Talk:Michael Charleston/@comment-24262164-20140704063104

[http://www.reddit.com/r/RWBYOC/comments/29sya3/feedback_on_my_oc/ I'm responding to this request. ]

This all looks pretty good. I know nothing about the formal organizations in the military but that all looks fairly legit.

Two things concern me. First, is it reasonable for Michael to bring food to Isabel? Would he have the free time to spend with her? Would he be allowed to leave to camp and go to some undisclosed location for hours at a time, with enough food and water for another person? Also would he have an interest in learning how to fight with her weapon? The guy seems more like a pacifist.

Second, this situation between Michael, Isabel, and Li. They get serounded by guys, and take some of them (as in there are still some around, right?) out, and then Li shoots Isabel, and she has this touching moment with Michael. Does all the chaos just stop for them to have this moment? Wouldn't Li want to make sure that the person he just shot was actually dead, and maybe take out that sympathiser right next to her? Why is General Li even out here? What events transpire that put a General into the middle of a prison break? Finally, when Michael fights the General, where is everyone else? Surely the General is being protected or something.

Also, his parents are just, never a factor in his life? I wouldn't require you to give more info on his family, I just find it unrealistic to just try and get rid of the parents as fast as possible.