Talk:Hashigo Burakku/@comment-27743663-20161211032858

Can't find a source for CNR. For future reference, start linking them to make things easier.

Apperance, he has 2 noted faunus traits. You can only have one.

Peronsality is barebones and doesn't have much to offer, but it's the bare minimum to pass. Barely.

Backstory is a no. It's fine to use the White Fang as a minor thing, but you essentially set up their first big operation and painted this guy as the target. That crosses fanon-canon interaction.

Weapon, fanmade material eh? No. Nothing wrong with having one, but one noted to cut through tank armor? And is noted to pretty much be perfect? Having a sword melded with every Dust sounds like it's just clash against itself and not work at all either. I'd say stick to 1, 2 at max.

Semblance doesn't have any limiations. While time perception is fine, it's largely frowned upon for lack of creativity. Besides that, he could pretty much keep it up forever. No cooldown, no maximum time, no cost to use it. Nothing.

Skills, some note of what the 12 Elemental forces even are would be appreciated. As it is now, it's just some vague fighting style that may or may not be slightly supernatural based. Can't expect someone to know something that doesn't exist.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- CNR

- Two faunus traits

- White-Fang canon-fanon motivation

- Weapon

- Semblance lacking demerits

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