Talk:Aurelia Lockett/@comment-24296957-20140612012837

The only issue is with her backstory. The youngest we've seen accepted into Beacon is 16, and that's with a very valid reason stated by the Headmaster, so change that please. Also, if you could, flesh out that category for me. Dive in a little more - who is Aurelia, and how did she become who she is today? Any personal tragedies to befall her? Stuff like that

The semblance was a bit of a debate for me. But with the nessecary drawbacks, it looks acceptable. Just don't...overpower it. We haven't seen anyone that can move faster than Ruby, so please watch that. Perhaps increase the time it takes for the semblance to activate just a very slight amount.

Also, this OC is written very...well, actually. I like the art, especially the weapon. Nicely done there. Like, really well done.

Despite my praise for the artwork, some tweaks need to be made.

Rejected for now.

--RP Moderation Team--