Talk:Alani Hi'iaka/@comment-27743663-20170304031040

CNR checks out

Apperance is fine

Personalty is fine

Background is...rather odd, to say the least. Motivations and how things play out seem fairly Deus Ex Machina, but I'll just stick to the actual issues and keep personal thoughts aside. How exactly would this evil engineer be able to send her to Shade? Nothing in her backstory mentions she had any training prior to even dream about getting accepted. From what the page gives, all she should know up until that age is hula-hooping. Tbe entire thing of "being sent to become a Huntress" instead of "back to your family where I took you from" is reaaaaaaaaaaaal odd as well and reaaally doesn't make any sense, besides making it seem like you couldn't fiind any actual motivation to give, but eh. I disgress.

Semblance doesn't make much sense to me either, and I feel it needs some clarifications. So the glow somehow equates to sharpness, but light doesn't have a physical form to do that in the first place. Besides that, 100 meters is too far a reach for someone of her age, and she can effectively just have it dance around someone without issue, especially with that 10 minute lasting time. On that, would spinning /anything/ allow her semblance the same effect? What exactly makes it so it's only limited to Hula Hoops?

Weapon is fine, I suppose.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Being sent to Signal with no prior training. Hula-hooping isn't the same as hunting Grimm.

- Semblance lacks clarifications, limits are too high

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