Talk:Richard Oráiste/@comment-24678303-20180218014008

There's just a few issues with this.

Firstly, you have his mouth listed as the Faunus trait as well as scales on his back. This breaks the rule of having more than one Faunus trait and since you already have art showing the mouth, I'd just get rid of the scale patches on his back.

Second, there's a discrepancy regarding the cooldown of his Semblance. On the actual Semblance section, it says it has a 45 minute cooldown, but under Weaknesses, it has a 10 minute cooldown. Both are pretty excessively long tbh. You could probably do 5 minutes and be fine. Though, I will mention that anything between him and someone/something emitting heat, such as a person, would disturb the sightline of his thermal vision, so long as it was thick enough, as well as things that are excessively cold, such as a snowstorm or cold fog. Just thought I'd throw out some things about Thermals while I was at it.

But, yeah, otherwise, I believe he looks fine. Rejected for now.

~RP Moderation Team~