Talk:Pearle Bengali/@comment-24012109-20170620191641

Here, this is actually a pretty decent build of a character, but lacks explanation as far as most categories go. The guy's personality, appearance, and weapon sections could all use work.

His backstory has an astounding giant hole in it, jumping from 8 to mysterious 17. What happened to him in that period to make him leveled out and not bloodthirsty around those who helped him? How did he learn to fight? How did he properly escape such cultist intent and remained free? These are things you have to go into, but not too much as to not bore whoever reads this.

As for now, I'll reject this, but it is a solid build. Take note of guides on the wikia, and don't be afraid to ask for help or references.

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/Character_sheet_base#Profile

http://rwbyfanon.wikia.com/wiki/User_blog:EvergreenLeaf/Original_Character_Creating_Guide