User blog:Blume313/rwby team part-3 prototype - looking for help on this one

ok its apparent my last 2 blogs were fucking horrible so im looking to you guys to help me with this one give me feedback if you think there is anything wrong with this one so i can fix it or make it better cuz im getting alot of negative feedback so since im just a noob at making oc's why dont you guys give me feedback on how i can fix this clusterfuck of mine CUZ I JUST WANT TO MAKE A GOOD ONE ALREADY note this one is still in development so please dont hate it :( :( :( :(



 JAMES HARKIN



 NAME MEANING : Male Irish/Gaelic name meaning "dark red" (last name) - couldnt find anything for his first name



 NICKNAMES : Harkin (sometimes called by his last name) - Jim - H



 GEAR : white short sleeve shirt/shirt pocket/sunglasses - Black soldiers breastplate (family heirloom passed down from his great grandfather who served in the infantry during The Great War) (picture enclosed) - black jeans - black fingerless gloves/emblem on right glove - black military boots



 NOTABLE MARKINGS : tribal tattoo starting at left shoulder and ending at just above the elbow



 BASED OFF OF : robin hood



 SKIN : white



 HAIR : black (faux hawk)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> EYES : green

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> AGE : 17

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> BUILD : athletic

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> HEIGHT : 6’ 1”

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> FAVORITE COLOR : crimson

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> CHARACTER COLOR : blue (blue represents professionalism, loyalty, reliability, honor and trust hence his skill with a bow his loyalty to his team and his reliability in combat)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> FAVORITE MUSIC : dubstep - country - rock - metal

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> FAVORITE SONG : Come With Me Now by Kongos (or a custom song that RT comes up with)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> RELATIONSHIPS : Ruby-friend - Yang-friend - Blake-best friend - Weiss-enemy later friends - Jaune-friend - Ren-friend - Nora-friend - Pyrrha-friend - Velvet-friend - CoCo-friend

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> NOTABLE LOVE INTERESTS : Katherine Fisher (member of team)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> SEMBLANCE : James’ semblance is that he can create a shockwave whilst in combat to dispatch a large amount of enemies he does this by simply smashing his fist into the ground and creating a visible 6ft shockwave (about the same as a grenade) that knocks back most enemies but it can also harm friendlies so he only uses this when he’s a good distance away from his team note this does not harm him in any way, he uses this when he has more enemies on his hands than he can deal with so he uses this mainly as crowd control because it’s acts much like a natural grenade he named his semblance “recoil”

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> AURA : he can create a blue colored shield like ren that blocks incoming attacks mainly melee attacks but it can also deflect ranged attacks like arrows and small caliber bullets similar to Jason’s aura

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> WEAPONS : Recurve Bow/Machete hybrid weapon - pistol - Knife - Lua fist-fighting (unarmed)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';"> WEAPON NAMES : Apollo (bow) - Razors Bane/Blademans Charm (machetes) - Wasp (Pistol) - Shrapnel (Knife)

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<p style="margin-top:0px;margin-bottom:0px;line-height:normal;font-family:'ArialNarrow';">Please give me any feedback if you think it needs work