Talk:Nathan Corbeau/@comment-5726563-20130809034612

Original Character Review

Nathan Corbeau- Nathan Corbeau is a rather good character, but he does seem to have a lot of excess weapons. His backstory could also take a small tweak with what knowledge we have of the RWBY world, to get rid of the pre-3rd gen misconceptions. His personality could be looked at for cliches, and clothes made more practical. Also, the HCSS could be changed to make it a bit more original and less like Ruby's. Then there is the biggest problem. The symbol put by the villagers does not fit with the world at all, as it is obviously a 2nd gen creation. You need to edit that first before we can even think about accepting him.

After you've made the changes, inform one of us and we will judge him again.