Talk:Antares Trinity/@comment-26543176-20141214011548

Alright then, me again thought I'd comment again now that you've fixed some of the more glaring problems with your OC. HOWEVER, you still have a whole lot to fix.

You're OC still seems to border on OP as all fuck, with what seems to be a still very serious case of "Special Snowflake Syndrome." You still seem to want to make him incredibly special being the hope of his people, master in every area he wants to be a master in, making him incredibly perfect and whatnot. You've written him in such a way that he seems to be unbeatable more powerful than anyone else and that any combat situation is easily solved by him no matter what. I'd suggest toning it down a bit.

Now then onto something that annoys me greatly. I see you didn't take my advice and buy a dictionary. Seriously, your writing is still littered with abysmal spelling and grammar, your explanations are sub-par and lacking in detail, and once again you need to go over your writing and fix any mistakes, which I see you haven't done as it is littered with so many typo's and terrible spelling. For example; 'frightener' now I am not quite sure what you were trying to say here, but you know, fix it.

Now he's greatly improved from what he was, and I applaud your efforts so far. Good job to you for improving your OC. . . somewhat. Now you just have to do a little more, to get him up to a standard, so good job so far.