Thread:Aldrasos/@comment-27332019-20151205182543/@comment-25389303-20151230133316

Yep, I think he's almost ready for reviewing again. There are a few minor things I should point out, though:

- regarding the portable lab, I'm assuming that counts as his second weapon? Which is fine as I suppose his bombs would count as ammunition.

- his speed Semblance is a little bland. I know it's a fairly minor part of his character, but it's best to avoid making things too similar to existing Semblances, since we know Ruby has something similar. Perhaps make it so that he short bursts of speed which are tiring but allow him to get away very quickly (and for throwing bombs very far/fast)

- also regarding his Semblance, you need to add limiters - so how much he can use it before he collapses from exhaustion, and how fast he can go. That's very important

- you might want to add that the use of the chemical gas he created during the revolution was still experimental, as we have no knowledge of gas being used at the time. Best to keep it minor, as to not risk it being rejected, yeah? So, like, no gassing the entire population and killing an entire army (not that I'm implying you'd do that)

- the only other thing I could think of would be the name. I honestly didn't expect you to use Medicus, as it was just the first thing I thought of. I THINK Medicus should be alright, since white is usually associated with clean, safe conditions, which relates to how doctors are portrayed. Also, since his colour is white, you might want to make it so that he wears something white, like his mask, since it doesn't make sense to have a white-themed character without the colour, except for his greying hair

Apart from all that, it looks like its almost done. What I just wrote may seem like a lot, but really it should take about five minutes to fix, so nothing major. Nice work.