Talk:Katsune "Kitty" Akatsuya/@comment-1309458-20141113161600

Alright, let's get it started, a-ha, let's get it started in here.

Review - Part 1

In terms of grammar, it's pretty much impeccable. I didn't spot a single spelling error or misuse of a any grammatical constructs. So, yeah, good job! Only thing I'd advise is that there are some instances of awkward wording i.e. repeating the same word in a paragraph too soon, thus making it sound a little more unbalanced than ideal. But that's minor. A simple proofreading sweep will fix any errors you might find. Everything else (formatting, mostly) is perfectly fine. In terms of grammar, pretty much amazing. You've got a good head on your shoulders for this.

Review - Part 2

Alright, this is really good. Personally, this is one of the best profiles I've seen in quite a long time. Now, I don't shill out praise often, so you can take that into consideration. I have little tolerance for mistakes, inconsistencies, errors of any kind. You have little of any of those negatives. So, going on to why I like her so much. She is realistic, well-developed, and very well thought-out. Everything about her - her background, the racism she suffered, the bravery of her little brother, her relationship with her father - is well-written and consistent. I love how detailed and cerebral her weapon description and abilities are. The allusions to various works of literatureand fiction are well done and make sense. Really, it's just excellent all around. If there was a character that deserved art of her to be made, it's Kitty.

I apologize for how succint this review might seem, but there's little to complain about and very little to criticize. Recommendations? Write some more stories about her, flesh her out even more than she is now. It can only lead to good things.

All in all, good job.