User blog comment:StarlightAT/Original Story Synopsis/@comment-13488655-20150219224729/@comment-13488655-20150220134658

o.o It's not so much what you do, it's more how you do it. I mean, most i got was two kids started dating each other after their parents disappeared and somehow hell opened up and they're at a school that teaches them to fight demons. That just leaves me with a big question mark as to what's going on.

I don't really get the setting except that there's a house, hell and some sort of school with kids who hate life. o.o It's creative, but you need to try to make it sound better  and more appealing

(Plus i was giving a small summary of a summary as an example o.o not exactly what it said)