Talk:Geist Morder/@comment-24012109-20140517163426

...I feel as though the backstory needs some work. Sure, both of his parents died to more ruthless humans, but a young kid without training...killing three grown men when around the same number overwhelmed both of his parents...The logic just doesnt add up.

I also notice you refer to your sword as 'magic'. Things can look like magic, but in Remnant Science is heavily relevant to what looks like 'magic'. Its often said that Magic is just Unknown Science. Describe the weapon more.

His abilities still seem really vague. He trained for several years, but you only mention his sword's capabilities, the semblance (Which, by the way, sounds very out of setting and we do not except Shadow-based semblances), and Ulfur. How about how he fights, or his style of how he would go about using his weapon. Maybe even give Ulfur a personality. Things of that nature, you want to explain yourself, but leave areas to grow.

Rejected for now.

If you need advice, just reply back to my comment if you are curious.

-RP Moderation Team-