Talk:Azazel Sulfrus/@comment-24416658-20160712050901

Okay.

The name, first of all, is way too much of a stretch. Associating a color to a Biblical daemon doesn't really work for the CNR in this case, and if it did it would most likely go with red, since that's what most people see when they hear "daemon". You would need a daemon that's consistently connected to Black.

While the appearance is really tacky and edgy, it does not warrant a point off.

Even if it's a bit unimaginative, the weapon, again, is not a point off.

The Semblance doesn't really make sense. It's shown in Canon that Aura helps to heal wounds normally, up to scratches and cuts and the like. Along with that, the whole thing about Self-healing in seconds is not allowed.

And, well, now we come to the biggest, most present issue, which will likely require a total revamp of this OC: Canon interaction.

Here in the backstory we have two Canon characters: Salem and Qrow. Interaction with Canon at this degree is heavily not allowed, and is immediate rejection right there. The point of making OCs here is to find a way to make them unique and interesting without having to make them piggyback off of a Canon, existing character. Doing so immediately makes your OC more important than anyone else, something we wish to not have happen.

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Rejected for above.

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