Talk:Alexander Orkid/@comment-24487330-20140206000039

Appearance section: the description is good, but the part describing Xander's outfit seems a little jumbled. I'd suggest grouping together details about the same article of clothing.

Personality section: you may already be aware of this, but in my experience, most characters with two distinct patterns of behavior switch between the two when a certain breaking point is reached. In Xander's case, it seems to happen when his allies are endangered; how bad does the situation need to be before he loses it and turns to his aggressive tendencies?

Abilities section: I don't see any problems here; the description sets Xander up as a combatant who favors mobility and flexibility to raw strength in battle. I did notice that there's no in-depth info on either his Aura or his Semblance. Were these bits omitted on purpose, or was it just an innocent mistake?

Backstory section: I enjoyed reading Xander's backstory; I found it to be an easy, light-hearted story, which was kind of refreshing to me personally. I'm curious about his mission to liberate his hometown from those who threaten it, though; he seems to be affiliated with Beacon, so is this objective an academic undertaking or a personal one? In the case of the latter, does it take priority of his school life?

Weapon section: a simple but effective explanation for a simple but effective weapon (which, by the way, looks really cool). I can really appreciate the symmetry in that. I might have chosen to put this section with the Abilities, since they're both related to combat, but that's a personal preference, so I won't hold it against you.

Overall, I like Xander's design; he's a cool, empathetic guy with some ace potential as a Huntsman and even a plot-related direction on which to start him out. I give the profile's current iteration a 9/10, the only point being docked for a couple nit-pick-y items regarding organization and clarification.