Talk:Rubrum Vermillion/@comment-17970636-20151120035549

Okay, some inconsistencies but regardless, a better job than previous. Let's go over.

First off, his shuriken again, I said that with his jacket being heavily modified he'd be able to only carry 42 at best, you stated 43. I should've been smarter and explained how it would look if he carried 42, well allow me to show you.

http://www.ukpreppersguide.co.uk/wp-content/uploads/2013/06/POCKET-KNIFE-.jpg

Furthermore, it's still not specified as to how he's carrying his shuriken. Also, as a side note, Gwen, from Team NDGO, used Throwing knives, seemed to carry 24 on her as we can count by http://vignette2.wikia.nocookie.net/rwby/images/9/91/V3_02_00096.png/revision/latest?cb=20151101160849 when the things fell around Scarlet. Please refer back to my previous review where I stated how many skuriken ninjas in Naruto carried with them at most.

I hit the shuriken first, but I still don't understand how a blade can get sharper, really. Pyrrha's blade doesn't get sharper from spear to sword form. Blake's blade isn't sharper in katana form then when it's in gambol form, it just alters the ways one can attack really.

Then his semblance, not really a time limit or a limiter put on it. Here on fanon, in an attempt to keep our OC's I guess "underpowered" as one would say, most semblances have a time limit or an exhaustion limit, or some kind of setback. Don't see one here, especially since it's pyrokinesis.

Now, as for his backstory, he survived the flames because of his semblance. His semblance allows him to produce flame, not necessarily let him be flame proof. His aura could protect him, however, his semblance protecting him, eeeeeeeh.

Now, from what we can see from Canon, one starts attending Signal or other handsman academies from the age of 12, and then move on to Beacon, Haven, Shade, etc, when they turn 16. Him having his aura and semblance awakened and such, and seeing as his father was a huntsman, as well as his mother, I don't see why he wouldn't send his son to an academy at the allocated age.

Moving on to becoming an orphan.

Still iffy on the protector of Atlas stuff. Nigh sure that Ironwood has that thing locked down, and he doesn't really have an information source, where does he find those in distress? Atlas isn't tiny.

9 long years of seaching for the man who ruined his life? Seeing as his life was ruined 5 years ago, well, you can see where I'm going with this.

Sparing the life of the man who ruined his? Seems kinda.... cliche. And let's be honest, revenge driving him so far and then suddenly backing down after a few words from the man who took out his parents, well, yeah.... weird.

And as for protecting Atlas again, nearly dying from a Nevermore one shot, well, you're kinda bouncing between extremes here, and with no combat training, it would make sense, but then how could he protect Atlas?

Yeah, that's about it. Peace.