Talk:Cyanide Charleston/@comment-13593058-20180315224150

Aeron Tepes Review

Appearance
Description of appearance present.

Personality
Present but unnecessarily wordy.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon rules followed.

Semblance is contadictory. Now I'm not sure how you wanted this ability to turn out, but my guess is you wanted an advantage over individuals who do not have nightvision over the Faunus. Biological nightvision works on the basis that there is still light present, just not enough for animals, like humans, to pick up. So by that definition, the sphere doesn't truly blot out all light because, well, Cyanide can still see in it, which doesn't make sense. Either the sphere blocks out all light and nobody inside it can see, even Cyanide and Faunus (see Selective Semblances in the guidelines), or the sphere darkens the are it covers to the point where only Faunus and individuals with nightvision can see within it. Artificial light should still work. Grounds for rejection.

Backstory
Backstory present.

Miscellaneous
Colour reference mentioned, but not entirely accurate. Cyanide is also a molecule, so anyone thinking about the colour reference would think of the poison, not the colour cyan. However, since cyanide technically has a colour (white, in its salt form of Sodium cyanide), it's not grounds for rejection.

Verdict: Rejected
On the grounds of:

- Semblance contradition

Review Summary
Nothing too standout about this character, what I would work on is shortening a lot of the page to only information that is relevent. This is especially true with the personality and backstory as both were a chore to get through.

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