Talk:Yu'Long Diāo/@comment-30530552-20190105033928

Alright, we're gonna jump off of Delta's notes below and see what changes you've made to try and alleviate the highlighted issues. Sound good? Alright, let's get to it.

Backstory-wise, it's a lot clearer what her origins are and what's going on with her, though I do feel like the page could read a little more smoothly grammar and spelling-wise. If this is only because English isn't your first language, then feel free to disregard this for the most part.

Semblance has also been improved to where I'm okay with allowing it through due to it's simplicity.

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Overall, all thoughts aside from potententially needing grammar and spelling fixes for readability, the character itself works and I don't have any issues with her. If you could also link how you got her CNR or explain that a bit further in the future, that'd be much appreciated. I've only gotten to bits and pieces of it, not the whole thing.

-Accepted.

~RP Moderation Team~

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