Talk:Steel Soul/@comment-24087318-20140804010530

Okay, while I'm not an official reviewer on this Fanon anymore, I feel that this needs to be conglomerated.

While the Fanon does allow a certain extention of Alternate Universes in some of its Roleplay forums, for the most part, Character bios are written in a manner that matches them best with canon locations, lore, and other such elements. Certain things (such a Dimensional Traveling) are not a part of RWBYs canonical world and lore, and thusly do not count.

Which means the first step in having this page cleaned up and better formatted would be to change it to fit the established canon world of RWBY, not an alternate universe that stretches the boundaries of what's possible, and has/allows things that the Canon world doesn't have.

Moving on, as others have stated, the whole "Spirit" sort of element is a very vague way to describe something, and lends people to thinking it's actual spiritual energy. While such an energy DOES indeed exist, as Aura, the energy of ones soul, and a key part in being a Huntsmen/Huntress, even it doesn't posess these same properties as you've described Spirit. And if the energy is indeed more electrical or what-not in function, it would also not be capable of some of its described abilities. (Barriers of electricity/electromagnetism would not block anything, just electrocute anybody who hit it with something conductive.)

The element Elysianium and Elysium crystals are not canonical either, we do not know what exactly comprised weaponry in RWBY, if it's a special material, or your typical iron and steel, or what. And is best left off a page until we have more clarification of exactly how those function in canon.

The whole Spirit concept, as well as the Elysium crystals in particular seems like a complete carbon-copy of Dust as well, especially when you compare them to ways some weapons channel and control Dust, and Dust crystals itself.

The weapons themselves, there's not a problem with most of their functions, read MOST, but use of this fanmade material starts breaking things, you could easily dial it back to utilizing Dust and still have a lot to work with.

I will be honest, you can easily remove the stuff about the unique element in general, and replace it with Dust and possibly a Semblance to help control it and you'd have nearly the same fighting style, just written in a way that fits tight with the world of RWBY. You'd just need to look back at the complexity of some of your weapons. Characters in Canon don't even utilize that much weaponry, with that many different abilities and uses.

In short, your character has enough of an arsenal to outfit two, maybe even three whole characters and still be on a power-level to a standard Beacon student. I could see, if you tuned some things and tweaked a few more, you'd have a very good character that'd fit right in with the world of RWBY, but right now he seems like he comes from a different sort of thing entirely. A different world with entirely different rules that does not fit right now at all. While it's an Alternate Universe by your description, it's a universe that does not fit at all.

In conclusion to all this though, if I can even shorten it all to a sentence or two. You have many, many many ideas. But most of these ideas stretch or outright ignore what we know about canon, or add things that so far are not seen to be possible, or even plausible. The Fanon doesn't quite fit with Alternate Universes that stretch boundaries like your characters does, and prefers those whom fit in perfectly with the canon world 100%. And I see a lot of potential that you can use to create amazing characters that fit perfectly within these boundaries.

To quote Monty Oum himself, "Setting rules that are difficult to overcome is hard, but that's why we do it!" Try to work these ideas into the rules the Canon gives, it'll be a challenge, but if you overcome it, you'll do amazing.

~Somebody on Staff cut me a check.~