Talk:Ceruleo Mondlicht/@comment-25924729-20200215055257

Aight, finally getting to this one. Looks pretty good for a first OC.

Appearance and personality are alright. Backstory is actually interesting, nice to read. Its rare to see an OC that DOESNT want to be a Huntsman for once. It would have been actually very nice if he wasnt good at fighting at all, even with Dust. We sorely need more civillians or huntsman support OCs in this server imo... but thats a little off topic, sorry. He's cool.

General abilities are fine. His semblance is probably the only real problem with this page imo. Its actually very unique in how it works, manipulating Dust and infusing it into objects being used to buff people too. Its very versatile and powerful, but can be allowed due to him being weaker in other areas balancing it out. I'll draw the line at discovering and using new dust types unknown to anyone else though. Mechanically that could lead to some very overpowered abilities being suddenly pulled out, and comes very close to making major discoveries potentially infringing on canon.

Some of the buffs also dont make sense... like, im struggling to figure out how water increases accuracy, ice helps evasiveness etc. What does evasiveness even mean? Something like reflexes to dodge and block attacks? And what does it mean by blocking aura using HL dust? Some of these definitely need better explanations.

Its optional to add limits to his weapons too, such as maximum range, shot power and amount of ammo. Just to get a better idea how strong it is.

Trivia section is fine, CNR is valid. I like that you credit the original artists of the artwork, thats very nice.

So yeah, the biggest issue is in the semblance, but some small tweaks in the weapon are also suggested. NIce try.

Rejected.

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