User blog:Legends Storyteller/Feedback needed!

Hi everyone! Hope you're doing fine! Well actually there aren't many people around here now, and I'm probably asking at the wrong moment ^^'.

A little while ago, I posted a blog about a trailer for my serie Duodecim Personae, and an other one to say it had finally started (on Fanfiction.net though). What about now? Well I've already written a prologue and three chapters, and I finally posted them here on the fanon. The fourth chapter is being written and I am wondering something basic yet so important: is it good?

The first chapters of a serie are, in my opinion, the most important. It's after reading these that reader will decide to follow the serie or not. And sadly, the feedback on Fanfiction.net is... well isn't. No positive feedback, no negative feedback, no feedback at all. That's why I turn to you, fellow fanon members, to tell me what you think of it.

P.S: If anyone has question about the serie in itself, I'd be glad to answer them.

P.S 2: If someone here is knowledgeable about old english, please tell me if there's any mistake in the prologue.