Talk:Cordama Verviel/@comment-22854550-20160422152732

Okay. Big stuff here.


 * Dust infusion into body parts is currently a no-no.  A big one.  This includes injecting dust into one's bloodstream.  This is the main reason for rejection.


 * I may be misreading this, but the weapon has too many transformations.  Three is the cap.  I'm reading four.


 * The semblance is a no, but mostly in accordance to the first point.  I like the pigmentation idea.  You can have a semblance that reacts to dust and amplifies the effects of it, but the rest of the semblance just seems to be the result of his body modifications.

In conclusion,

Rejected.

-- RP Moderation Team --

Nitpicks:


 * 19 is far too young to have graduated from Atlas.  It's a 4-year academy and the majority of students start at age 17 (students like Ruby are an oddity and any early admission is an exception to the normal) and continue education until they're 21.  Even a prodigy would not be able to graduate early because the schooling is based mostly in experience.  Accompanying senior Huntsmen and taking on minor missions is the norm most of the time.

If you do not intend to use this character in RP, then you do not need them to be accepted. If they're just for fanfic purposes, then you're okay. However, if you intend to RP on the wiki with this character, you'll have to overhaul them extensively.