Talk:Ravelyn Rouge/@comment-31408668-20190210034501

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference recognized. While the name Ravelyn doesn't immediately have a meaning, it makes you think of a raven, which makes you think dark or black, in general cases.

APPEARANCE

Nothing to detract from here.

PERSONALITY

The personality is consistent, but I would seriously try and condense it down a bit. As mentioned by Dust in a previous review, certain things seem redundant, but this doesn't mean the personality doesn't work. An emotionless mask gives you a lot of options as to how to handle things, but I would be curious as to see how far she would be able to go with this mask. No obvious contradictions. No major problems here.

BACKSTORY

The backstory is descriptive, as it paints a clear picture of the various experiences Ravelyn has been through. One thing of note is the many outside-of-school experiences she has, which gives her a rather unique view on things. Placement in Vytal Festival is not noted, but is technically not necessary. No stepping on canon toes. No problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Now, the weapons. We have a primary in the form of the yumi Enshi, and her two blades Shade and Shadow. Enshi is well defined, the capabilities of it's arrows are well documented. My issue lies with the two swords.

Now, I will preface this with the fact that this will not impact the conclusion, this is mostly for your sake so people don't misunderstand what the weapons are. First of all, Shade and Shadow cannot be katanas, not both of them. A katana, by it's definition, is a weapon with a curved blade, with a blade length of 60 to about 73 cm, by it's general definition. Not only that, they are made as mainly two-handed weapons, due to the specific build of the handle and it's general heft and length. You also made a note that these two blades have the same properties of the weapons from the Ranger's Apprentice, so I took the liberty of checking. The longest blade used by the Rangers, is 15 inches long, or about 38 cm. So that means that the long blade, Shade, would be what's called an õ-wakizashi, while Shadow would be defined as a tanto. And before someone mentions that you only use katana as a weapon deriviative, the correct term for that would be nihonto, as that is the style of weapon we are talking about.

This is all just specificity, but hearing katana can cause a lot of confusion, especially when you know the difference. I am sorry if this came off as harsh, I didn't intend for it to be that, it's just for the benefit of clarification.

As for her skills wtth her weapons, it seems perfectly fine. Seems to indicate that she is more skilled with Enshi, which would make sense as it is her primary weapon. Her stealth makes sense, considering her rather extensive experience from her backstory. No problems here.

SEMBLANCE

Lights Out is an interesting Semblance to me, mostly because of the amount of versatility there is to disabling electrical objects. It has a fatigue limiter with variance, the variance being the size and power of the power supply or electrical circuit she is trying to take out. No problems here.

CONCLUSION: ACCEPTED.

'''Again, I want to reiterate that I don't mean any harm about the weapons, I am just passionate about swords and blades. In any other sense, Ravelyn is a very good character. She has defined reactions to things, she has a lot of experience she can pull from and react to. She can work in many places. The Semblance as well shouldn't be underestimated.'''