Talk:Raban Vogel/@comment-31408668-20191127230205

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference is recognized. Raban is derived from the Germanic word hraban, meaning raven.

APPEARANCE

Short but... I was going to say sweet, but in this context, fitting is better to say. It paints a clear picture. We normally make our characters with colorful outfits that express who they are. But in this case, the clothes does convey a lot about Raban's character. They are tight, maybe even a bit constricting. He is wearing literal chains. He's trapped. As for physical appearance, it seems feasible, based on information given in a certain piece written about Raban, as well as the backstory provided. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

The hopeful prisoner. His personality is well built, I would say. It paints a picture of someone who really is all alone, in a sense, with him being in his own head a lot, daydreaming and such. I also appreciate that he is a bit naive still, that he still has a somewhat childlike understanding of things, as it makes sense for someone in his situation, and it makes what happens to him that much more disturbing. No problems here.

BACKSTORY

Oh wow... this one still gets me, because it is dark in an uncomfortable way, at least for me. But... it does make sense. It is interesting to read a backstory that involves a darker element of Mistral, something we have heard exists, but they can't exactly show. And while we can't know that this specific situation is a thing... we can assume it is possible. However, it is well writtem and it is certainly memorable. Absence in Vytal Festival is noted. No stepping on canon toes. No problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Raban does not have a weapon, so this doesn't apply. No problems here.

When it comes to combative ability, it is mentioned that he has a tiny bit of experience with fistfighting, but based on the description, I will assume he is not a fighter. No problems here.

SEMBLANCE

Raban has yet to find his Semblance, so this does not apply.

CONCLUSION: ACCEPTED

'''Raban is a dark character, and to be honest, it is very interesting to see a more bleak take on what Remnant could hide. Especially since it is well written and thought out. Still... it is solid as an effort. Well done, Jade.'''