Talk:Hayden Smoke/@comment-8182065-20180102040452

Question seeing how you're putting your OC up for review: do you intend to RP with this character, or are you just trying to get some critique on your OC's?

If the former, I don't see a functioning RP working out if Hayden (and several other OC's I've noticed of yours) have well... bit the dust. Mainly because you didn't state when they died. Was it before the Battle of Beacon? Did they die during or after it?

If the latter, you've got a lot of fleshing out to do. Description and examples are your best friends when it comes to creating an OC. You don't even have any personality traits listed, it just skips down to the "Backstory" which doesn't even say much about her background.

If you need some tips, just ask any other users, take a look at their creations, and even some of the guides created on the Fanon.