Talk:Lilac Lavenderian/@comment-27743663-20170704010810

CNR, while obvious, is not noted on the page. It needs to be, as per what the guidelines say. Most people do this through a trivia section at a bottom.

Appearance, well, it's there. I suppose. Horribly lacking in detail and any complex description, but it's there and barebones, filling out the criteria.

Personality...well, is that even one? You more or less just used really vague singular words to describe her, and those can be interpretated in a looooooot of different ways. Following what's been said before, please add more details to this section.

Backstory, well, a lot of details missing as well. Where did she get the training necesary to even be accepted to Beacon, for one. For the one paragraph it is, it's more about her father than it even is her, which isn't really okay, given just what the page is called.

Weapon, I guess I can envision a crossbow becoming a Trident, if a bit messily. So long as that's all it does and there's no additional features, then it's fine. I will point out though the note of it apparently only being transformable when it runs out of shots, not really rejectable, but it is a major design flaw combat wise.

Semblance, needs more clarifications. Does it only apply to her crossbow bolts, or can it be anything she decides to shootout/throw? And why the specification of it only applying to inanimate objects it hits? Why doesn't it work on living creatures? Something that selective really isn't too suitable as a semblance.

Tl;dr

Rejected on

- CNR not noted anywhere on the page

- Personality lacking proper description

- Backstory lacking proper description

- Semblance lacking clarifications and being extremely odd in its selective functions

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