Talk:Its ya nigga Afina Sundae/@comment-27603392-20140513042035

There isn't anything that appears to be out of place, however, a few issue that need to be address.

Her weapon need to be explained further: Which part of it is the Dust cannon ? I assumed her weapon can't be made from wood used to make baseball bat, as it can easily comburst from within when she fires Dust projectiles.

Her ability need to be explained further as well, as it's appeared to be lacking. Her flaws wasn't specific, so you can add a little bit more in.

Though there is nothing wrong with Ozpin noticing her ability and suggesting her going to Beacon, I find it overused and at some point cliche. You do not need to change this part, but it will gives bonus point if you do.

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