Talk:Mystique Rust/@comment-27603392-20140519012300

First of all, her apperance is oddly described, make little to no sense: "She has her mothers blue eyes that look like shining opals" ? Opal is a clear to white, with different colored spot reflects if put in direct light.

What type of winter clothes she is wearing ? Dresses, jacket with skirt, coat with pants ? Be more specific. I feel like you are trying to make unique by repeating the "Her is feather-like/feel like feather", and combines it with your vague description, is a poor combination. The same can be said with her outfit she chooses to wear at Beacon.

Personality could used some more work, seeing as her character is still very 2 dimensional and static. Additionally, you placed her ability in the personality section, I'd suggest you move it.

Her ability is leaned too much on her favor. What exactly is her flaws ? After images is something that cannot be leaned, because it has to be: A. A Semblance (Blake's) or B. Ability to move so fast it is capable of actually leaving after image (Ruby's/Weiss's).

How exactly does her Semblance mix with her fighting style, seeing that she fight in close quarter combat range ?

Right now, we don't know if members of White Fang and their relatives can join Beacon, as Blake has to hide her own identity and possibly fake her transcription in order to join. The timing in the history need to be specific: When did her father get injured, when did she begin her training ? Who told her about Beacon, etc ?

Another thing I noticed: She is 5. Is this profile some sort of future predicting one ? I'd suggest changing her age to a fitting one, or rework on her profile completely so it would match her age.

Rejected.