Talk:Nyx Starshine/@comment-26362067-20150911234219

I know Ver's already gone through this, but I wanted to leave a review as well.

Now I'm not sure how much you've fixed since Ver reviewed, but I still see a few problems and wanna elaborate on a few things.

First things first: To put it simply, no one in RWBY can fly without the help of something like their weapon, though I've rarely seen that. So there's no point in saying that her wings are too small to fly with--just say they're small and leave it at that. The glider is perfectly fine.

The Semblance is another. Semblances can only have one function. I know some in canon seem like they have more than one, but when you think about it, they don't. My recommendation is to go with the feathers, since it fits her fighting style more. That said, I praise you for that. I have a hard time coming up with Semblances that fit the character's fighting style.

Also, state how her first name relates to the color rule in trivia. Otherwise, depending on the mod's knowledge, she may be rejected.

And one other thing: If she's the leader of the team, I would think you'd want to put in leadership qualities in the personality. Not a reject-worthy problem, just a note.

Otherwise, I see no problems. Good character all-around.