Talk:Navy Da Vinci/@comment-24678303-20150706085901

In the weapon, you say each handgun has 35 round "clips". The word you are looking for is "Magazine" or "Mags". Also, more specifications are required for the weapons. How powerful are they? What all are they capable of?

The Semblance is unacceptable, regardless of limits put on it, which there are none. It breaks the no limits fallacy in that it gives her unlimited stamina. That's never okay in any regard. Increased stamina would be alright, but you also have to put limits on it regardless. Plus, the whole "keeping pursuit until she defeats all enemies" is bad. Please don't do that.

The backstory is...Very bare bones and doesn't have much to speak of. If you could elaborate upon this some more, that will help your character a lot.

Also, you do know there is a quote template, right?

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~