Talk:Cobalt Steel/@comment-31408668-20200111000245

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Cobalt is the name of a colour of blue. ''Reviewer's note: The reference to the name meaning should be placed in a section called Trivia, commonly at the bottom of the page. Fix that.''

APPEARANCE

Short and to the point. It's descriptive, and paints a very clear picture, his eyes in particular. As for the outfit, it seems reasonable, it makes it clear he most likely sees a lot of combat, considering his casual wear involves armour. All in all, it works. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

This section seems to l\be incomplete. It points out that Cobalt has similar attributes to his father, but it doesn't state what those attributes are. It makes a vague mention of him being like a lightning bolt, but that can be interpreted in a number of ways, so you need to be more specific. And yes, I am aware that you point out some of these traits in the backstory, but you need to specify which, and also make the two second effort to put them in the correct place. State all personality traits here. No obvious contradictions, mostly due to lack of information. Major problems here.

BACKSTORY

I will be very honest with you; this is a very bare backstory. It has very limited paths to continue on, and it contains very little to make Cobalt different from any other somewhat edgy failed Hunstman. However, it gives enough to be considered acceptable. No stepping on canon toes. Noted as absent at the Vytal Festival. Minor problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

The weapons are within guideline specifications. We have a dual transformable primary in the form of ''Slice n' Dice. ''A surprisingly refreshing, very industrial-feeling weapon. And while the description of the weapon is relatively bare, I can actually get a pretty good picture of them. Intriguing. No problems here.

As for Cobalt's skill in combat, it is measured well. You have gone into a lot of detail as to how his physical attributes change how he fights and where they give him advantages and disadvantages, something I would occasionally like to see more of. Well done. However, as a personal note, I'd recommend getting someone to go over it, as it is a grammatical slog to get through. I understand that English is not everyone's first language, but still, I'd advise you to consider it. No problems here.

SEMBLANCE

It is noted that Cobalt doesn't have a Semblance. I will however point out that it is incorrect to say someone doesn't have a Semblance, they just haven't discovered it yet. I'd recommend changing the wording. No problems here.

CONCLUSION: REJECTED (Personality section seems to be incomplete)

'''Cobalt is a fine base for a character, but I would recommend you try to expand a bit more on him. More of what his childhood was like, more about his time at school, as you currently only have noted the bad things that have happened to him. Which really isn't good form. '''

- Raikou