Talk:Aurea Melankranz/@comment-24487330-20140307011541

First of all, congratulations on your character being accepted!

Second, sorry this review is coming around so late; things have been a bit busy for me.

Appearance section: Very neat and orderly, no issues with structure. My only concern is with her casual outfit: it seems very lacking in coverage, lacking enough that it might raise some concerns with fellow students and/or Beacon faculty. I know that you explain it later on, but it still catches my attention. Am I just experiencing a faulty imagination, or is that what you intended for her character?

Personality section: The whole two-sided personality thing seems a bit played-out, but maybe that's just because I've got someone on my team who does something similar. Anyway, the shameless social aspect gives you a lot of room for shonen-manga-style comic relief and/or sexy times, which are usually entertaining. The problem I have is with her "no holds barred" combatant aspect; it directly contradicts her upbringing, which you profess as emphasizing "nobility, honor, and kindness". It might help to specify that this education applies only to her social side, while her barbaric nature takes control in combat.

History section: This is one of the shorter history entries I've seen, but it does what it's meant to do - describing the key elements that have shaped Aurea into who she is at present - so it's no big deal.

Combat section: Very descriptive. The weapon, Crash Soldier, is original, unusual, and interesting, all of which make me want to see it in action. Savage Cerberus also sounds like one awesome piece of hardware. (Note to self: add non-combat proficiencies section to Camo's profile. That was a nice touch.)

Final verdict: aside from a couple points that stood out to me, Aurea has a solid profile with plenty of detail behind her. I'm tempted to give it a 9/10, but my misgivings are my own, and they don't necessarily need fixing as much as they could just use clarification, so I think you deserve a 10/10. Well done, and best of luck in the future; I'm looking forward to seeing how Aurea develops as a character.