Talk:Jerah Oshiro/@comment-31408668-20170910134539

Hello, just here to drop an unofficial review, just for fun.

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Jerah is Hebrew for moon.

APPEARANCE

While I can't see anything wrong with it, you may want to change the wording in the first paragraph. You can have someone not be particularily remarkable, but then have a trait that has been considered remarkable. That would, after all, make them remarkable.

PERSONALITY

No contradictions here. Justified responses based on what's known.

BACKSTORY

It is unusual to see a backstory that doesn't include someone going to Beacon or some other academy. It's quite refreshing, in my honest opinion. I can't see anything wrong with it. There is no stepping on canon toes, as far as I have read. Nothing to see here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Nothing to note in combat ability, some martial training is justified due to the backstory. However, his Semblance is a different story. As by the Wiki's Guidelines, Time Manipulation Semblances are grounds for immediate rejection. While you may argue that his Semblance is based around the control of the actual object and how it has eroded, it is said in the description of your Semblance; "  Can cast back aging, wear & tear, erosion, and physical trauma to an inanimate or already dead object." If it is able to cast back aging, then it is most certainly time based.

CONCLUSION: REJECTED

This would most likely be rejected on the grounds of the Semblance being time-based, as it can lead to rejection all on it's own. However, if the Semblance was changed to something else, or altered in some way to make it work differently, I can see Jerah being accepted.

Also, this is more on a general note; You may want to fix the grammar. While it is not too bad, certain sections were a bit confusing. Again, not grounds for rejection, just an idea.

Still, this is just my opinion. It is up to the actual reviewers.

Reviewers, was this a fair review?

- Raikou, a random guy on the Wiki