Talk:Akamizu Shibai/@comment-13593058-20160301061615

 A Review of  Akamizu Shibai

Appearance
Not much to judge on a technical level.

Personality
A reasonable personality. No contradictions and has justified responses. No additional

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon does not contradict with existing canon weapons nor the Fanon-Rules.

Semblance contradicts Fanon Rules for Time Manipulation, approaching Auto-Hit zone and general illogical workings. See Summary for more details.

Backstory
Lengthy but no contradictions.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced and source checks out.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Semblance contradictions

Review Summary
I want to start by saying I understand what the Semblance does and this decision was not something I made on my own. I consulted other reviewers on the matter and we have decided it was reject worry for reasons I will thoroughly explain as follows:

Time Manipulation

Resetting yourself in an instant manner can count as Time manipulation. Theorietically with this ability, one could land succuessive hits within such a short span it simply leads to the second point...

Auto-Hit

I'm not saying it does nor will the character do so, but it certainly has potential to be an Auto-Hit Semblance which in retrospect...

Doesn't make any sense

This is animation canceling, The Semblance. A video game exploit which allows the most efficient and sometimes INSANE amount of DPS (I know this because I used the exact same exploit in that exact game to utterly delete someone's healthbar in less than a second). This isn't a mechanic, it's an exploite on how the game and animations were coded. This is why dedicated fighting games rarely have this or when they do, make it really hard to pull off, because it's not realistic nor does it even make sense in the character's perspective and universe.

<p style="font-weight:normal;margin-bottom:1em;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;">Other things I'd like to note, the backstory is way to long. I could not bare reading too much of it just because the length was so intimidating. The language does not help either as many sentences seem rather redundant and unimpactful due to the passive voice used. Backstories benefit from short and to the point sentences. They make more impact and allow an easier understanding of the character. Remember that a character profile is for others to quickly learn about a character, not read the characters life story in great detail. That's what fanfiction is for and I encourage you to do so there, but not here.

<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"> If you require assistance in the matter, please feel free to ask other Fanon mambers for help. If you believe there to be a misunderstanding or mistake, please contact me via message wall or another reviewer.