Talk:Niebieski Zlota Tarcza/@comment-10337166-20161027162818

Backstory is a mess, you make mention of different ages when he supposedly goes to Atlas, it is in desprate need of being formatted, and I can barely follow it as is. Add paragraphs, read it over, make sure it makes sense, and don't just throw it back in pending 5 minutes after i review it.

Rejected

~RP Moderation Team~