Talk:Elise Mindre/@comment-25291880-20140928004626

Nice OC, I might say. Her outfit is interesting and you described it well. This is my first OC that I've really had a go at reviewing (Besides the ones for the reviewer competition) so hopefully I help you with it.

Her Personality: Her personality section is simple and short, which are two good things, as you don't want to go overboard unless you can add dozens of details. However, this part doesn't really fit in with her backstory, as the latter never explains why she acts noble, or why her quiet nature and introverted attitude comes up at times.

Backstory: The only main problem that I have with Elise is her backstory, as a backstory is supposed to fuel the reasons behind everything else, such as her personality. It defines who she is and why she does what she does. Elise's backstory is a bit lacking in depth, as well as an explanation of her true nature. A question that was raised in my mind was 'why did she leave her village?'. It stated that Elise was happy with her life in the small town, and she even had a boyfriend, so why did she do it? Was there a conflict happening between her family, or did she just grow tired of her life? I also want to know how she and her mother got along, as well as what motivated her to save enough money for becoming a Huntress. Having a solid, detailed history can change your OC's concept completely, which is why it's good to make sure to add enough to the character. It also helps in roleplaying, as I usually look at a my RP partner's OC's to see what they act and think like. But besides this, I like your OC and the potential of what she can become. Her semblance and weapons are cool (I have chakrams too in one of my OCs *Chakram weapon fist pump*) and I hope to see more soon.