Talk:Triton Lethe/@comment-24678303-20151212002036

Disappointed in the review? Son,you just incurred my wrath.

For one, starting with the CharBox, it states that his Semblance is Glyphs, which is very vague and sounds like borderline copying. I'll come back to that later.

The appearance is fairly standard, although I looked over the back story and couldn't find anything for the three scars, so it just seems like it was added for the sake of looking edgier.

The personality has a bit of contradiction. It says that he is careless and unfeeling, but then goes on to say he is very caring of his friends? Though, I do admire the fact that he's not just focusing on fighting Grimm for the sake of it and that he actually has a medical disorder causing it, so props for that. Though, it is mentioned that he got the scars from the aforementioned Grimm attack, but again, the scars are not mentioned in the Back story itself, so fix that.

Next, for the back story, he had a tragic history. Can't say I'm surprised in the slightest. Fits the cliche you have going. But, that's besides the point. The main problem I have with it is that you have him as had gone to Signal for one year, dropped out for a couple, then attended the past before going to Beacon? Son, I don't think you get how schools work. For one, he should be a bit older than 17 if all this is the case. Two, I severely doubt they would let him get away with skipping two whole years of academy training. He would have missed SO MUCH, it's  not gonna fly. Plus, nothing thus far has told me he would have been qualified or ready to enter Beacon to begin with.

Next up are the weapons. Now, the gauntlets seem alright...But the scalpel? The fuck? For one, that's impractical, given the power of things in RWBY plus his weapons anyway. Two, why the shit is he using a scalpel??? That just screams edgy to me as much as it is needlessly tacked on.

As for his Semblance, it's not as bad as the "name" in the charbox led me to believe. Though, I see a severe lack of any kind of limiters to his Semblance, such as how long and how often he can use it. But yes, what Leaf said previously is apparent in this, especially with what I'm seeing with the next paragraph.

There is a TON of strong points that...Frankly, don't seem to make a lot of sense (balance-wise). In essence, there's too little bad to balance the good out, making him quite a powerful little bugger. Nerf his needlessly powerful natural skills and that can be fixed.

Rejected.

~RP Moderation Team~

Also, word to the wise, it's in your best interests not to sass the reviewers.