Talk:FenHong Se Suzhen/@comment-13593058-20160319032833

 A Review of  FenHong Se Suzhen

Appearance
Nothing technical to note. Appearance does not interfere with Fanon Rules.

Personality
Point of personality made, nothing major to note.

Weapons and Abilities
Weapon rule followed, Semblance is acceptable.

No significant comment on fighting style.

Backstory
Nothing worthy to note. No contradictions.

Miscellaneous
 Colour referenced and source checks out.*

Verdict: Accepted
On the grounds of:

- N/A

Review Summary
Nothing unacceptable about the character but as a Chinese person myself, I found the name rather strange. I'll also take a wild guess that you may be a speaker yourself and this may just be just a difference of Cantonese vs Mandarin of which I use Cantonese.

 "Fěnhóng sè" (粉紅色) when spoken technically literally means "The colour pink". As in pink the colour as a physical concept (to my knowledge) so it's rather weird in this kind of context I think when adding Su Zhen ( 素貞)   at the end there.

 I don't know it sounds rather awkward to me. If my Mandarin isn't as rusty I would be more confident in saying this but by using  (粉紅色) it would be proper to use ( 粉紅色的素貞) literally reading as "Suzhen of the Pink" or even ( 粉紅素貞), "Pink Su Zhen". When I read it out in both Cantonese-Chinese and Mandarin, both sound better gramatically in my opinion but when I read  (粉紅色 素貞 ) it sounds like... well, it's rather hard to describe. The ( 色) character here is the character for colour, literally, so it's kind of redundant in there and kind gives the two characters ( 粉紅) "pink" a status of being a proper noun.

 It then clashes with ( 素貞 ) which is a proper name in Chinese Tradition (Mythology? Opera? Legend...) I don't celebrate  Qingming Jie (清明节) with my family but my intuition says it's a proper noun and a known name.

 I don't know, It's not a big deal, it just got me thinking that was all.

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<p style="font-weight:normal;font-size:14px;line-height:22px;"> Side note here:

Lie Ren is probably the most sophisticated name referencing with both Chinese and Japanese definitions used, Ren being "lotus" in Japanese and also the same  pronunciation as "person, man or individual" in Chinese/Mandarin. In full, his Chinese denfition of Lie Ren means "Hunter". He's basically a giant shitstorm of references, not sure if Monty came to the Japanese or Chinese first.

Yang and her father is just lazy writing. Really? Yang Xiao Long and then the father is Tai Yanf Xiao Long? They literally mean the same thing despite the technicality of Yang being "light" and Tai Yang meaning "Sun". That's stupid. Yang almost always alludes to the sunlight with the addition of Tai being more specific. They literally have the same name if you aren't being picky.