Talk:Alice Weston/@comment-23784953-20130816153443

I'm bored so I'll provide a couple of help.

She seems way too young to call Black her "husband". I suggest something a bit more youth-sounding, maybe "partner" or "brother" or "cousin". Whichever you feel like.

Her portrait betrays her description; she doesn't look muscular, but I guess that's one of the limits of a template character (at least, I think it was made in a template? I dunno)

A little clarification and organization on her personality may be needed. Organize it from her good aspects, bad aspects, and hidden side.

Her dust and breath seem a bit decent. But her claws feel overpowered. Since it can cut diamond, that may effectively mean it can cut through anything.

Her backstory.... is it in any way connected to the whole "Red Forest experiments" arc that's been going on lately with other OCs? Not that, that's bad or anything, it's just I've been seeing alot of experiments running around lately.

Other than that, maybe a little more detail can be added. Brevity is wit, but you don't need to follow that when you're creating a chracter.