Talk:Daniel Carter/@comment-24416658-20160731003957

Name does not fit the CNR, or if it does, there is no explanation for it. Also, the name is switched halfway through, from Daniel to tex, for some reason.

Appearance is acceptable, but frankly boring. Consider adding some more details to make the character more unique.

His personality is full of contradictions, and it feels more like an amalgamation of moods. Peaceful yet bloodthirsty? Introverted yet an excellent leader? Calm these down.

And, well, I'm gonna stop with the step by step right there, because I have to say this: This OC does not fit anything on this site at all.

The "weapon" and the Semblance both are incredibly overpowered and broken. Seriously, I can't even begin to describe how they don't work. It just doesn't work. Also, him having no Aura, yet having a Semblance? That's all sorts of no.

And the backstory isn't the worst offender, that's the semblance. The backstory doesn't fit the RWBY universe at all. Grimm counterparts, rituals, the guy killing a Wyvern (I suppose that's what it is here) in one blow, entering Beacon younger than Ruby? None of this is remotely trying to be good for a Fanon wiki OC.

I am sorry, but this character is nowhere near acceptable. If there was a level below rejected, that's where this guy would be. If you would like to make an OC here, know that this one is not it. This OC does not fit the rules and guidelines of the wiki by a long shot.

Very, very serious changes must be made here. At most, this entire OC has to be scrapped. You can have it on some other site, but it is not going to work on this Fanon. If you need any assistance, feel free to message I or another reviewer, or stop by chat if you are 13 years or older.

Rejected.

--RP Moderation Team--