Talk:Antares Trinity/@comment-26543176-20141126132146

Okay so Umm......... I don't even know where to begin explaining what is wrong with this OC. Your formatting leaves a lot to be desired. You've literally explained this character in less than 1000 words. Near immortal people are not cannon, nor is saying they were so special that they had to be bombed, because they were too special, and the other kingdoms threw a hissy fit about it.

Your writing is littered with so many typos it makes me think that you wrote it with your eyes closed. Or you've written it in some kind of code that only you can understand and made it impressively difficult for us to understand the limited information about your OC.

As well as EVERYTHING ELSE you have left out dedicated sections for appearance, backstory, personality, and weapons/semblance. These are not all required however having them can make your OC easier to understand/read/comprehend. Mostly, I just want to say, fix this OC, like seriously it needs to be fixed because right now I wouldn't even call this an OC. It's some garbled ideas you spewed onto a page.