Talk:Adam Wildsclaw/@comment-13593058-20160322003537

 A Review of Adam Wildsclaw

Appearance
Nothing technical to note. Appearance does not interfere with Fanon Rules.

Personality
Point of personality made, nothing major to note.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapons rule followed.

Semblance is acceptable but Dust capacitance must be define. Candidate for rejection.

No significant comment on fighting style.

Backstory
Years skipping in backstory is lacking in detail and may contradict with Guideline Rule for Beacon acceptance age of at least 16. Candidate for rejection.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced and source checks out.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Insufficient Dust capcaity info

- Insifficient backstory info

Review Summary
I have two outstanding problems with the character and one that is personal.

First off, regarding the Semblance which runs off Dust. Dust is finite and runs out eventually so you must define the amount of Dust present. You don't have to say how much he usually carries but stating how much can be carried and how many attacks that results in is probably a good idea.

The second has to do with the backstory which states that as being a former army cadet, he was able to skip a few years in Signal. Fine, but the lack of information means he could have entered Beacon at an age yonger that 16 which is impossible as per Canon and Guidelines. Please add additional information

The final personal point I want to make is the writing style itself. The whole thing read quite poorly as information, while present, was hard to process and extract. Some sections definetly need work.

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