Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-24296957-20150113152446/@comment-25363089-20150113161823

Breyal right off the back.She has no trait of her being a faunus.No Large feet or anything kangaroo related.Backstory wise.Seems good could at least explained that her father was stay at home dad and her mom was huntress and thats why.Cause As I read the story.I didn't understand what she ment by her mom's career.Untill she said beacon.The Faunus Self Defense class was really creative.I can see how some faunus would make those kinds of classes.The weapon is creative and fits the oc.However I would have liked if she at least explained how far she can go with her punch.The Name Breyal doesn't fit the color naming rule.But can be quickly changed.Along side her aura color.Yoland works it is greek for voilet so all she really needs to do is either switch the two around or change her first name to a color.Backstoy wise is short and simple and leaves alot to be needed.(I would like to see her backstory filled more then only four lines.Not saying I want a novel but at least 8 lines or more.Just my personal thing.)on to the next one.