Board Thread:News and Events/@comment-27603392-20130815124446/@comment-1618120-20130815152506

Well I'm just going to kick it of with Amber.

Amber's personality is the same personality I've seen time and time again, this personality can be improved, the whole friendly but serious thing doesn't cut it. To improve something like this, you need to give us what makes your character tick, personality flaws, something that contradicts herself.

Her weapon and abilities, you need to explain in detail how she was able to MANIPULATE a dust if she has dust skills. However, I seem to like the weapon but you don't seem to explain how she uses it or what she can do with it.

I also seem to like what you did for the name. Smart.

Backstory. THANK YOU! You're the only one who explains how she was able to be who she is and how she got it. It makes more sense than randomly writing it down and never stating it. However, her getting into Beacon seems a bit too much, you need to tone that down.

Now Tomai. Her height is actually fine for her age, I don't know why it says "tall for a woman.". Her agressive fighting style is something I haven't seen here before it's quite good. My only problem is it doesn't seem to fit her personality in any shape or form. Her personality is who she is and who she is is how she fights. She seems to have too many attacks tone it down a little bit. These attacks also don't seem to have how she was able to attain it and how she can use it. Her backstory seems pretty neat, her parents are mean! I love them!

Giving it much thought. I think my vote is on Amber.