Talk:Saffron Hurst/@comment-25924729-20200115113901

Somehow I find the idea of a toad faunus that hates mud hilarious. He's cute.

Appearance is ribbit. Bizarre and rough, sounds like something out of a dieselpunk setting. Bonus points cause I like that kind of settings.

Personality wise, not sure if this is intentional but I like that you address the fact toads have that soulless stare all the time. Fukkin creepy, just sitting there with nothing in their eyes. Does he just go "REEEEE" when a beowolf shows up? Make some think of https://youtu.be/iQrjbRz3y7A


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Backstory was alright. A little unecessarily in depth, it made reading interesting but took a while to find the important information. It's optional to cut it down a little.

There is a real issue near the end though. Based on the show's current timeline there should only be a few months since the Fall of Beacon, after which he took over the WF. There's no way he could have had years of careful planning to do it like the backstory says. He could still take over the gang suddenly if there's a good reason how he did that, but no long term stuff that would take more than a yearish?

Weapon is very unique, I like the detail about its name. Chewing Dust sounds dangerous o_o. It's a little debatable whether his prosthetics count as weapons too, but they fit the 4 point rule anyway. I like that they're actually a disability that makes things difficult for him, many other OCs just use prosthetics as an excuse to have cool weapons and stuff. This is rare and neat.

Other combat abilities seem fine. Semblance needs some well defined limits imo, how large, heavy of powerful must an object be to break this defenseive bubble? If its made too powerful this has the potential to be quite broken, negating nearly all ranged or AOE attacks, and screwing up melee hits too. heavy limits definitely need to be put in.

CNR checks out, so Japan has stoner frogs.... why am i not surprised -_-

Anyway yeah, very neat guy, just needs some fixing at parts.

Rejected.

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