Talk:Onyx Rocker/@comment-15841787-20130819232158

A bit or two of criticism

"Onyx Rocker" sounds like a cheap stage name for a rock star.

"Onyx Rocker is one of the main characters"... main characters? of what?

Did you really use a near-legendary LP song as your character theme? I just... *winces*

It appears that this character doesn't have any art that isn't stolen from an anime. If you're not going to use original art, at least credit where it came from.

The outfit you described in his appearance doesn't match the picture at all

His personality conflicts. Does he come off as mean and ice-cold, or is he quite nice to people?

You did a terrible job of explaining what his weapon is or how it functions

So he is not only a powerful heavy-hitter, but also very fast and with high endurance/stamina? Wow, can you say overpowered?

All in all, it was nice for what appears to be a first attempt, but could use some serious refinement.