Talk:Ember Wulff/@comment-13593058-20171118043523

Ember Wulf Review

Appearance
Appearance present.

Personality
Personality present.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon rules followed.

Semblance is no different from one of the stated abilities of Aura. Furthermore, specifics regarding range and length of use is not stated. Grounds for rejection.

Backstory
 Backstory lacks detail. Where is she from? What kind of Hunters were her parents? Who was the bandit? Why did he have such a sizable tribe? Why was Ember wandering off and where did she wander off to that bandits could attack her? Why were two trained and established Hunters so easily killed by bandits? How did she train to get accepted into Beacon without going to a combat school? Why was she accepted into Beacon in the first place? How did she meet her teammates? How and where did she build her weapon? Grounds for rejection.

Miscellaneous
 Colour reference noted.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Semblance is already covered as part of Aura and therefore redundant

- Backstory lacks detail

Review Summary
I would say the character is a good start but needs a bit more work. The main problems here are the Semblance and the Backstory. Semblance being just a generic sensing ability that Aura already provides which just means you probably don't want to have an ability like that. The more significant problem is your backstory which makes the character generic for one, dead parents inspiring the child to get stronger and all. And the fact that there's too little context to work with. Needs more work here. A lot more work.

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