Talk:Geom-Eun Danjigja/@comment-27743663-20161215004039

CNR checks out, if somewhat oddly given your apparent skewering of the Korean language.

Appearance is there now, so fine.

Personality is fine.

Backstory there's still issues. It's fine to have him as a dangerous criminal, but don't go forcing people onto him on a whim. That's just a note though, the other note is with LivGrid. While being so apparently noticable, don't go having it influence anything in canon. It's not major in the grand scheme of the World much, especially since the White Fang has the world's attention canon-wise.

Weapon/Equipment, where on earth does it fit all those on his person? Given his appearance, it's pretty much impossible for him to carry all those by himself without a bag or something. Even if he did, they would weigh him down a good amount.

Semblance, raise the time-limit to get data on something. Or, make it proportional. A toaster ain't going to have the same amount of data as a laptop, so it makes sense which one will take longer.

Using every weapon effectively, especially in RWBY, is highly unlikely. This is even more unlikely given just what ARE the weapons in RWBY. That's a note. His stats also don't match up. His evasion is noted to be a 10/10, but have average speed.

On that, his hacking itself. Taking a game's way of hacking, simplified hacking at that, doesn't work. His scroll wouldn't even be able to connect to any systems unless he knew the password himself, which I doubt he does. If it's by means of brute force, that makes him the easiest to track hacker ever. Essentially, his way of hacking doesn't work, or that effectively, if at all. Really, the only way he'd be able to do it would be to use his semblance to touch something first then use the scroll, since his Semblance would do all the hacking and his scroll would act like the unlock.

Tl;dr

Rejected on:

- Equipment amount + Carryability

- Weakness inconsistency

- Scroll hacking doesn't work.

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