Talk:Rivern Haust/@comment-30803571-20190301175353

- CNR for "Rivern" checks out.

- appearance is lacking, there's little mention of what is what color which i'd say is necessary. more detail wouldn't hurt, the height comparison to the rest of his team doesn't really tell much as we don't know how tall his teammates are, addig information on how he compares to the average person would help.

- personality is fine.

- weapon is mostly fine, but the hoverboard form could be a bit better defined. for starters it's not clear if the hoverboard is bladed or not, as it says the blades retract yet they also form the body of the hoverboard. any other important details you may think off should also be added.

- semblance needs more detail. can he only alter his interaction with gasses in general or can it be with specific masses of gas or parts of them?, can he chose to ignore the physical interactions completely or is he always affected to a certain extent?, can he use his semblance to "swim" or walk on air?, all of these questions have to be answered, as well as any other important details you may think of.

- the abilities section is empty, you have to describe your character's abilities and their limits, stats are irrelevant.

- the is literally no backstory, you must make a proper backstory.

- last but not least there is no mention of what academy he and his team attend (or attended). the biggest problem though is that, having checked related pages, i found out the academy they belong to is a fanmade huntsmen academy, you can't do this. it has been repeatedly confirmed in canon that the only huntsmen academies that exist are the 4 associated with each kingdom, Beacon, Haven, Atlas and Shade. you can make fanmade institutions, combat schools included, but they can't be considered huntsmen academies nor have the same qualifications and/or authority.

decent start, but the page is barebones and linked to canon-conflicting work.

rejected for lacking in appearance, semblance, abilities and backstory. but most of all due to the made up huntsmen academy.

~RP moderation team~