Talk:Acteon Erasmus/@comment-24262164-20131229155637

Kadmus. Moving right alone.

So, teenage rebelion is right. However, this is a bit of a problem. Your character single handedly attacked an organization that rivals the largest organization in the RWBY-verse thus far? Then he steals money from the CEO? Why would a CEO just keep a safe full of money in his office? After that, does he expect to get away with this? Your character is useing a very unique weapon, so it might not be so hard to pick you out. Even with Ozpin's protection, he's dealing with a massive company.

The "dust slurry" is cool. That has some potential. I think the weapon could use a little work. You were talking about it a bit more in the chat and I think you mentioned something about the fuled being kept in the shield. That's cool. It also doesn't really have a transformation which is kind of a bummer. I mentioned before how you should be careful with the word "glyph". Glyphs are the things the Weiss creates with her semblance and using that word without properly knowing what it means could be a problem. At the moment I'm having a hard time imagining what a glyph like engravings do... and for that matter how they are adjustable.

Personality is fine. I would suggest staying away from saying things like "earned him respect among peers, and disdain among supervisors". That isn't a personality trait, it's a result of his personality. It assumes that supervisors are these control freaks and that all peers secretly just want to revolt.

What is a tricorne-like hat? I know what a tricorne hat is so are you just trying to get the hat without looking like a colonial man?