Talk:Rosalie Anissa/@comment-13172690-20151211015421

Ok, quite a few problems.

First, when I looked up the Team name, there are two interpretations there. Please choose one that fits our CNR Rules.

Secondly, her personality. "She is a cold-hearted person which distancing herself from anyone including his teammates, but she do not leave her teammate and leader behind. She is also a untrustable young girl that the people tried to talk to her and become furious when someone disturb her quiet and peaceful rest." I see a contradiction to what you wrote here since she seems to be distant but doesnt leave her teammates? Id reword that.

Then, your bio. First off, how could her step-sister have been injured easily from an ursa since she is a gradusted student from Beacon? Wouldn't her aura protect her from such an injury? Id relook at this since it doesnt seen correct. Also, what is the family business you mentioned? Please clarify.

Next and most importantly, your combat sections. Master Swordmanship at 18? I don't believe that would be possible unless she had 4 straight years of training with no rest at all (35,000 hours). Please get rid of this and also, it doesnt seem like the character has any weaknesses. Weakness help character growth. Please revise that section and you can use accepted characters to give you an idea.

Also, her semblance both has auto hit and auto dodge capability and as the rules state, those kind of semblances are vetoed regardless of limit. Please choose a different semblance.

Until these are fixed,

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

Also, not part of the review but it would be a great idea to look at your grammar and spelling since it was a little hard to read.