Talk:Amet Revfold/@comment-13172690-20140710162627

Review Requested by Amet Revfold

Well first, I wanted to make a suggesion with the name meaning of Ametista. I know that you did say the meaning and the representation of the meaning and the color in one sentence. To not confuse the reader, you can add the meaning to the trivia so the name does mean Amethyst in italian (looked it up. lol).

Personality and appearance are well written, no problems there and interesting to read. Now for the backstory.

His background looks good since you went in more detail with the Kying Clan and added a small section of it for readers to refer later in the profile. Your were also specific on how he hid from the white fang and the way he got the information and forging his information for his transcript. Frankly, that was pretty clever on his part since he must have seen so many from mail sorting.

After reading his fighting style, his weapon and abilities, the semblance is viable since it assists him with dodging attacks since he is defensive according to what you wrote in the section. The weapon is creative and i could see it work because of the sword being the large size. You were very specific on the transformations and the abilities that each possessed. Though the fast loading of fenice, feel that you can say how long it take like a second or two. Maybe you could go into a little more detail with Kindoturi and how to use it since im pretty curious with how it can be used in the midst of a fight according to what it said in the section. For the gloves, you could also add that into weapons if you wanted to. Overall, the three sections look good since its consistant and doesn't really go out of bounds anywhere.

Some minor improvements but in my eyes, accepted.