Talk:Jackie Weston/@comment-24087318-20140107073416

Aura doesn't posess talents or abilities that would be attuned towards certain Dust elements.

In addition, her first weapon, Jade Furies, bear a striking resemblance to Yangs Ember Celica weapon, only with more features built into it, as well if it uses two different calibers of bullets, it would need separate ammunition for both forms. Her Sapphire Crushers are more than fine though.

Beyond this, the character seems scattered and contradictory in a few places, acting cool during brawls, but playing it aggressive during good and likely more serious fights.

Other than that, the whole page is rather oddly written and paced, with a few errors in spelling as well as an overall clutter and lack of detail. She's 35 years old and seems to have quite a bit of an interesting history given all she's done. Many questions remain unanswerered. Why she even went to Beacon as a kid, why she went back as a teacher, and how she was accepted for both of these positions, among other things. Her appearance section as well needs more detail and a little more explaination. "Main costume consist of having a green scarf her mouth" Doesn't quite make sense no matter how long I look at it.

Suggest going back over the page and re-writing anything that appears oddly placed or written, as well as dealing with the above feedback, and adding more detail concerning matters like her personality and history.

As such, Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~