Thread:Takeshi kun21/@comment-25363089-20170225204349/@comment-8182065-20170319004413

I did get some hail a couple of weeks ago, which turned into snow in some locations which was weird lol.

Sorry for long delay, got caught up in a lot of things. But I have been looking back on the page. I wanna say after his mother's death, you can get rid of the part where him and his siblings tried to work to keep their home. I wanna assume they're 8 years old around this time, and not many would employ children to work for them (at least in a legal setting). The only jobs that'd be plausible for them would be along the lines of hosting a lemonade stand, shovelling snow in a cold climate, etc. Some of his older siblings may have had jobs, but if they were enough to provide a stable income, the house probably wouldn't have been lost.

I'd probably add some reasoning on why said human family wanted their home, and would so heartless as to evict 9 children out onto the streets. It can simply be the fact that the property is the best location for condos/has a lot of history to it/some tale about the previous owners hiding treasure there.

When he reaches the fight club maybe age him up a bit more to about 17-20, just for the fact that he's still a growing young lad and probably would get his ass handed to him by anyone twice his age. Also would mention some form of training, whether it be some sort of class or from his father.

Speaking of father, Coyote must've had some reason to leave and then mysteriously come back. I don't expect Rasuk to openly trust him right away or anyone of his siblings for that matter when they were abandoned. Sure he came back when they needed someone to take care of them, but he was gone for 8 whole years. That's a lot of missed bonding time, so I wouldn't expect Rasuk to even call him father when he wasn't around at all after he was born.

All I can think of so far.