Talk:Ross Liv/@comment-25924729-20190714084905

7'6 feet....


 * ....cries in 5'6* D:

Appearance and personality are pretty good.

Backstory could use a bit more detail... things like who is The Stranger, who is Victor Bloodborn, what is the WF Stalker unit etc, terminology like this should be breifly explained so readers can better understand what you're talking about.

Ono his combat sections, the weapon seems way too heavy, even if we consider RWBY people are stronger than typical people and he's a freaking pillar man. Lifting 350 pounds is one thing, consantly carrying, skilfully weilding and fighting with an object like that daily is another. I suggest reducing the weight by a lot...

Last issue is his semblance. The shield form seems alright, but the sword form is a bit confusingly worded... i cant really understand what you mean, and cant properly review or gauge its power. You will have to rewrite that part. Its also optional to add more limits like maximum durability of his aura in the shield mode, and how weak it becomes in sword mode.

CNR checks out, no other issues found.

Just some better explanations on parts of the page, and a slight decrease in his weapon weight. Nice try.

Rejected.

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