Thread:Cat-Soup64/@comment-31978836-20170714003226/@comment-27743663-20170804011318

Better? That's really something subjective.

Something like add more details seem necessary, but in something like that adding more details can only cause needless reading and taking too long to get to the point.

I'd say just practice your writing overall, if you like that sort of thing, since you seem below mediocre. Things like basic writing practice, maybe writing a small excerpt everyday, and also practicing your punctuation and grammar.

As for how to make the character better, depends how much you want me to say. I'm a rather blunt, harsh, straight-forward person, and my personal opinion doesn't matter at all really so long as the character is acceptable.

Really all I can say is, just keep trying and go take your hand at it, no matter how many times you do get rejected. I mean, one of my OC's was rejected like 8 times before she was accepted, so just keep perserving and at some point you'll just naturally get better.