Board Thread:Role Play Discussion/@comment-13488655-20140101181802

First off, so far it's interesting, but there are a few things I need to point out.

1. No one liners. Try to put down their emotions in more detail. Think, what would I do if I was there and how would people around me react.

2. Avoid repeating words like: he said or I. Add a variety of words to your posts. 