Talk:Ferrol Nightingale/@comment-25924729-20200202070258

Very interesting, flawed character. In a good way, she would be interesting to write about in drama heavy RPs.

Appearance is good, personality is nice. I like the control freak that just means well vibe coming off her. Backstory has an interesting dynamic with her husband. I mean, after spending years studying a person's every move, unexpectedly developing feelings for them is an interesting idea. Messed up but quite romantic in a strange way.

All is fine until things come to her combat sections. I hope thats a typo in her abilities section cause shooting something at 8600 MILES is waaaay too much! Even the most skilled snipers and guns struggle to hit anything accurately past 1 or 2 miles, and i believe that should be the limit for her too. 8600 is unacceptable, she would basically be shooting people on entirely different continents that way o.o

Same goes for her pistol. Generally pistols are extremely close ranged weapons, though with enough skill it may be possible to hit stuff up to 100 yards away. Again, 1000 yards is too much. Both the pistol and rifle need massive nerfs in range.

Her weapon seems alright, flails are uncommon choice for weapon. I like that. However there is a primary with 3 forms (3 points), a secondary weapon (1 point) and her semblance pheonix form is unfortunately too close to flight, after discussion with other users and reviewers we have decided it warrants a poin deduction too (1 point). This puts her at a total of 5, you will have to remove a weapon form, the secondary weapon or the carrying flight ability of the pheonix to comly with the 4 point weapon limit rule.

Her semblance could use moe defined limits, such as the number of constructs she can make, the time limits they last or range she can control them, the durability of the construct etc.

Page lacts a Trivia section, and with it an explanation of a CNR. I assume Ferrol is a variation of Ferro, metal in latin iirc? Still it must be mentioned on the page.

So... yeah, grat character. Just some issues in her abilities, semblance and CNR. ONce those are fixed she's good to go~

Rejected.

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