Talk:Scarlet Sang/@comment-24262164-20140113062052

How I review

Interesting. I'm torn on if I like the exoskeleton or not. Seems like it might get a little OP when we start having armor sets. I don't mean to say this isn't possible even, just that it doesn't fit the RWBY style. I don't think I can make a good judgment on the armor at this time.

You didn't mention her father's death at all until after it happened. Why? What happened?

I like that you acknowledge the little combat experience she must have. Now its just a matter of can you get that point across with her combat.

Her semblance seems a little weird to me. I dunno. With the proper gloss it could work but right now I'm not feeling it. There are multiple levels of understanding that we can have, lets just say they are conscious and unconscious. These levels don't have to interact with each other so the unconscious mind can know you are in danger before your conscious mind. Now your semblance means that the power is clearly there, it's just a matter of triggering it. Its kinda like adrenaline in that sense. Adrenaline can make you stronger but it is controlled by the unconscious mind since you can't just focus and secret it yourself. What bothers me about your semblance is that neither your conscious mind nor your unconscious mind seem to control it with any foresight.

I like her being in flux, as you call it. Reading something like that would be interesting.