Talk:Skylar Delilah/@comment-32355386-20181108192137

Charlie again! As usual:

These are suggestions and references, used at your own discretion. Everything I bring forward is based upon my own character creating experience. If you think I misunderstood something, please feel free to point it out. I can be wrong and invite the feedback.

 Basics 

Something that Skylar suffers from that the others don’t is an unclear colour direction. Skylar’s closest color association is the meaning of “Water Giver” while Dabrina means “Name of an Angel”. Neither of these would point towards the purple colour that she seems to hold.

As well she is missing her Vital Statistics, so I cannot comment on those.

Inspiration?

 Appearance 

The description of her is fine, though a bit short. Is she tall? Short?

As well, does she have any accessories? Why does she only wear a t-shirt, pants, and boots?

Is it just the purple coloration to it? As it is, the colors look overpoweringly purple and mismatched. While a variety in color is good, it is clashin when it is so many shades of the same color. Instead, does she have any accent colors to draw from?

 Personality 

I had already gone over the main issue in Jade’s review. There is just not much to her. She is aggressive, and though working on it she will fight you. Is there anything else to her character?

Once again, you can find the template from Hunters4Hire here: https://www.deviantart.com/bushtuckapenguin/art/RWBY-OC-Template-565902145

It does have some good tips on creating a character personality.

Or you can use the listing method, then summarize in the profile.

But something I would explain in the relationships is why she is with Abby. Now, I cannot figure out why they would be dating vs just being friends.

 Combat 

Why does she not stop? Is it a part of her semblance?

 Overall Impressions 

It is obvious that you are still working on Skylar, but there are some things that I think you should start off with.

First of all: What is her full personality? There is always more to a character than just rage. Otherwise, they are just a one-dimensional character. Getting the personality will give you the understanding of how she would react to everything else.

Secondly: Why would she become a huntress? This should be put in a combination of her personality and her backstory. People do not just wake up and think they are going to dedicate their lives to something that will likely get them killed.

Thirdly: How does this impact everything else? I’m serious, those two steps should be impacting everything else.