Talk:Alexandre Obsidian/@comment-25924729-20181108070103

A lot of problems with this character, lets see... Appearance, personality and weapon sections are fairly short, but not really a problem, these get a pass.

Cybernetic energy isn't a thing, unless you mean enhanced strength granted by robotic parts. Even then it's more of a weapon or utility thing, not a semblance. Being granted a semblance through cybernetic enhancement is not allowed. That being said, what you described sounds like a regular semblance energy/strength boost, which is passable. There's just nothing cybernetic about it, and i suggest you remove mention of cybernetics completely.

Making small organizations like Seraph and Sir's Council is alright, but you cannot make a 5th proto kingdom. Something like that is too large in scale and will break canon lore. At the very most you can make a town or small city for refugees, not an entire kingdom or country.

Visterok the Grimm Wizard is.... very iffy. Like, at the time im making this review the show doesnt suggest that Grimm people other than Salem exist. However recent episodes will tell us more about Salem's origins, and may allow for other beings like Visterok to exist. For this reason now im hesitant to reject Visterok, but i'll label it as Awaiting Canon Information.

Alexander as a name doesn't comply with the colour name rule. Obsidian is a valid name, but the colour must be in the first name, or a combination of first and last names to give a meaning. You cannot have the colour be in his last name alone.

Rejected.

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