Talk:Iju Bane/@comment-933831-20140303183737

Okay, several things to go over here, let's start with the combat details. Firstly, an innate X3 to all speed because of the footwear is a strain to believe, especially in a stat as widespread as Speed. Speed includes running speed, fine-movement speed, reaction speed, etc. In addition, be careful about declaring something "Impervious to bullets". Force is force. If a shot carries enough force, it'll pierce. A better term to use would be "Extremely resistant to most firearms". Moving on, you mention his semblance in the sidebar as something called Momentus, but never explain what that IS in the profile itself.

Now, the backstory has one issue that I'm starting to crack down on, which is when you state he "joined up a Hunter Academy where he aced with the best grades of his year." First off, this level of intellectual transformation on its own is extremely unlikely. For someone who was failing before, and didn't attend the classes, him having the top grade in not only his class, but the YEAR is a bit much. That student who spent the whole year studying? Nah, screw him, second place. It just doesn't make sense. That said, especially for people who are going to be first year beacon students, never say the OC is the best in the year. It is blatantly saying "My OC is better than everyone else." because if HE got the top spot, clearly nobody else had a higher mark than him.

Lastly, you state that him drinking pop gives him higher speed than physically possible...? That... really needs to be altered.... For the above reasons, Rejected.

--RP Moderation Team--