Talk:Talis Ebonmere/@comment-17970636-20151210025321

Alright, I know you're trying hard to fix this up so I'll give you some advice, I know this'll be the last time for this OC, you're getting better with them everytime so I wouldn't be surprised if none on the next team you make get rejected. It's a learning process.

It's power armour, right? However, even with such, it covers him basically from head to toe and the weaknesses are practically non-existant in an RP scenario, here's a little push in the right direction because I know eventually if not now you wish to start RPing.

To start off with, cut his height back down to 6'9" so he's 7' with the armour. The armour itself should be around 100 pounds adding on to a current 300 pounds, that gives him more than enough bulk/strength.

As for a weakness, joints. Kinks in the armour or so to speak. Also, maybe adding that he's resistant to stuff like the cold and lightning, but heat can weaken him or something, I don't know, just not fully imprevious to the elements, though the blunt impacts is quite good really, just an added suggestion.

You don't have to take exactly what I've put here, it's simply a recommendation because I know you're trying hard.

Rejected.

--RP Moderation Team--