Thread:Xanneer/@comment-24911350-20140528211733

Hi ^^ Just saw your comment on my blog post.

The link you posted to the story isn't working, and I can't seem to find it otherwise, but you mentioned Zahn so I went to take a look and see if there's anything on his page that seems a little overpowered, and there are a few problems I'm noticing.

- It says he uses a "Basic energy crystal", but to the best of my knowledge, those aren't a thing. I thought you may have just meant electric, but it mentions using electric dust separately later on. What do you mean here?

"The maximum effective range of the rifle is around 700 feet, while the maximum effective range of the shotgun blast is around 0-5 feet for the blast to be damaging, and 30 feet for targets to still be hit by the shockwave, with a firing spread of 90 degrees left and right, and 45 degrees up and down, with a fire rate of about 30 rounds per minute. Any longer distance and the dust blasts begin to dissipate and become weaker before disappearing completely. Zahn is able to shoot at least 100 shots while in rifle form and 50 in shotgun form before he needs to reload a new dust crystal"

- This part is very inconsistent, and weighted to be overpowered. As seen in RWBY, Dust crystals are only a few inches long. divide that by 50 or 100 for 50-100 shots ("At least" says the page), and there's not enough dust density there for any real offensive capability. With the shotgun, using generous estimates for crystal size, Zahn is shooting about a tenth of a tablespoon of dust every shot, and that somehow has an area of effect that works out to a little over 700 square feet. The difference between what you say is the input, and what you say is the output is titanic.

With the rifle it's not quite so bad, but it's still really bad. One twentieth of a tablespoon of dust is what you're firing with each shot, that won't do anything to anyone. Your magazines sizes are waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too high to retain effectiveness, and the spread on your shotgun is absolutely ridiculous.

- Later on it mentions another crystal that isn't a real thing, the "Sticky slime" crystal. Remember that dust at its base form is just energy and force-- Fire, Ice, Thunder, Impact, Gravity, and a few other types that we don't know anything about yet, there are a set, limited number of types and making up your own is a sure-fire path or being OP.

- I don't see any problems with his semblance, but at the beginning it says "he discovered he was the proud owner of a semblance", which makes it kinda sound like not everyone has one. Everyone has a semblance, it's just a matter of whether you know how to use it or not.

I don't see any other issues, and that one about the semblance is just some confusing wording that's unrelated to the semblance itself, so it's mostly just the weapon. The disparity on that weapon between input and output is simply ecliptic. 