Thread:DustpeltX/@comment-13172690-20170704031300/@comment-13593058-20170704170158

Yes that would be better. What was missing from your current version is the strength of said barrier. With that absent, the barrier was basically inpenetrable with the only limit being time, a completely objective thing in RPs.

In regards to the other problem in your previous message. The contents of the personality and backstory section simply contains too many things that are not necessary within the margins of a character profile which results in its ludicrous length. To pull examples straight from the page, the Personality section is riddled with "For example..." type of things which personally speaking don't belong there.

Same goes for the Backstory section, a lot of "This happened one day..." and "they felt like this in this sort of scenario as they did this and that". Again, personally speaking, that is not how I would write a backstory in a character profile as it just makes my job as a reviewer harder and may kill other people's drive to read anything about the character for an RP.

You fix it but being direct, "This happened, that happened, which resulted in this as his character/personality/habit." Simply put there are more than enough instances in the current sections that simply don't matter or need to be present. You save those for RPs or fanfics, not character profiles.

Again, it's not rejectable, just not nice to read especially for reviewers who have to go through several characters a day.

And then you have THIS ASSHOLE of a page. Yeah, not fun.