Talk:Ecruteak Personne/@comment-25924729-20190608040347

Very cool character. Solid concept and ineresting, easy to follow writing.

Appearance and personality are good. Really like the detailed descriptions.

Backstory has a small issue. While we do allow characters to interact with Headmasters and canon staff of the Huntsmen academies like Ozpin and the Shade Headmaster, it is only allowed to a minor degree. not to the extent of a character having personal connections to them and being able to call in requests and personal favours from them, or have them call in favours for said character. That part in the last paragraph of his backstory must be changed or removed.

Honestly, i dont see any problem with him applying directly to Beacon himself. Straight up known bandits and terrorists have been accepted before in the canon show, i dont see why he woudnt be able to get in normally. Worst case, it seems very easy to fake his backstory and enter that way if he wishes.

Weapon, combat abilities and semblance all seem alright. Its optional to add some technical limits like range of his revolvers, amount of ammo he carries etc, but its fine without them too.

Nothing to note in the relationships section, CNR checks out, love the name actually :)

Really good character, just needs tha minor tweak in the backstory.

Rejected.

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