Talk:Silver Zain-Shrike/@comment-24487330-20140204195104

Here's what stood out to me:

Appearance section: There are plenty of descriptors here to paint a picture of Silver's appearance, but the information seems a bit jumbled. Might I suggest separating information about his person from that about his clothing? Grouping like sets of info like that will make it easier for people to understand and visualize the imagery.

Personality section: No complaints here. You've done a good job portraying Silver as an optimist, a defender, and a martyr, all of which can make for a very interesting character if utilized properly.

Combat section: A good number of the OCs I've seen so far have been focused around raw power, so it's kind of nice to see the odd speed-oriented character. Ordinarily, I'd think that his Semblance would be made to capitalize on Silver's speed somehow, but this idea should make him a decent all-around fighter.

Backstory section: Not only is Silver a prospective Huntsman, but also a prospective chef! I like it, I like it! The part about roping in his team to help at the diner is a nice touch.

Weapon section: Small, light, easy to use and to switch between forms...These are great traits for a speedy fighter like Silver. My only suggestion would be to merge this section with the Combat section, as his weapon is closely tied to his abilities.

Seeing as this was your first OC, it stands to reason that you've had some time to establish Silver, and from where I stand, that's exactly what I've seen. His profile definitely deserves a 9/10, although the only real things keeping him from a 10 are a couple personal misgivings, so try not to take it at face-value.