Talk:Katsune "Kitty" Akatsuya/@comment-31408668-20190304094555

COLOR NAME REFERENCE

Color name reference recognized. Akatsuya is the conjunction of the Japanese words aka, meaning red, and tsuya, meaning either glow or luster.

APPEARANCE

Concise and detailed, paints a good picture. Her look would be rather striking, which I like with our colorful cast. Good design. No problems here.

PERSONALITY

The facade of shyness covering the more explosive reality. It's a classic really and builds a certain type of character. It might be nice to see her evolve and open up even more. No obvious contradictions. No major problems here.

BACKSTORY

As much as I don't like using it my own stories, it is good to see some representation of the apparent racism against Faunus. It is a dark backstory, but it has those slight reprieves of light that help it out. However, there is not talk about the Vytal Festival or the fall of Beacon, and while I can't reject you for it, I feel like that should be there when Akatsuya is a student at Beacon. No stepping on canon toes. No major problems here.

WEAPONS AND COMBAT

Weapon is within guideline specifications. We have a single, transforming primary in the form of Heaven's Fang. Heaven's Fang is very well described, it has a lot of detail in it with it's forms, which is very good. It paints a very clear picture. No problems here.

As for her skills wtth her weapons, it isn't defined much in this, so I assume they aren't crazy. One thing I like a lot, that I wish other people did, is you have defined how she has trained to use her Aura. Very nice to know. No problems here.

SEMBLANCE

So, is the Semblance called Foxfire or Kinesis? Because it has two names. For this review, I will assume it is called Foxfire, but that should be fixed. The Semblance has been more defined, albeit loosely defined. I would recommend being more specific, but it works for now. No major problems here.

CONCLUSION: REJECTED (Earth entertainment in Remnant still not removed, conflicting Semblance name.)

'''Be careful when reading the review to actually account for everything. it was laid out very clearly. If it's changed, Akatsuya would be accepted, but until then, no.'''