Talk:Alon Behrooz/@comment-27984338-20161013135711

Ok, so heres my takes of this stuff

Good stuff:

Idea of a turtle faunus

Semblance idea

Bad stuff:

Weight and height

Weakness doesnt fit animal well, so doesnt strengths

Improve:

Try to make the strengths and weaknesses match the animal

Add some weight on her, not 500 lbs hacker weight, but a bit more.

Swap the strengths and weaknesses around, so shes slower, but tougher since she has a shell.

Add:

Stat chart

History/everything else, its a good OC, and i will love to see it done and drawn.

Rating: a good start, and though missing things, and a few reality checks needed, the design is solid, the ideas are good, and is well detailed.

Ideas:

Description: 8

Grammar: 10

Reality: 4

Weapons: n/a (n/a is automatic 5)

Backstory: n/a

Rating: 7/10