Talk:Rachel Red/@comment-24052959-20150123181319

She is way too 2 Dimensional for a main character in one of your fanfic.

My planned OC "Ambryn" is somehow similar to Rachel in several way which are being the ex-partner of the next generation team leader,  team leader of the predecessor team, and "gone" before Gauth decide to be in another team. But I might get carried away in developing her. (Actually, I kinda did).

Anyway, the thing is, her 2 Dimensional personality is too underwritten. The history also lack of detail, I cannot find the reason why she wanted to be a huntress, her purpose of life, how did Bryan and Rachel get along. Its like she only exist as a purposeless zombie to adorn Bryan, as a mere image to make Bryan imagining himself smooching with her.

Then her weapon. Lets put away the "Side Character/Non-RP" topic on this part. If your specialty is "Creativity" as you describe in your user page, then you should act like it. Recolor of Yang's weapon isn't a fruit from creativity. So easy even the uncreative Fatphile and Mr.Plagiarizer  can do it..