY, and his murderous backstory is just too unlikely and dreary for me.

But these aspects permeate the character so much he'd need a ground up overhaul to do so. It would be incredibly hard to do so, heartbreaking even, but I  honestly can't give any other advice but to make a RWBY inspired RPC. I know this isn't the review you were hoping for, I'm sorry but this one stumped me.