Talk:RWBY and The Peak/@comment-192.200.149.144-20130604232822

Not bad. Cool story. Will be anticipating next chapter. Please continue.

So far, there isn't enough material for me to critically review, but it has the potential to become something awesome. However, there are some grammar issues, especially when the characters speak. For example,

“Let’s see if this works” Ruby said.

After works, there should be a comma.

Still, overall, nice piece of work. Will definitely be following. Hope you continue!