Talk:Gotham/@comment-24678303-20150210181528

Okay, long story short, this is the very definition of and overpowered Mary-Sue. Let's go over things, shall we?

In the backstory, you state a character in a place that does NOT exist in the RWBYverse doing something that is literally impossible with Grimm. The whole History section is an unattractive text wall that essentially contains bad fanfiction that does not fit into the RWBYverse in any way shape or form. I'm not even going to go into specifics.

Next up, we have the general information. If that is her name, you name the page that, not her nickname or whatever. Explain to me how the bloody hell she has an "Unknown Age"? I would say the eyes are unacceptable, but then again we have seen a Canon character with white eyes, so i digress. You can NOT have a character be anything besides Human or Faunus, much less "formerly human", whatever that means.

Her personality is three sentences, each one cringeworthy. They are basically some mindless psychopath Mary-Sue.

The Apperance...No. I just- no.

I've only skimmed after that, but a big problem is that you have your character talking to just about EVERY Main Canon Character. That is a huge nono.

Long story short, this OC is really bad. I don't even know what was passing through your mind when creating this, but i suggest you take yourself over to the guides and study them VERY CAREFULLY before you try again, or i am going to pop a blood vessel.

Uber-Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

And for the record, with that last paragraph goes to show that you KNEW that you were doing a bad, yet you did it anyway. Please refraim from doing things like this in the furture.