Talk:Kage Kitsune/@comment-27743663-20161224223350

CNR checks out.

Appearance is fine.

Personality is fine.

Backstory has some probblems. He's been doing all this training, right? Yet he hasn't even gotten out of Primary School. He's not even 13 yet at this time. Besides that, the training itself. I highly doubt a Special Ops force made to solely take down Hunters is a thing, given most of the world's primary focus is on Grimm. If for whatever reason they wanted to take down a Hunter, they'd call another one. it mentions the Beacon fall, but him not even going to Beacon, or leaving Atlas in the first place.

Weapon is fine.

Semblance I'm having a bit of trouble understanding. He can either turn into smoke for a second, or create smoke. It's mainly the wording that's getting me, since you say "disperse into." If it's the former and he can turn into smoke, it's rejected. If it's the latter and he just  lets it out, it's still rejected since it needs demerits. In that sense, something like a cool-down, because it doesn't matter if it lasts for a second if he can just spam it. Also if he can creatte smoke, it works both ways ad he wouldn't be able to see either.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Backstory

- Semblance unclear on effects, needs demerits

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